Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Your post is such a pleasure to read Tony, not only is is well written, but it is well researched and every word interesting, I was on the train with you and met that obnoxious character with his startling questions that took you off your guard. I haven't read from the beginning as I have missed some of your posts, but this snippet is a joy to read. You are a true artists I think words, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Such a nice review, Dolly. Thanks very much! Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from royowen

Excellent

It's funny how things around us can be a revelation of a previous experience, like the encounter with the music man with the strang philosophy, making one think we've missed something, He arrives at his abode in the country, wondering about the mysterious condition of the three way relationship, with Helen and Jeanne, more about what he doesn't know than any thing, well done Tony, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thanks, Roy. As always, I appreciate your review and comments. Best wishes, Tony

reply by royowen on 02-Feb-2019

Most welcome

Comment from AdaJulie

Excellent

You are a skilled writer, I haven't read any other of you book, this chapter read well. I got a little lost in some of the dialogue But story is told well. Great job.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thanks, Ada. I appreciate your review.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Tony,

This is another well-written chapter that takes us further into this little world you've created. One really can't blame for Charles about his musings. Does Helen really know what she is involved in?

And who is Jeanne - really?

I loved the exchange with the stranger on the train. Your use of the dialect was spot on.

Looking forward to more,

~patty~

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thanks, Patty. I appreciate your review and comments about the dialogue on the train. All the best, Tony

Comment from Stephanie Launiu

Excellent

You are a very masterful writer. Even though I haven't read any other portion of your book, this chapter was self-contained and read well. Some of the dialogue with the West Indian boy seemed a little forced, but I'm American and don't know much about authentic accents in England or West India. The journal and the role it plays in the overall story is intriguing. I look forward to reading more of your work.

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 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thanks, Stephanie. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Very nice addition once again. the relationship between Jeanne and Helen seems a strange one indeed.

I looked forward with pleasure, - perhaps insert a comma after forward here (appositive comma).

At first, it was a small thought bubble but, by the time I reached the final page, it had become a hot air balloon sustained in its flight by the fires of my righteous indignation. - great imagery here.



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 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thanks, Gareth. I appreciate your review and comments. I had that comma in then removed it. It's back again now.