The 23rd Psalm
From where my thoughts originate78 total reviews
Comment from Kingsland
This is a six star piece of prose poetry. This has a poetic feel in it and it has an emotional output that speak to the poet, any poet. This was all that and a bag of chips. This was just an outstanding written piece that has a vivid score of what the poetic arts are for... John
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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This is a six star piece of prose poetry. This has a poetic feel in it and it has an emotional output that speak to the poet, any poet. This was all that and a bag of chips. This was just an outstanding written piece that has a vivid score of what the poetic arts are for... John
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Hi John, faithful reader of my work. Thank you so much for your caring and embracing words. God Bless.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Interesting!
Liked these lines especially: my blank paper bursts to overflow with a banquet of syllables dressed as seeds. Each seed becomes a blossom and my freckled fingers feel the call to gather its petals in a symphony of rhythms, music, light.
Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Interesting!
Liked these lines especially: my blank paper bursts to overflow with a banquet of syllables dressed as seeds. Each seed becomes a blossom and my freckled fingers feel the call to gather its petals in a symphony of rhythms, music, light.
Well done!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting in this work.
Comment from lola29
Wow! This is an outstanding entry, and a very inspiring read. Your writing is so elegant, and you certainly have a gift for articulation.
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Wow! This is an outstanding entry, and a very inspiring read. Your writing is so elegant, and you certainly have a gift for articulation.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Thank you for the great review dear friend.
Comment from pugrpoems
Good job!
I like psalm 23 very much. I just don't like the metaphors that have sexual connatations like "rod,seed, blossom, and sacred balm. My mind was not in the gutter. The last thing I read had mature content which I stopped reveiwing! I don't like giving negative reveiws to anyone. pugrpoems.
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Good job!
I like psalm 23 very much. I just don't like the metaphors that have sexual connatations like "rod,seed, blossom, and sacred balm. My mind was not in the gutter. The last thing I read had mature content which I stopped reveiwing! I don't like giving negative reveiws to anyone. pugrpoems.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Thank you for reading and commenting in this work.
Comment from Readywriter52
The description on why you write poetry is very good. We all have our reasons for writing. Your reasons sound almost spiritual I think there's a different reason for every person who writes.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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The description on why you write poetry is very good. We all have our reasons for writing. Your reasons sound almost spiritual I think there's a different reason for every person who writes.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Thank you for reading my work!
Comment from InHisownwrite
Love this whole piece....
My favorite: Each seed becomes a blossom and my freckled fingers feel the call to gather its petals in a symphony of rhythms, music, light.... You are an "open" vessel.....
Love it all the way through even after these lines.....
If you get a chance in my portfolio on the second page read,The Library of the Soul, Psalm 23.... I think it will bless you, as well... Bryan
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Love this whole piece....
My favorite: Each seed becomes a blossom and my freckled fingers feel the call to gather its petals in a symphony of rhythms, music, light.... You are an "open" vessel.....
Love it all the way through even after these lines.....
If you get a chance in my portfolio on the second page read,The Library of the Soul, Psalm 23.... I think it will bless you, as well... Bryan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Ohhh, thank you so much for telling that I am "an open vessel." God bless you!
Comment from Robert D Wilson
Nice personal application of Psalm From the Sheep by David. taking the words of the Great Poet of Israel and adapting them to your own situation. The passion in your words is very apparent and I can sense the catharsis that this revelation has given you.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Nice personal application of Psalm From the Sheep by David. taking the words of the Great Poet of Israel and adapting them to your own situation. The passion in your words is very apparent and I can sense the catharsis that this revelation has given you.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Hi Robert, oh yes, it was a catharsis when i discovered His revelations to me. Thank you for reading so well in between the lines. Bless you.
Comment from Minglement
Would that I had six stars left to give for this touching, poetic explanation of why you write poetry. Very profound and should have a good chance in the contest. Just lovely.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Would that I had six stars left to give for this touching, poetic explanation of why you write poetry. Very profound and should have a good chance in the contest. Just lovely.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Thank you much for all those stars dear writer. My best to you.
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You're so welcome. Well done. Take care, Marcia
Comment from june prescott
A very interesting way of putting why you write, associating it to the 23rd psalm. Your use of words is amazing and even this prose sounds like poetry. My favorite line is "overflow with a banquet of syllables dressed as seeds." Very well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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A very interesting way of putting why you write, associating it to the 23rd psalm. Your use of words is amazing and even this prose sounds like poetry. My favorite line is "overflow with a banquet of syllables dressed as seeds." Very well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Thank you June for reading and commenting in this work.
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My pleasure! :) Cheers, JP
Comment from irsajay
A very nice work, which tell about every author, poet, sculpturer, painter or what not. He who creates know the world of creation.
However a very small suggestin on this line--the verdant peak of a tree, the square root to infinity.
Since the the square root to infinity is metaphor for encapsulating the wisdom of thought in your essence, I would suggest to change "Verdant peak of tree" to "Inverted tree". The wisdom flows from the inverted tree as if it is poured from heaven. This is just my personal outlook.
Enjoyed your beautiful creation.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2010
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A very nice work, which tell about every author, poet, sculpturer, painter or what not. He who creates know the world of creation.
However a very small suggestin on this line--the verdant peak of a tree, the square root to infinity.
Since the the square root to infinity is metaphor for encapsulating the wisdom of thought in your essence, I would suggest to change "Verdant peak of tree" to "Inverted tree". The wisdom flows from the inverted tree as if it is poured from heaven. This is just my personal outlook.
Enjoyed your beautiful creation.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2010
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Hi irsajay! Thank you so much for comparing my writing to a sculpturer, painter. My best blessings to you as well in all your creative works.
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You are welcome.
