Bye
Leaving, going, gone.37 total reviews
Comment from sheena121
A good picture to set this poem, although it could have been about a lot of things, the reader has an image in their mind thanks to the picture. All syllables are correct and this is quite an achievement, good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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A good picture to set this poem, although it could have been about a lot of things, the reader has an image in their mind thanks to the picture. All syllables are correct and this is quite an achievement, good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review and for your kind comments, as well as your good wishes.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 1-6-1 poem. We don't know why we have to leave sometimes from where we are to another place, we feel like we are going to cry, but we still bravely say bye!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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A very well-written 1-6-1 poem. We don't know why we have to leave sometimes from where we are to another place, we feel like we are going to cry, but we still bravely say bye!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review and for your kind comments.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your entry for the 1-6-1 Rhyme contest. Your presentation with the children waving and the solemn words works well. My only suggestion would be to use the advanced editor to enhance the poem with a different size font, centering and a different font.
~patty~
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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thank you for sharing your entry for the 1-6-1 Rhyme contest. Your presentation with the children waving and the solemn words works well. My only suggestion would be to use the advanced editor to enhance the poem with a different size font, centering and a different font.
~patty~
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review and for your kind comments and your suggestion, I will try it.
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Hello there,
This is the second poem in this form that I have seen, which creates such emotive imagery in so few words and such strict syllabic constraints.
I wish you well with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Hello there,
This is the second poem in this form that I have seen, which creates such emotive imagery in so few words and such strict syllabic constraints.
I wish you well with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review and for your kind comments, as well as your wishes.
Comment from Chairman Anyhow
Nice structured haiku(esk) piece. Distinctly and poignantly displays the sadness of goodbyes, whether literal or metaphorical. There is no waste in the writing, to the point, well done
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Nice structured haiku(esk) piece. Distinctly and poignantly displays the sadness of goodbyes, whether literal or metaphorical. There is no waste in the writing, to the point, well done
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review and for your kind comments.
Comment from humpwhistle
Funny, if I read your poem without the photo,
I get a much different picture.
To me, the photo complicates something
that feels simpler.
Probably just me.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Funny, if I read your poem without the photo,
I get a much different picture.
To me, the photo complicates something
that feels simpler.
Probably just me.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review and for your comments- I guess we all interpret differently but that is a good thing. Thanks as well for the good wishes.
Comment from mermaids
I am a fan of the 1-6-1 form. You did well with your use of rhyming words. Your poem brings forth feelings of leaving and sadness. This is not an easy poetic form to create but you did well with it.
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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I am a fan of the 1-6-1 form. You did well with your use of rhyming words. Your poem brings forth feelings of leaving and sadness. This is not an easy poetic form to create but you did well with it.
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review and for your kind comments.
