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Comment from dmjones
This is heart wrenching and very well written. I had a hard time looking for errors so I had to go back over it.
I only found one thing and it was just a typo
"Hello". --period should be inside the quotes ."
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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This is heart wrenching and very well written. I had a hard time looking for errors so I had to go back over it.
I only found one thing and it was just a typo
"Hello". --period should be inside the quotes ."
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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dmjones
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Thanks for spotting that nit. I was crying so hard that there should be many typos. Thanks again for reading. Carol
Comment from Phil Kitom
A sad heart wrenching story that is told so well
and with the adoring affection of a loving grandmother.
Yes indeed you will see them both again, and they will
be walking beside you now, just waiting to open the
curtain and fall into your loving arms. Good luck in the contest, although I know this is secondary to sharing your story... God Bless, Phil
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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A sad heart wrenching story that is told so well
and with the adoring affection of a loving grandmother.
Yes indeed you will see them both again, and they will
be walking beside you now, just waiting to open the
curtain and fall into your loving arms. Good luck in the contest, although I know this is secondary to sharing your story... God Bless, Phil
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Phil...I do believe you know me so well. You are right, writing usually is more important to me than the contest, but this particular grew out of my heart. The fact that you could recognize how important this was to me....well, I can't tell lyou how great that made me feel. Thanks for reading, commenting and for being my friend. Your friend, Carol
Comment from Tellis
Ah, what a sad story. I'm very sorry for your loss and I thought this was a very well written story. Good luck in the contest.
Tellis
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Ah, what a sad story. I'm very sorry for your loss and I thought this was a very well written story. Good luck in the contest.
Tellis
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Tellis, Sad things happen to people, but luckily we have family and friends to help us through it. Thanks for reading. Carol
Comment from Mrs Jones
Being a grandmother, I feel so deeply for you that I am at a loss for words. The story is well written. I can find no errors in the write. Flowed smoothly and held the reader.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Being a grandmother, I feel so deeply for you that I am at a loss for words. The story is well written. I can find no errors in the write. Flowed smoothly and held the reader.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Mrs. Jones...Thank you for reading and for your generous words. Losing anyone is heartbreaking, but losing a child with so much of life still waiting for them....I can't describe it. Part of it is always wondering what if...
Thanks again - Carol
Comment from Pearl Edwards
What a sad story you have told so beautifully. No edits needed the emotions of your families loss comes through in your words. What can we readers say, we can feel your grief as we read your words. good luck in the comp.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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What a sad story you have told so beautifully. No edits needed the emotions of your families loss comes through in your words. What can we readers say, we can feel your grief as we read your words. good luck in the comp.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Pearl...Thank you for reading and for your kind comments. Truly, there is nothing any of us can say. What is...is! He knows how much he was loved and he knows we think about him each day. The what ifs...haunt me still but we have no choice but to move forward. Thanks again. Carol
Comment from darkgreennights
All along the way I was hoping this was not a true story. I am so sorry, and losing your son too its unimaginable. But it is said that as long as someone is remebered they are never truly gone, and now you have immortalized your lost ones by writing about them so that someone will always know and thus they live forever
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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All along the way I was hoping this was not a true story. I am so sorry, and losing your son too its unimaginable. But it is said that as long as someone is remebered they are never truly gone, and now you have immortalized your lost ones by writing about them so that someone will always know and thus they live forever
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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darkgreennights...
So many times I have wished it was not true either...but we must accept what is given to us and try to live up to their expectations. Thank you so much for reading and for commenting. It was difficult to write. Carol
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Bless you Carol
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written short story that tugs at the reader's heart. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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This is a very well written short story that tugs at the reader's heart. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Charlie...
Thank you for your kind and generous words. I appreciate it very much. Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from Belinda
Gosh, Carol, you don't just describe a feeling, but so many: fear, sadness, despair, and love. I feel certain that to have your loved one lose her loved one, whom you also love was so terrible to you that the memory lives inside you. II do hope with your optimistic nature you don't feel so sad anymore. Beautiful piece!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Gosh, Carol, you don't just describe a feeling, but so many: fear, sadness, despair, and love. I feel certain that to have your loved one lose her loved one, whom you also love was so terrible to you that the memory lives inside you. II do hope with your optimistic nature you don't feel so sad anymore. Beautiful piece!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Bellinda... WE all have our moments...today was just one of them. I do prefer to remember his happy smile, his silliness and all the love we shared. Tomorrow will be a better day. Thanks for sharing and for caring. Carol
Comment from Jnetgame
Wow, what a powerful, sad story. I'm so sorry for you loss. You described the events of those few days very well. I didn't see anything to change. This will be tough to beat in the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Wow, what a powerful, sad story. I'm so sorry for you loss. You described the events of those few days very well. I didn't see anything to change. This will be tough to beat in the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Jnetgame
Thank you for your kind and thoughtful words. They are greatly appreciated. Your friend, Carol
Comment from Kristia
I can not imagine just how hard this is for your family. I hope that writing about this here is in some way helping you with the grieving process. I must tell you, you have provided me a great service in showing me my petty problems are nothing compared to what others are facing. Thank you...you have blessed me. I think about you and your family as the anniversary date approaches, and I am praying for you. Be well my friend. Thank you.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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I can not imagine just how hard this is for your family. I hope that writing about this here is in some way helping you with the grieving process. I must tell you, you have provided me a great service in showing me my petty problems are nothing compared to what others are facing. Thank you...you have blessed me. I think about you and your family as the anniversary date approaches, and I am praying for you. Be well my friend. Thank you.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Kristia...The friendships I have made here and the freedom of writing has been more than I could ever have expected. I can't thank everyone enough. We all have our troubles..some large, some small, but when they are happening to us...they seem monumental.
Thanks again...I appreciate your kind and generous words and thoughts. Your friend, Carol
