God Omniscient Deeds
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Comment from Cindy Decker
Very nice free verse poem. These are wonderful words of wisdom. The artwork is stunning. The lack of punctuation and double spacing are very effective in your work. Very beautiful work. Good luck in the contest.
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Very nice free verse poem. These are wonderful words of wisdom. The artwork is stunning. The lack of punctuation and double spacing are very effective in your work. Very beautiful work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Alchera
Four verses well written and said, each one with a great and true philosopher concept!. I did like them all. Well done!. Thank you for sharing!
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Four verses well written and said, each one with a great and true philosopher concept!. I did like them all. Well done!. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Ross E Silke
A beautiful thought and well said and versed. Excellent dimensions of intellectualism and constructed and presented well. Enjoyable to digest. Food for thought.
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A beautiful thought and well said and versed. Excellent dimensions of intellectualism and constructed and presented well. Enjoyable to digest. Food for thought.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from forestport12
Really intrigued to study the artwork and read the poem a few times over. The more I see how one is not worthy without the other. They complete each other. What you've done in so few words is to leave me dwelling on this. It's not every day one can take so few words to speak to all humanity.
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Really intrigued to study the artwork and read the poem a few times over. The more I see how one is not worthy without the other. They complete each other. What you've done in so few words is to leave me dwelling on this. It's not every day one can take so few words to speak to all humanity.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
This is the kind of work where one reads it and then says "Of course" as if it is part of the hive mind. I read somewhere "What heaven ordains the wise with courage bear" In these days we can only hope. Very well written, thank you.
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This is the kind of work where one reads it and then says "Of course" as if it is part of the hive mind. I read somewhere "What heaven ordains the wise with courage bear" In these days we can only hope. Very well written, thank you.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
If this is your first, you have done very well. Your intentions come through with a loud and clear message. The art you chose is very compatible with your words. Well done.
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If this is your first, you have done very well. Your intentions come through with a loud and clear message. The art you chose is very compatible with your words. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this short piece has a very powerful and inspirational message.
So very much is said in only a few words. All the more powerful.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
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I think this short piece has a very powerful and inspirational message.
So very much is said in only a few words. All the more powerful.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent four line poem. Though provoking and powerful. Great artwork to compliment your work.
Very nicely done.
Blessings and stay well.
Janet
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Excellent four line poem. Though provoking and powerful. Great artwork to compliment your work.
Very nicely done.
Blessings and stay well.
Janet
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It's crazy how one person can live a hundred years and no one know anything about him. However, some die at 20 years old and they impact on the world is so much more profound. It's all about what we do with our life.
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It's crazy how one person can live a hundred years and no one know anything about him. However, some die at 20 years old and they impact on the world is so much more profound. It's all about what we do with our life.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Michele Harber
I love your first three lines. They're powerful and true and intelligent. However, they also set me up for a concluding line that would tie in what they had in common, or tie them together with the words "a matter of," or both. Unfortunately, I felt your fourth line fell flat. It was like reading a poem that said:
I bought flour.
I bought eggs.
I bought vanilla.
Someone mentioned these when talking about ingredients.
Obviously I've set you up for "I'm baking a cake," but let you down by not fulfilling that promise. I think you would serve your poem better with an ending along the lines of, "and they're all a matter of life." I just want to see you live up to the "promise" made by those excellent first three lines.
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I love your first three lines. They're powerful and true and intelligent. However, they also set me up for a concluding line that would tie in what they had in common, or tie them together with the words "a matter of," or both. Unfortunately, I felt your fourth line fell flat. It was like reading a poem that said:
I bought flour.
I bought eggs.
I bought vanilla.
Someone mentioned these when talking about ingredients.
Obviously I've set you up for "I'm baking a cake," but let you down by not fulfilling that promise. I think you would serve your poem better with an ending along the lines of, "and they're all a matter of life." I just want to see you live up to the "promise" made by those excellent first three lines.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
