A Time To Step
Dick Van Dyke, but my roof38 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
A light-hearted poem with a pleasing lilt to it that gives the impression of one who is at peace with the world and in love. You catch the spirit of the original.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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A light-hearted poem with a pleasing lilt to it that gives the impression of one who is at peace with the world and in love. You catch the spirit of the original.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Thank you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem Victor. Good job with the flow of your lines.
The line from the movie is a play on words right--for someone named Jim. You have changed the line to fit with the die=scission in this poem of a man talking about/with a woman.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018
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I enjoyed your poem Victor. Good job with the flow of your lines.
The line from the movie is a play on words right--for someone named Jim. You have changed the line to fit with the die=scission in this poem of a man talking about/with a woman.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018
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Yup, you are right. Also, I wasn't sure about any copyright infringement. But, let's face it-I ain't really all that important. lol Still...
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as long as you reference where you got it in your author notes you should be ok
Comment from Hitcher
Mary Poppins... Step in time : ) I enjoyed the humor of your little...
jim jiminee offering Vic
just
to be stirred in
the great Mileau ( nice!)
Always a pleasure reading you mate!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Mary Poppins... Step in time : ) I enjoyed the humor of your little...
jim jiminee offering Vic
just
to be stirred in
the great Mileau ( nice!)
Always a pleasure reading you mate!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Thank you, my friend.
Comment from Bridget Myer
It is an interesting piece of writing.
At first I found it disjointed, It took me three lots of reading to get through it. It finally came together and could see the journey
I smiled when the penny dropped.
I can see the poem as it unfolds, and the power of determination, and intestinal fortitude for this piece to finally unfurl into the success of what it is.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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It is an interesting piece of writing.
At first I found it disjointed, It took me three lots of reading to get through it. It finally came together and could see the journey
I smiled when the penny dropped.
I can see the poem as it unfolds, and the power of determination, and intestinal fortitude for this piece to finally unfurl into the success of what it is.
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Thank you.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"A Time to Step" , is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to bot read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to reading your next post.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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"A Time to Step" , is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to bot read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to reading your next post.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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lol, ok.
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lol, ok, to you too!
Take care, God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Victor, this is a bit of fun. I enjoyed it, and they are iconic lines indeed, even I know them, which says a lot if you knew how many gaps I have in modern entertainment. I think the flow is very good and the internal dialogue works really well. I saw no errors and have no suggestion for improvement, it is a work I would recommend for review, Ana. :)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Hello Victor, this is a bit of fun. I enjoyed it, and they are iconic lines indeed, even I know them, which says a lot if you knew how many gaps I have in modern entertainment. I think the flow is very good and the internal dialogue works really well. I saw no errors and have no suggestion for improvement, it is a work I would recommend for review, Ana. :)
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Thank you, my dear.
Comment from kahpot
An excellent read and yes you are right Man won't go through he would rather go straight ahead while others will find an easier and safer way, I like this poem very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018
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An excellent read and yes you are right Man won't go through he would rather go straight ahead while others will find an easier and safer way, I like this poem very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018
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Thank you. Yes, you do know us, don't you?
Comment from meeshu
a very interesting write with an unusual format. not sure I get it but I am willing to risk exposing my ignorance and say it is commentary on Man's insistence on fooling with nature..........meeshu
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018
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a very interesting write with an unusual format. not sure I get it but I am willing to risk exposing my ignorance and say it is commentary on Man's insistence on fooling with nature..........meeshu
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018
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I accept all insights. None are really wrong, and often I feel they are right as well. In this case, I meant this as a tribute to women.
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now I will look again.
