A Man Becomes Such
fiction, man, injustice45 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Emotion and anger management is something we have to learn from an early age. To keep our cool all the time will make us snap when we least expect it and it usually turns intodisaster.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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A very well-written poem. Emotion and anger management is something we have to learn from an early age. To keep our cool all the time will make us snap when we least expect it and it usually turns intodisaster.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Yup.
Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Thoughts of Richard Pencer and his recent campaign to spread his rhetoric of hate all across our great nation immediately sprang to mind here, Doug.
It brings up the touchy yet pertinent question of freedom of speech and whether or not we should make attempts to regulate it in any way.
Excellent writing...
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thoughts of Richard Pencer and his recent campaign to spread his rhetoric of hate all across our great nation immediately sprang to mind here, Doug.
It brings up the touchy yet pertinent question of freedom of speech and whether or not we should make attempts to regulate it in any way.
Excellent writing...
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I get it Dean,
my posthumous friend.
Doug
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey here my friend. I have been absent for far too long. I loved this. The passion just jumps out to the readers. I might suggest that you center it for more power. I hope to follow you more closely. My health has gone to shit. 8 operations in the past year
Bear (G.B. Smith)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Hey here my friend. I have been absent for far too long. I loved this. The passion just jumps out to the readers. I might suggest that you center it for more power. I hope to follow you more closely. My health has gone to shit. 8 operations in the past year
Bear (G.B. Smith)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Bear, sorry for the late reply.
Thank you. I dearly hope your
health comes through.
Comment from frierajac
It is interesting as the short phrases seem to recreate an angry retort. Moving down
the list of issues I came to 'he lays' and it sounds to me like' he lays down'/ ' with all
who plundered' an the thought completes in the last line. Very good story and words seem to be trying to make a blues ballad.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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It is interesting as the short phrases seem to recreate an angry retort. Moving down
the list of issues I came to 'he lays' and it sounds to me like' he lays down'/ ' with all
who plundered' an the thought completes in the last line. Very good story and words seem to be trying to make a blues ballad.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you. This was difficult for me.
Too much stepping on toes, so to speak.
Still, people responded well.
Doug
Comment from tfawcus
A poem of passionate intensity. Your skilled use of enjambment adds to the effect, as does your use of terse, short lines. Very well written. The effect is powerful.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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A poem of passionate intensity. Your skilled use of enjambment adds to the effect, as does your use of terse, short lines. Very well written. The effect is powerful.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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I thank you, sir.
Comment from robyn corum
I have to wonder if this has any relevance to the horrible mass shooting at the Texas church this morning??
So tragic. Thank you!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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I have to wonder if this has any relevance to the horrible mass shooting at the Texas church this morning??
So tragic. Thank you!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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No, I didn't knoww about it.
Comment from SPMC
A very powerful piece. Stanza 7 & 8 a turning point, and then the rest is in faith's hand. Raw and honest commentary on injustice.My best to you in your future endeavors.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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A very powerful piece. Stanza 7 & 8 a turning point, and then the rest is in faith's hand. Raw and honest commentary on injustice.My best to you in your future endeavors.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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Thank you.
Comment from okanaganbell
"Come hither with your shotgun and lay me 'neath the cold cold soil". Love the last verse, it brings the rest of the poem to its knees, in laying down the whole point and destination of your words and meaning. Just great!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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"Come hither with your shotgun and lay me 'neath the cold cold soil". Love the last verse, it brings the rest of the poem to its knees, in laying down the whole point and destination of your words and meaning. Just great!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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I thank you.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Superb piece. Powerful and moving. We can relate to those feelings, even though we never did more than think about something drastic. Love is the strongest force there is.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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Superb piece. Powerful and moving. We can relate to those feelings, even though we never did more than think about something drastic. Love is the strongest force there is.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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Yes sir ree. And thank God for that. Thank you for the six. :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello victortouche
You know how to use powerful words to recreate the anger that begets man to step across a threshold of no return with no regrets. when you said how he found
Upon his hovel's
unlit entrance
lays a daughter
used and thrown.
Gert
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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Hello victortouche
You know how to use powerful words to recreate the anger that begets man to step across a threshold of no return with no regrets. when you said how he found
Upon his hovel's
unlit entrance
lays a daughter
used and thrown.
Gert
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
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It would rile one, wouldn't it? Thank you.
