On Bluish Pond
White Clouds Reflect On Its Glistening Veneer47 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
The images in your nonet, Diana, are vivid. I can surely visualize the "living color" and "dazzling sun" of "nature's show."
However, if I could make one suggestion, since you are dealing with images and poetry that deals with a prescribed form, I would rearrange and/or tweak the lines so that the form of your nonet takes on the form of a more pronounced and definitive triangle.
Hoping I have helped and not offended!
diane
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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The images in your nonet, Diana, are vivid. I can surely visualize the "living color" and "dazzling sun" of "nature's show."
However, if I could make one suggestion, since you are dealing with images and poetry that deals with a prescribed form, I would rearrange and/or tweak the lines so that the form of your nonet takes on the form of a more pronounced and definitive triangle.
Hoping I have helped and not offended!
diane
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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As always don' know what I would do without your sage advice I edited the poem to a better triangle, hopefully. thanks again xo
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As always don' know what I would do without your sage advice I edited the poem to a better triangle, hopefully. thanks again xo
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Oh!
Much better!
Smiles all around!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment from June Sargent
I'd love to have my computer desk there! Nothing like the wonders of nature to soothe us as we try to deal with mundane matters. Please share more about this slice of paradise!
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I'd love to have my computer desk there! Nothing like the wonders of nature to soothe us as we try to deal with mundane matters. Please share more about this slice of paradise!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from Shirley McLain
You painted a lovely picture with your words and I did enjoy the read. I didn't see one error in your work. The picture sets it off beautifully. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
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You painted a lovely picture with your words and I did enjoy the read. I didn't see one error in your work. The picture sets it off beautifully. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from Thatguypk
All of nature gathered around that pond. It sounds idyllic. This is a beautiful and very visual account of a little place of paradise, so well written in so few words, true to the form of a nonet. Very good work. Thanks for sharing.
PK
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All of nature gathered around that pond. It sounds idyllic. This is a beautiful and very visual account of a little place of paradise, so well written in so few words, true to the form of a nonet. Very good work. Thanks for sharing.
PK
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from Gee
Very nicely done Mrs. Artasylum.
I think this is a good entry into the nonet contest.
I've seen a few, I really enjoyed yours.
Thank you for sharing
Gee
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Very nicely done Mrs. Artasylum.
I think this is a good entry into the nonet contest.
I've seen a few, I really enjoyed yours.
Thank you for sharing
Gee
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
What a wonderful view! I don't think I would get any work done with this view. I just love your Nonet poem. I wish you the very best in the contest.
Blessings,
Darlene
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What a wonderful view! I don't think I would get any work done with this view. I just love your Nonet poem. I wish you the very best in the contest.
Blessings,
Darlene
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your nonet contest entry, AA. I enjoyed reading it. I like the rhymes, the smooth flow, the descriptive words which create great imagery, and the beautiful picture. Good job with the syllable count per line.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
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You did a great job with your nonet contest entry, AA. I enjoyed reading it. I like the rhymes, the smooth flow, the descriptive words which create great imagery, and the beautiful picture. Good job with the syllable count per line.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
