Haiku ( a fierce thunderstorm)
contest entry53 total reviews
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Pharp, a tgiFriday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for sharing your poem with us. I think you executed the Haiku well, your syllable count was spot on. Good luck in the contest.
Happy Valentine's day!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
Hello Pharp, a tgiFriday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for sharing your poem with us. I think you executed the Haiku well, your syllable count was spot on. Good luck in the contest.
Happy Valentine's day!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hello My Friend,
Thanks so much for the Valentine's wishes, you review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
Groundbreaking. And car-breaking, too. I've never personally owned a vehicle (except a bike), but my sister had get her car totalled after a hailstorm nailed it. So, yes, hail can be devastating. Especially if it hits you.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
Groundbreaking. And car-breaking, too. I've never personally owned a vehicle (except a bike), but my sister had get her car totalled after a hailstorm nailed it. So, yes, hail can be devastating. Especially if it hits you.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for your review and comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this vividly descriptive, concise haiku. "Groundbreaking" is a very fitting word choice
for this nature scene.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this vividly descriptive, concise haiku. "Groundbreaking" is a very fitting word choice
for this nature scene.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Janice,
Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from Bichon
You have managed to convey a lot of different elements in such few words which is very impressive. You really managed to make them come to life, too! Great job.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
You have managed to convey a lot of different elements in such few words which is very impressive. You really managed to make them come to life, too! Great job.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from Ogden
There must have been real stones in that hail. Not a good day to be out walking.
Excellent imagery!
Good luck in the haiku poetry contest, Portia.
Don
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
There must have been real stones in that hail. Not a good day to be out walking.
Excellent imagery!
Good luck in the haiku poetry contest, Portia.
Don
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
Don,
Thanks so much for your review very kind comments and best wishes, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia
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You're very welcome, Portia.
Don
Comment from Sally Law
Very well penned and illustrated, dear Portia. A fine variation of the haiku poem. It is so icy and blue, that it left me chilled!
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for the contest,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
Very well penned and illustrated, dear Portia. A fine variation of the haiku poem. It is so icy and blue, that it left me chilled!
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for the contest,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hello Sally,
As always, I thank you for your review, very kind comments and best wishes. I pray you are having a wonderful day.
lots of love,
Portia
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, Portia.
-You have written a
good haiku with good nature
and seasonal imagery.
-You create a vivid word
picture of this thunderstorm
with "pulverizing hailstones."
-An excellent satori with
a double meaning.
-Well done; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
-Nice image and
presentation, Portia.
-You have written a
good haiku with good nature
and seasonal imagery.
-You create a vivid word
picture of this thunderstorm
with "pulverizing hailstones."
-An excellent satori with
a double meaning.
-Well done; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Pam,
Thanks so much for your review very kind comments and best wishes, they are greatly appreciated. I pray you are having a wonderful day.
Blessings...Portia
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You are very welcome, Portia, and you have a great day, and a great weekend, too.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Pharp,
Lovely piece of poetry in the form of 'Haiku' meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, and transparently depicting its theme.
Picture enhances its depth and beauty.
Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
Hello Pharp,
Lovely piece of poetry in the form of 'Haiku' meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, and transparently depicting its theme.
Picture enhances its depth and beauty.
Best of Luck!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hello My Friend,
Thanks so much for such an outstanding review, six star rating and best wishes, they are greatly appreciated. I pray you are having a wonderful day.
Blessings...Portia
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Portia, Most Welcome!
&
Thanks for Blessings.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Minglement
Oh, I love a good thunderstorm, but those hailstones can be punishing indeed. I liked that this was a true haiku, illuminating something in nature. Beautifully done and with an unexpected last line.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
Oh, I love a good thunderstorm, but those hailstones can be punishing indeed. I liked that this was a true haiku, illuminating something in nature. Beautifully done and with an unexpected last line.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings..Portia
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Portia ,Yes that will do it. Some hail stones are very groundbreaking, car window breaking etc a great Haiku good Satori Good luck in the contest Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
Hi Portia ,Yes that will do it. Some hail stones are very groundbreaking, car window breaking etc a great Haiku good Satori Good luck in the contest Cheers Chris
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Chris,
Thanks so much for your review very kind comments and best wishes, they are greatly appreciated.
Blessings...Portia