Precious Gems: An Anthology
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Comment from Domino
Hi, Chris
Wonderful flowing read in perfect iambic pentameter. Blimey, you got the hang a that quick! Real sonnety feel about the form and theme, so mystical and romantic. One nit would be the 'love' and 'dove' overused rhyme, but everything else is wonderful. For the combination of flow, theme and grasp of meter it's well worth my sixer. Ray xx
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Hi, Chris
Wonderful flowing read in perfect iambic pentameter. Blimey, you got the hang a that quick! Real sonnety feel about the form and theme, so mystical and romantic. One nit would be the 'love' and 'dove' overused rhyme, but everything else is wonderful. For the combination of flow, theme and grasp of meter it's well worth my sixer. Ray xx
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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A SIX FROM MY GUV. What high praise and a wonderful way to start another steaming hot day under me rock!! Bless you my friend for your encouraging words, and tremendous review.
Yeah, love and dove, what can ya do?? I may tweak it a bit as I don't like these cliche rhymes, but am stuck at present on a replacement.
But you my friend, truly rock. Not just because ya gave me a six, but because you are a bloody great guy xoxoxoxoxoxo
DON'T GET A SWELLED HEAD ON ME. It might knock the plant over behind you ...
Comment from Sylvia Page
Lovely! I did enjoy this lovely poem and the picture you chose enhances the poem's quality as well. By the way I like your profile too.
Wish you the best of 2009!
Sylvia
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Lovely! I did enjoy this lovely poem and the picture you chose enhances the poem's quality as well. By the way I like your profile too.
Wish you the best of 2009!
Sylvia
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Thank ou so much Sylvia! Your lovely words are great encouragement indeed. I wish you the best for this year and beyond also xoxoxoxoxox
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Damn you're good. LOL! I wish I had another six for this, Chris. You keep astounding my little mind with your grand talent. I mean that with all I am. You are frickin' awesome.
Slurpees,
pEa
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Damn you're good. LOL! I wish I had another six for this, Chris. You keep astounding my little mind with your grand talent. I mean that with all I am. You are frickin' awesome.
Slurpees,
pEa
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Well here you go giving me a review which makes me wanna cry. I return you a slurpee much bigger and slurpier than the one ya sent me ... with a hankie to mop it up with. Bless ya pEa; wuvya xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
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well i needed that kissee! thanks so much!
Comment from TinyTeena
The first 2 verses are full of love, joy, song - just hearing Edwine's voice made the writer gain new strength and find the way home.
The writer wanted to hold Edwine for ever, but she has "flown with Heaven's doves", and has left only darkness. So now the writer dreams of death. The writer surrenders to death, will not fight, wants to die and join with Edwine again. The rhyme and rhythm are maintained throughout. The vocab is in old English form, a very romantic style. Very descriptive and full of love
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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The first 2 verses are full of love, joy, song - just hearing Edwine's voice made the writer gain new strength and find the way home.
The writer wanted to hold Edwine for ever, but she has "flown with Heaven's doves", and has left only darkness. So now the writer dreams of death. The writer surrenders to death, will not fight, wants to die and join with Edwine again. The rhyme and rhythm are maintained throughout. The vocab is in old English form, a very romantic style. Very descriptive and full of love
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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I bow to your perception and conveyance of same TT! A writer of romance poems I am not, however, sometimes one needs to stretch a bit. Your words tell me the stretchin' has been entirely worth the risk. Thank you my friend xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Russel Chale
Well my dear, methinks you have done this very well. Perhaps you should stretch your poetic wings more often, or at least now that they're stretched keep 'em loose and free. You're a great poet, mate.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Well my dear, methinks you have done this very well. Perhaps you should stretch your poetic wings more often, or at least now that they're stretched keep 'em loose and free. You're a great poet, mate.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Coming from you, this is high praise indeed my friend. Will forge on with wings unfurled and hope ta hell ah don't get hurled!! Bless you buddy xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
To see you smile, oh love of mine
Enfolded me in joy divine
To walk with you through meadows green
Lit up the way, my dear Edwine
--good beginning, set the mood for the entire poem. Liked the picture too, it gave me the sense of desolation.
well done.
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To see you smile, oh love of mine
Enfolded me in joy divine
To walk with you through meadows green
Lit up the way, my dear Edwine
--good beginning, set the mood for the entire poem. Liked the picture too, it gave me the sense of desolation.
well done.
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
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Thank you so very much Brian. YOur words are encouraging indeed xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Dearest Princess Xine,
I am just pissed as H* I don't have a sixer for this exquisite composition. It reminds me of the great masters of poetry. From first word to last, you weave a great tale. Simply stated: I am in awe. Wonderful, exquisite work! Brava! Fine poetess, Brava!!!!
With much love,
your Cherub xoxox
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Dearest Princess Xine,
I am just pissed as H* I don't have a sixer for this exquisite composition. It reminds me of the great masters of poetry. From first word to last, you weave a great tale. Simply stated: I am in awe. Wonderful, exquisite work! Brava! Fine poetess, Brava!!!!
With much love,
your Cherub xoxox
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
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What you say is sixer enough my dearest Cherub. I am very pleased you enjoyed this; always I am nervous as all get-out when posting something a bit .. away from my usual style, but Wuthering Heights beckoned ... and I followed. With much love I thank you my Cherub, true xoxoxoxoxoxo
