It's Complicated
Who decides who wins or loses in life60 total reviews
Comment from Ponder
Hi Author,
I hardly ever give out sixes but this piece of beautiful logic deserves a six for it's common asense approach to the important aspects of life.
I liked the idea of balance, too often people focus on one of life's aspects and forget the rest.
I thought this was a well written and well thought out essay. the argument is well reasoned and the writing is clear, with an easy flow to it. There is no preachy overtone, your simple statement of fact works very well here.
I saw no errors, good luck with the contest.
Jules
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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Hi Author,
I hardly ever give out sixes but this piece of beautiful logic deserves a six for it's common asense approach to the important aspects of life.
I liked the idea of balance, too often people focus on one of life's aspects and forget the rest.
I thought this was a well written and well thought out essay. the argument is well reasoned and the writing is clear, with an easy flow to it. There is no preachy overtone, your simple statement of fact works very well here.
I saw no errors, good luck with the contest.
Jules
Comment Written 14-May-2010
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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SIX SHINY STARS!!! You just made my day an even better day. (Fridays are always good, right. lol) Thanks so much. I am honored and awed.
Comment from koyoga
Great commentary on winning. I agree with you 100% that balance in all facets of life is the key to being a real winner ~ yet, balance is sometimes so hard to achieve.
Your well written story serves as a great reminder to us all to work on balance in our physical, mental and spiritual lives every day.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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Great commentary on winning. I agree with you 100% that balance in all facets of life is the key to being a real winner ~ yet, balance is sometimes so hard to achieve.
Your well written story serves as a great reminder to us all to work on balance in our physical, mental and spiritual lives every day.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-May-2010
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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Thanks for reading and for the good luck wishes.
Comment from Helen Tan
This is well written and I enjoyed the thoughts you've evoked. A great definition for the potential winner in each of us - to find that balance.
Good luck in the contest.
throwing a Frisbee
I don't think a capital etter is required on frisbee.
Winning in life is a matter of balance.
Great truth in this statement. I think if someone has balance in life, there's true contentment.
Their moment of paradise made the world a better place, if only momentarily and only for themselves and those who enjoyed the show.
I think sometimes we expect success to last forever or at least a longer period and we only deem it to be a success if many people know about it. We expect too much and should like you have stated - revel in the moment even if we're the only ones who knows about it.
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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This is well written and I enjoyed the thoughts you've evoked. A great definition for the potential winner in each of us - to find that balance.
Good luck in the contest.
throwing a Frisbee
I don't think a capital etter is required on frisbee.
Winning in life is a matter of balance.
Great truth in this statement. I think if someone has balance in life, there's true contentment.
Their moment of paradise made the world a better place, if only momentarily and only for themselves and those who enjoyed the show.
I think sometimes we expect success to last forever or at least a longer period and we only deem it to be a success if many people know about it. We expect too much and should like you have stated - revel in the moment even if we're the only ones who knows about it.
Comment Written 14-May-2010
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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Frisbee does require a capital letter because it is a brand name.
thanks so much for reading and commenting. I appreciate your time.
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Thanks for the clarification.
Comment from patmedium
Beautifully written.
Your control of the English language leaves me envious.
Clear, concise and to the point.
Congratulations. Pat.
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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Beautifully written.
Your control of the English language leaves me envious.
Clear, concise and to the point.
Congratulations. Pat.
Comment Written 14-May-2010
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from Frances Jean
I enjoyed your competition entry very much. It is written with considerable thought and insight. How very true that if we do not have our health for a start the other elements in our well being suffer. As we get older I believe we become much more willing to sit back and ponder life - to listen and observe more. We become more forgiving of ourselves and others; more appreciative of what we have, our families and friends especially. Good luck in the competition Frances
...'enjoyed the show...' = For me I would prefer the word, show, to be replaced with interaction - just a personal thing. Sounds more personal and less like a side show.
...'home, a bed, but not...' = Was this last but correct?
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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I enjoyed your competition entry very much. It is written with considerable thought and insight. How very true that if we do not have our health for a start the other elements in our well being suffer. As we get older I believe we become much more willing to sit back and ponder life - to listen and observe more. We become more forgiving of ourselves and others; more appreciative of what we have, our families and friends especially. Good luck in the competition Frances
...'enjoyed the show...' = For me I would prefer the word, show, to be replaced with interaction - just a personal thing. Sounds more personal and less like a side show.
...'home, a bed, but not...' = Was this last but correct?
Comment Written 14-May-2010
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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I think that is an exact Zig Ziglar quote with his grammar usage.
I so agree with you about growing older. I love the peace and contentment that comes with it. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, talented Author. You've challenged yourself with a complicated question and answered it with a unbelievably good argument. I like the way you present your thoughts, it is so clear, persuasive and down to earth. I love how you adorn your description with the lovable scene of grandma and grandson. For me you have already a winner, not only in this contest. (Sorry I don't have a six left to prove my words.)
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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Hi, talented Author. You've challenged yourself with a complicated question and answered it with a unbelievably good argument. I like the way you present your thoughts, it is so clear, persuasive and down to earth. I love how you adorn your description with the lovable scene of grandma and grandson. For me you have already a winner, not only in this contest. (Sorry I don't have a six left to prove my words.)
Comment Written 14-May-2010
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The thought of a six is nearly as good as a six! Thank you so much. I am honored --especially so since I know your writing.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Spiritual fitness requires that we get in touch with the small, still voice that lives deep within our souls, and it involves making time to remember through a child's eyes how it feels to completely believe in good.
Great message!
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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Spiritual fitness requires that we get in touch with the small, still voice that lives deep within our souls, and it involves making time to remember through a child's eyes how it feels to completely believe in good.
Great message!
Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 14-May-2010
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting.
Comment from jgirlie152
I think you have figured out the meaning of being a winner in a thoughful manner. I believe you are right. There have been times in life where I've passed by a group of people hanging out in a slum area, they don't have much, but they have each other and seemed to be having a better time than I was. I had the good job and nice clothes, but they were having a good time and I was just passing time.
Excellent commentary.
JG
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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I think you have figured out the meaning of being a winner in a thoughful manner. I believe you are right. There have been times in life where I've passed by a group of people hanging out in a slum area, they don't have much, but they have each other and seemed to be having a better time than I was. I had the good job and nice clothes, but they were having a good time and I was just passing time.
Excellent commentary.
JG
Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Thank you.
Comment from fictionwriter
What a beautiful message in this piece. I believe that relationships mean more than anything else. If you have love and family, even if you're poor as dirt, you have so much. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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What a beautiful message in this piece. I believe that relationships mean more than anything else. If you have love and family, even if you're poor as dirt, you have so much. Well done.
Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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thank you.
Comment from AnnsHoney
Faantastic, i love the way you opine on so many thing. You have a wonderful storytelling ability through your writing. this is well written and thought provolking. Good luck in the contest, you have my vote. Love R
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Faantastic, i love the way you opine on so many thing. You have a wonderful storytelling ability through your writing. this is well written and thought provolking. Good luck in the contest, you have my vote. Love R
Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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thank you.
