tanka (winter)
tanka suite49 total reviews
Comment from palmart
Sometimes, it is difficult to express a sensation by using only words. This is a gift that you handle nicely well and it is clearly shown in this poem. You describe "tanka" very "tankafully". Metaphors are a great tool you utilize perfectly to take reader to another dimensions:"shards of light pierce the darkness" or the incredible "buttery sun shines through my window" are just great. Congratulations!!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Sometimes, it is difficult to express a sensation by using only words. This is a gift that you handle nicely well and it is clearly shown in this poem. You describe "tanka" very "tankafully". Metaphors are a great tool you utilize perfectly to take reader to another dimensions:"shards of light pierce the darkness" or the incredible "buttery sun shines through my window" are just great. Congratulations!!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for the special sixth star. I'm so pleased that you liked it. Thank you too for sharing your favorite lines. That means a lot.
Blessings
Janet
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You´re very welcome, Janet!!
I reallly felt nicely when reading your poem, so I wrote that review.
Just three things for you and your family;
Blessings, blessings and more blessings!
Comment from Mastery
Beautiful snapshots of winter, Janet.
I like your use of strong verbs in here and these are my favorite lines, dear friend:
"shards of light
pierce the darkness
"pine boughs bend
from heavy snow
cardinal sings"
And: "snow crunches
beneath my feet."
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Beautiful snapshots of winter, Janet.
I like your use of strong verbs in here and these are my favorite lines, dear friend:
"shards of light
pierce the darkness
"pine boughs bend
from heavy snow
cardinal sings"
And: "snow crunches
beneath my feet."
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you Bob for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for sharing your favorite lines. I'm so pleased that you liked it.
Blessings
Janet
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Your good, Janet. :) Bob
Comment from lyenochka
You made great use of the tanka form in this suite of modern tanka verses. I liked how each one pivoted us from winter scenes in the middle line to the comfort of sun, breathtaking beauty, and "hot chocolate by the fire." Thanks for sharing the balance of beauty and joy of winter.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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You made great use of the tanka form in this suite of modern tanka verses. I liked how each one pivoted us from winter scenes in the middle line to the comfort of sun, breathtaking beauty, and "hot chocolate by the fire." Thanks for sharing the balance of beauty and joy of winter.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your lovely and encouraging review. I'm so pleased that you liked it and that you got what I was trying to say.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Roxanne56
I love your poem, the painting you used is beautiful. Reminds me of a Christmas morning at a farmhouse. "buttery sun shines through my window", "icy chill takes my breath away" and my favorite "walkway leads me home to hot chocolate by the fire". Very nice imagery. We are having snow here now in Maryland. I think I'll go and make some hot chocolate. Thank you for sharing :)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I love your poem, the painting you used is beautiful. Reminds me of a Christmas morning at a farmhouse. "buttery sun shines through my window", "icy chill takes my breath away" and my favorite "walkway leads me home to hot chocolate by the fire". Very nice imagery. We are having snow here now in Maryland. I think I'll go and make some hot chocolate. Thank you for sharing :)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you Roxanne for your lovely and encouraging review. I'm so pleased that you liked it and thank you for sharing your favorite lines. Hot chocolate does sound pretty good right now :))))
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Jimmy Hogg
Wow, I'm really impressed by the fact that you can convey so much whilst staying within the Tanaka format.
I particularly liked the phrase "buttery sun shines"- something so comforting, almost reassuring about it- I can see it perfectly.
And I love Cardinals! I live in Canada and we have quite a few, always a delight.
Thanks for sharing, good luck with future writing.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Wow, I'm really impressed by the fact that you can convey so much whilst staying within the Tanaka format.
I particularly liked the phrase "buttery sun shines"- something so comforting, almost reassuring about it- I can see it perfectly.
And I love Cardinals! I live in Canada and we have quite a few, always a delight.
Thanks for sharing, good luck with future writing.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you Jimmy for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for sharing your favorite lines. I love cardinals too. Such a bright slash of color on a snowy day and always a delight. I'm so pleased that you liked it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Anne Johnston
Very well done on this Tanka. Love the pictures your words paint of a beautiful winter day. The last verse is very enticing, to have enjoyed your walk but heading home to hot chocolate.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Very well done on this Tanka. Love the pictures your words paint of a beautiful winter day. The last verse is very enticing, to have enjoyed your walk but heading home to hot chocolate.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you Anne for your lovely and encouraging review. I'm so pleased that you liked it.
Blessings
Janet
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You are welcome
Comment from donette1914
this is so polished to win the whole thing
wow so creative and heartfelt
outstanding
you brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable with the photo in your well penned poem
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
I hope for the best in the contest
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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this is so polished to win the whole thing
wow so creative and heartfelt
outstanding
you brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable with the photo in your well penned poem
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
I hope for the best in the contest
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you donette for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm so pleased that you liked it and thank you for the good wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mary Jane Y
Good description of a very cold winters day painted a great picture.
Love the snow but not all that comes with it. Cup of hot coco by a warm fireplace is where is where I would prefer to on a day like that.
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Good description of a very cold winters day painted a great picture.
Love the snow but not all that comes with it. Cup of hot coco by a warm fireplace is where is where I would prefer to on a day like that.
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Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you Mary Jane for your lovely and encouraging review. I'm so pleased that you liked it. A cup of hot coco does sound nice today.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from nomi338
Not only was this beautifully penned poem a delight to read, it served to remind me of the joy I feel whenever I reflect upon my decision to flee the cold of Michigan and to embrace the much more moderate climate available here in Southern California.
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Not only was this beautifully penned poem a delight to read, it served to remind me of the joy I feel whenever I reflect upon my decision to flee the cold of Michigan and to embrace the much more moderate climate available here in Southern California.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you nomi for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm pleased that we fled northwest PA for NC about 15 years ago but I did like a snowy day and remember the beauty of them, especially through the window. :)))).
Blessings
Janet
