Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Tooth Fairy"a place to gather my poetic forms
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Comment from mbroyles2
Excellent as always.
I wish I could have gotten a cherry fiddle.
I like the addition of the summer months causing extra work for the tooth fairy.
Nice job!
Michael
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Excellent as always.
I wish I could have gotten a cherry fiddle.
I like the addition of the summer months causing extra work for the tooth fairy.
Nice job!
Michael
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work.
luna
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a slightly different take on the rondeau with which I am familiar allowing as it does the refrain line to be embellished somewhat rather than just the part of line one. This treatment certainly allows for some interesting development, here it is "spellbound" which is such an appropriate word in a verse about magic. Yes magic, what else could change that old tooth for "a fiddle of cherry".
The English tradition was for the exchanged item to be a silver sixpence but I would not be surprised to find that inflation has caught up with even folk traditions and one GBP is probably the current going rate.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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This is a slightly different take on the rondeau with which I am familiar allowing as it does the refrain line to be embellished somewhat rather than just the part of line one. This treatment certainly allows for some interesting development, here it is "spellbound" which is such an appropriate word in a verse about magic. Yes magic, what else could change that old tooth for "a fiddle of cherry".
The English tradition was for the exchanged item to be a silver sixpence but I would not be surprised to find that inflation has caught up with even folk traditions and one GBP is probably the current going rate.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thank you, my friend, for this review. You know I'm always pleased when you read what I write and I love hearing your thoughts. I wasn't sure if this one was any good - I posted it on a whim. Next I think I'll write a septolet or cinquain.
Thanks again. I appreciate you.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Rondeau. The tooth fairy gains another tooth for building her castle. The girl lost her tooth but she will gain some money to buy more candy.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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A very well-written Rondeau. The tooth fairy gains another tooth for building her castle. The girl lost her tooth but she will gain some money to buy more candy.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work.
luna
Comment from Heather Knight
I love your rondeau. I like the topic you've chosen for it. My youngest son is 12 now and I'm sad she doesn't believe anymore. It was so much fun to see the happiness in his little face!
BTW, I wrote a Blitz poem after I read yours yesterday.
Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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I love your rondeau. I like the topic you've chosen for it. My youngest son is 12 now and I'm sad she doesn't believe anymore. It was so much fun to see the happiness in his little face!
BTW, I wrote a Blitz poem after I read yours yesterday.
Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much for reading my work and for this review. I appreciate your attention to my work.
luna
