A Light in the Dark
potlatch 'everyday item' entry43 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
This poem has great potential if you clean up the meter. I'll bet you could sneak in a metaphor somewhere, too. Have you read Edna St. Vincent Millay's "First Fig"?
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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This poem has great potential if you clean up the meter. I'll bet you could sneak in a metaphor somewhere, too. Have you read Edna St. Vincent Millay's "First Fig"?
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Paul. I'll check on hte meter.
Joan
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Check on "First Fig", too. It is short but great.
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Paul,
You are right. It is a short but very good poem. It seems like the end of the candles light may be signifyint death
Joan
Comment from June Sargent
A simple item, but without candles we would never have been able to enjoy our visits to our friend's homestead from the 1700's. It was a grand adventure for our kids. We had no electricity, no tv or radio. We played board games. Life as it was long ago - when wrinkles did not matter.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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A simple item, but without candles we would never have been able to enjoy our visits to our friend's homestead from the 1700's. It was a grand adventure for our kids. We had no electricity, no tv or radio. We played board games. Life as it was long ago - when wrinkles did not matter.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the review, June,
It must have been interest without tv and radio. How about cell phones. I wish wrinkes would be a sign of wisdom not of just age.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment from Yardier
Cleverrrrrrrr Potlatch............ Decades ago my young family and I lived in a mountain community where I scratched out a living as a carpenter. Even though we had electricity, kerosene lamps and candles were our go to evening mood enhancer while I told stories, outrageous stories.
Your poem brought back images of my children's faces bathed with yellow warm light. It also reminded me my wife's 'rolled eye' look is not a recent development.
Thank you for the memory. Yardier.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Cleverrrrrrrr Potlatch............ Decades ago my young family and I lived in a mountain community where I scratched out a living as a carpenter. Even though we had electricity, kerosene lamps and candles were our go to evening mood enhancer while I told stories, outrageous stories.
Your poem brought back images of my children's faces bathed with yellow warm light. It also reminded me my wife's 'rolled eye' look is not a recent development.
Thank you for the memory. Yardier.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the nice review. I am glad I could bring back memories with my words.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is amazing how often we turn to the candles to provide light as our world turns primitive when the electricity is turned off. We light the room with candles and I always keep some just in case, but I have no matches! Ha ha ha, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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It is amazing how often we turn to the candles to provide light as our world turns primitive when the electricity is turned off. We light the room with candles and I always keep some just in case, but I have no matches! Ha ha ha, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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We use less candles now on birthday cakes because it is a fire hazard, ha ha. We also use flash lights because they are easier to read by.
Joan
Comment from royowen
I can remember when we had quite a few electrical blackouts, so these candles were, we always had an adequate supply on hand. This is one of your great posts Joan, you did a great job on this, good post Joan, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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I can remember when we had quite a few electrical blackouts, so these candles were, we always had an adequate supply on hand. This is one of your great posts Joan, you did a great job on this, good post Joan, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the strong words of encouragemnt, Roy.
Joan
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Well done
Comment from Mary Shifman
You're right, candle have come in handy on many occasions before we had kerosene and later battery operated lanterns. I remember the many times when growing up that we used candles. I'm glad they don't the exact number of birthday cakes, though. We'd burn the house down! Good job.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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You're right, candle have come in handy on many occasions before we had kerosene and later battery operated lanterns. I remember the many times when growing up that we used candles. I'm glad they don't the exact number of birthday cakes, though. We'd burn the house down! Good job.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the review, Mary. Great minds think alike, I guess. I just mentioned the fire hazard thought in a previous review.
Joan
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You are welcome.
Comment from Gloria ....
A fine revival here, Joan. It's form is like an abstract poem in some ways, but the clue that clearly shows it is a candle without ever stating just exactly that.
So it is a fine example of showing rather than telling, and your final line, stating the one flaw got a good chuckle from me.
Much enjoyed this. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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A fine revival here, Joan. It's form is like an abstract poem in some ways, but the clue that clearly shows it is a candle without ever stating just exactly that.
So it is a fine example of showing rather than telling, and your final line, stating the one flaw got a good chuckle from me.
Much enjoyed this. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thanks very much, Gloria, for the concise but thorough review.
Joan
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, great poem about the helpfulness of a candle! Some love candles no matter the weather but we only light them during a storm. We have a storm coming so we're getting ready. Alas the candle can't charge my phone!
Of its ability to lighten ones soul (one's)
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Ah, great poem about the helpfulness of a candle! Some love candles no matter the weather but we only light them during a storm. We have a storm coming so we're getting ready. Alas the candle can't charge my phone!
Of its ability to lighten ones soul (one's)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. That's why I keep my phone chraging when I am not using it. I use it as a flashlight when the electricity goes out, so I can read.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Clever. Wick and wax gives it away, but no matter--it's a charming verse, spot-on list of how a candle is useful. Wry humor in the punchline--indeed--they tell the age en masse by both the count and that they light up the wrinkled face!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Clever. Wick and wax gives it away, but no matter--it's a charming verse, spot-on list of how a candle is useful. Wry humor in the punchline--indeed--they tell the age en masse by both the count and that they light up the wrinkled face!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Elizabeth.
Joan
Comment from pookietoo
A lovely rhyming poem about a candle. I enjoyed reading it. I wish you luck in whatever you write about. Have a wonderful weekend. You are loved. :) :)
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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A lovely rhyming poem about a candle. I enjoyed reading it. I wish you luck in whatever you write about. Have a wonderful weekend. You are loved. :) :)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem
Glad you liked it.
Same to you.
Joan
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Welcome.
