Comment from krys123

Excellent

Cheers, Roy;
-It's amazing how a 5/7/5 syllabic format can turn into a really beautiful poem.
-I love you use of metaphors in writing this particular piece of poetry, "A cloud a drift upon a breeze," "But you will never soar on heights while sitting on a pole," "But have you heard the still small plea that rustles through the trees,". These are just some of the metaphors that I really liked.
-Good rhyming and rhythm in a perfect conceptual theme that brings faith into view and how necessary it is for us to have faith. Dreams are But clouds Fading in the wind but faith is concrete and is above all sin.
-Thank you for sharing my friend and take care and have a good one.
Alex

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks, for these super comments and thorough review and sharing, blessings, Roy

reply by krys123 on 22-Feb-2018

You're very welcome, Roy.
Alex

Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux

Excellent

This is another very nice poem bringing to light so well about faith and hope. It also talks about time and seizing the moment while it's there. I enjoyed this!

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks Jeff, for these delightful comments and super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from N.K. Wagner

Excellent

What a lovely poem. Roy. I'm going to make two small suggestions, if I may. In the first line, consider "floating cloud" since you use "adrift" in the next line. Maybe too similar.

In the penultimate stanza, should "a substance" be "of substance"? Just a thought. In any case, very well done. :) Nancy

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks for the marvellous review and comments, excellent suggestions Nancy, I'll go take a look, blessings, Roy

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

My five-year-old daughter and three-year-old son were asking for something to entertain themselves. I gave them some crayons and paper and told them to draw a picture. My daughter asked what they should draw. I said use your imagination.

She asked what's imagination? My son replied you know what imagination is. It's when you're dreaming, but you're awake.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

What an absolutely brilliant summation of a dream Thomas, "out of the mouths of babes" eh Thomas? Wonderful, thank you, blessings, Roy

Comment from Princess D.

Excellent

Very well written poem about dreams! I wouldn't change a thing in this poem! It certainly does take faith for us to go after our dreams!
Dream on!

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks Princess, for these delightful comments and super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

This is a good poem to read as we watch the Olympic winter games on TV from Korea. Not all of us can have a gold medal for sports, but there are so many virtual gold medals for those who are kind, caring, and loving, and faithful.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks Joy, for these delightful comments and super review, Australia has gained a few medals, considering we have little snow here? blessings, Roy

Comment from poetwatch

Excellent

I like this poem. It is phrased to make one think. Something that is hard saying in one line or three sometimes even in forty lines. Many people are afraid that they will fail and don't try. Like you wrote, "while thinking it's the south of wind" I like that wording. :) I am a dreamer and numerous times I have been cut down but I get up. Someday...

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks, for these delightful comments and super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from Dean Kuch

Exceptional

Exceptionally well done, Roy.
There is so much we can and cannot do with time.
We can waste our time, bide our time, and use our time wisely.
We can be ON time, take our time and even spend our time on or with someone else, if we so choose.
There is one very important thing we cannot do with time, however.
We can't save our time up then place it in a vault for use at a later time.
Once our time is up, that's all the time we're gonna get.
Now, I'm afraid it's time for me to run...

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

You are leaving shortly or Now Dean! In the words of my girls when Elaine was going to climb a tall rock, "don't go mummy" thanks for the great review, but if you go, may God go with you, bless you, Roy

reply by Dean Kuch on 15-Feb-2018

You're more than welcome, Roy.
Have a blessed day.

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Good luck Dean.

reply by Dean Kuch on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks, mate, and same to you. :)

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks Dean

reply by Dean Kuch on 15-Feb-2018

He-y-y-y-y-yyyyy, don't mention it, mate.
~Dean

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

A dream remains confined to thought
a seed locked in a box.
Don't let it die, just grasp that dream --
'cause time's contained in clocks. ' Al these beautiful poems Roy you are so talented. They are all so meaningful. Jesus would approve. Kindest regards and well done love Meia xx

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks Meia, for these splendid comments, review, and superb support, blessings, Roy

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a wonderful write Roy with your signature perfect rhymes and flow with a great message, there are dreams that will never come to fruition and then there are those worth fighting for, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks Dolly,, for these delightful comments and super review, blessings, Roy