I Always Thought
Loop Poetry Contest Submission43 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
This is a beautiful Loop poem that flows beautifully. It has great rhythm and imagery. It's also melancholic as all your plans got cut short. I liked it very much. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
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This is a beautiful Loop poem that flows beautifully. It has great rhythm and imagery. It's also melancholic as all your plans got cut short. I liked it very much. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I hardly noticed this was a loop and your sentiments are warm yet there is great sadness in these words, 'but cruel life clipped our wings' is one of my favourite lines here, love Dolly x
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I hardly noticed this was a loop and your sentiments are warm yet there is great sadness in these words, 'but cruel life clipped our wings' is one of my favourite lines here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
Comment from jenintorre
This is an excellent loop poem it is so poignant and also well constructed. I can relate so well to this situation. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
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This is an excellent loop poem it is so poignant and also well constructed. I can relate so well to this situation. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
Comment from Neonewman
What a great style of poetry this loop contest writing prompt has offered. You crafted this piece well and the flow is great. Only one thing I seen.
"When hope still lived with seeds we'd sown,
Sewn with love by me and you,"
Sown-Sewn.
God bless
Steve
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What a great style of poetry this loop contest writing prompt has offered. You crafted this piece well and the flow is great. Only one thing I seen.
"When hope still lived with seeds we'd sown,
Sewn with love by me and you,"
Sown-Sewn.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a beautifully written loop poem about love and loss and meeting again for eternity. Your words evoked so much emotion for me. I could feel both the hurt and the hope. This is a wonderful contest entry. I hope you do well!
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What a beautifully written loop poem about love and loss and meeting again for eternity. Your words evoked so much emotion for me. I could feel both the hurt and the hope. This is a wonderful contest entry. I hope you do well!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
Comment from BermyBye50
Idamarty,
This is a great Loop poem that captures the readers attention from the opening line to the final verse. It tells a powerful and deeply personal story about a relationship dear to you.
I think you meant sewn instead of sown or vice versa in line 2 of the 3rd stanza.
Al the best in the contest.
Eugene
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Idamarty,
This is a great Loop poem that captures the readers attention from the opening line to the final verse. It tells a powerful and deeply personal story about a relationship dear to you.
I think you meant sewn instead of sown or vice versa in line 2 of the 3rd stanza.
Al the best in the contest.
Eugene
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
Comment from WildWithWords
Breathtaking!
I admit I don't at all like these loop poems and have seen few that roll off the tongue at all well. But this one.... not only does it flow so beautifully, but you barely even notice the duplication of words.
The story is one of personal love and destiny. It is wonderfully laid out via plans unfulfilled.... "Things we said we'd always do, Do but cruel life clipped our wings" and memories kept precious "When hope still lived with seeds we'd sewn, Sewn with love by me and you".
I know that as a poet I should be able to find more expressive and impressive words, but the word "beautiful" just keeps coming to mind for this piece.
It truly is. Six stars without a doubt.
Bill (WildWithWords)
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Breathtaking!
I admit I don't at all like these loop poems and have seen few that roll off the tongue at all well. But this one.... not only does it flow so beautifully, but you barely even notice the duplication of words.
The story is one of personal love and destiny. It is wonderfully laid out via plans unfulfilled.... "Things we said we'd always do, Do but cruel life clipped our wings" and memories kept precious "When hope still lived with seeds we'd sewn, Sewn with love by me and you".
I know that as a poet I should be able to find more expressive and impressive words, but the word "beautiful" just keeps coming to mind for this piece.
It truly is. Six stars without a doubt.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a good topic for a loop poem, although quite sad, idamarty. Your 'loop' words fit in nicely. You told a good story with this style. Good job and thanks for sharing.
Did you mean 'sown and not 'sewn' in the line about the seeds? Best wishes. Jan
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This is a good topic for a loop poem, although quite sad, idamarty. Your 'loop' words fit in nicely. You told a good story with this style. Good job and thanks for sharing.
Did you mean 'sown and not 'sewn' in the line about the seeds? Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
Comment from Air Spirit
Your Loop poem touched my heart. Your poem was a reminder of how quickly life passed..and many of the things we hope to achieve or experience may fall short of what we had hoped for..but time stands still for no one..and how life can change in a heartbeat, and put someone in our lives to fill our hearts -- or can take them from us.. ever reminding us to live life to the fullest..
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Your Loop poem touched my heart. Your poem was a reminder of how quickly life passed..and many of the things we hope to achieve or experience may fall short of what we had hoped for..but time stands still for no one..and how life can change in a heartbeat, and put someone in our lives to fill our hearts -- or can take them from us.. ever reminding us to live life to the fullest..
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
Comment from kathleenspalding
Such a beautiful and sad, bitter-sweet Loop Poem. Excellent use of artwork, color, and words. I see nothing to correct, and everything to praise. Sorry I'm out of sixes. Good luck in the contest!
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Such a beautiful and sad, bitter-sweet Loop Poem. Excellent use of artwork, color, and words. I see nothing to correct, and everything to praise. Sorry I'm out of sixes. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
