A Lasting Peace Without the Tears
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Congrats! Now We Want a Peace!"Simply my feelings towards a lasting one.
65 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Sixx
I really enjoyed your political poetry. I foundit well writtne and no mistakes. I think the commentary below also added to the readers experience of the entire work.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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I really enjoyed your political poetry. I foundit well writtne and no mistakes. I think the commentary below also added to the readers experience of the entire work.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. I tried to balance the political aspects of this. What ever side someone is one about this, I believe that there is a certain underlying truth that must be acknowledged.
Comment from boberto
Hi Mike K2. I did read your verse, but your comments got my attention more. Ophrah anf I were two of the first residents of Columbia, MD I have read many articles in the Sun and used to listen to Rock98 every morning driving to work. Don't agree with all you wrote, but that's life. I just posted an essay entitled, "Is War Inevitable for Humans?"
boberto
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Hi Mike K2. I did read your verse, but your comments got my attention more. Ophrah anf I were two of the first residents of Columbia, MD I have read many articles in the Sun and used to listen to Rock98 every morning driving to work. Don't agree with all you wrote, but that's life. I just posted an essay entitled, "Is War Inevitable for Humans?"
boberto
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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I wrote, Beer and Bacon, in honor of the new morning show. Its offbeat and goofy at times, but they have topics as well. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from Veronica Grace
Great poem and great author's notes. Your views are held by many, but the feeling that nothing we can do about it fills the entire world and country. People are oppressed in many ways, no matter where we are in the world these days. In the US people etch out a living with much difficulty and too busy to pay attention to the rest of the world. They struggle to exist in all aspects, spiritually and monitarily no matter how it seems. There is a much deeper sickness in the world and wars don't fix them. Perhaps your words can help, as they are wise and wonderful.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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Great poem and great author's notes. Your views are held by many, but the feeling that nothing we can do about it fills the entire world and country. People are oppressed in many ways, no matter where we are in the world these days. In the US people etch out a living with much difficulty and too busy to pay attention to the rest of the world. They struggle to exist in all aspects, spiritually and monitarily no matter how it seems. There is a much deeper sickness in the world and wars don't fix them. Perhaps your words can help, as they are wise and wonderful.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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Your words are true, at best war can at times keep things at bay. I stated my feeling in, "[The Longest] Poem For World Peace." Don't let the title fool you. Thank yo very much for the compliments and this review.
Comment from GregoryC
Very well documented piece of writing with deep emotional and political convictions. Your author's notes puts everything into perspective. Very insightful and well researched. Interesting about how you perceive Isreal. You're correct. Isreal is the only democracy in that region. A parliamentary government that stands for the same values we do in America. Our flesh and blood ally whose protection and continuance we must hold dear. We must defeat the Islamofascists.
Great stuff.
Gregory
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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Very well documented piece of writing with deep emotional and political convictions. Your author's notes puts everything into perspective. Very insightful and well researched. Interesting about how you perceive Isreal. You're correct. Isreal is the only democracy in that region. A parliamentary government that stands for the same values we do in America. Our flesh and blood ally whose protection and continuance we must hold dear. We must defeat the Islamofascists.
Great stuff.
Gregory
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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This line of poetry has been as much about how the media portray things. I tend to try to take things in from several sources. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from Just2Write
This is a very thought provoking political message and certainly expresses some good points. It is not a simple thing to understand the terrorist factions within the Muslim and South Asian nations. It is even more difficult to understand the Muslims who have left their homelands and carry their terrorism with them. We live in North America. It's a place where one comes to by choice. If the ways of the North American are not to one's liking - do not come. If you have arrived, and feel you have made a terrible mistake - Go home. Simple, really.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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This is a very thought provoking political message and certainly expresses some good points. It is not a simple thing to understand the terrorist factions within the Muslim and South Asian nations. It is even more difficult to understand the Muslims who have left their homelands and carry their terrorism with them. We live in North America. It's a place where one comes to by choice. If the ways of the North American are not to one's liking - do not come. If you have arrived, and feel you have made a terrible mistake - Go home. Simple, really.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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II find it very interesting that many people flle to America despite what they have learn often on long memories. Most Muslims have a decent time here, becoming realistic. Some move about different countries a bit until they find a place to settle. America allows one to have a chance. That is why they struggle like crazy but get up their own business. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. I have really enjoyed this one.
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Mike. I am gla dyou wrote your author's notes as it gave me a better understanding of your poem. It is very interesting and thought-provoking
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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Hi Mike. I am gla dyou wrote your author's notes as it gave me a better understanding of your poem. It is very interesting and thought-provoking
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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Thank you very much for this review and the compliments, have a great day.
Comment from Josipher32
I appreciate the explanation in your author's notes.
Good use of rhyme. Good flow.
No SPAG's detected.
Sincerely, Kristen
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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I appreciate the explanation in your author's notes.
Good use of rhyme. Good flow.
No SPAG's detected.
Sincerely, Kristen
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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Thank you very much for this review and the compliments.
Comment from kassey
An excellent lesson for many of us who carry on with our lives not relly paying too much attention untill more of our troops are killed. Your author notes helped a lot in the full understanding of your poem.The one clear thing is that most people do want peace, but not at any price. Very well written and it flows very well without showing anger just hope. very good read. Kay
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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An excellent lesson for many of us who carry on with our lives not relly paying too much attention untill more of our troops are killed. Your author notes helped a lot in the full understanding of your poem.The one clear thing is that most people do want peace, but not at any price. Very well written and it flows very well without showing anger just hope. very good read. Kay
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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I believe a good peace requires a very strong vigilance, that was the part with the WWI peace that I didn't include. We turned our heads until the problem was put upon us. The sacrifice to bring it back to peace was a very great one to everybody. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Hqave a great day.
Comment from Kingsland
I liked your notes on this piece of poetry
but in all truth the largest problem in this world is two fold
religion and greed, if we could eliminate most religions and rid the world of greed
then this world would lie in a peaceful state of existence
I know that it is not likely to happen in the near fututre
I liked your piece of poetry very much
it was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
ps... I do believe John Lennon says that same thing in his song Imagine....
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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I liked your notes on this piece of poetry
but in all truth the largest problem in this world is two fold
religion and greed, if we could eliminate most religions and rid the world of greed
then this world would lie in a peaceful state of existence
I know that it is not likely to happen in the near fututre
I liked your piece of poetry very much
it was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
ps... I do believe John Lennon says that same thing in his song Imagine....
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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I really don't look at religion as a problem, but greed and may I add selfishness as well. With those two qualities, they find the excuses to justify their behavior, including using religion for their purposes. I' ll listen to that song later. I have heard it, but don't remember all of the lines. I really enjoyed this review. I thank you for it and the compliments.
Comment from fluffyroroPlayer
You have made a good poem from one newspaper article and your opinion of it.
Your meter is good and rapid. This makes for an easy read.
In the fourth verse, second line, do you think that if you changed "you're" to "you are" that it would make for a much stronger verse? I think you should use a comma after promise or else capitalize all of "WE PROMISE" for emphasis.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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You have made a good poem from one newspaper article and your opinion of it.
Your meter is good and rapid. This makes for an easy read.
In the fourth verse, second line, do you think that if you changed "you're" to "you are" that it would make for a much stronger verse? I think you should use a comma after promise or else capitalize all of "WE PROMISE" for emphasis.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2008
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I did change You're to your are. Pesrsonally I feel that either would do well and whated to see what other reviewers had to say. I like the punctation on We promise. In a way it makes it a very powerful statement, yet seperated from the truth. Thank you very much for this review and the compliments.
