Comment from Lisa Deverick

Excellent

Oh to feel that kind of emotion- the wild new love. I hope for you that it will last a lifetime! You picked a great picture to capture your words perfectly.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 01-May-2016

Thanks ever so much. I'm pleased. All the best. Ulla:)

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

A perfect 5/7/5 in structure and the words express a perfect love. Good enjambment in lines one and two, and lovely statement in line three. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016

Thank you so much for the great review.

Comment from Lannell912

Excellent

More than partnership I think of holding a child this poem indicates warm emotions that rhyme while Falling in Love With You embrace elegant soft-spoken easy to understand keep writing my son

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Quite a different poem all together. All best.

Comment from VaV-VOOM

Excellent

Beautiful poem and a great looking family. The flow to me was nice and soft; with all the right words, put in just the right way. Great review for me, thank you so much. Write On! VaV-VOOM!

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Hi there, Thanks for the great review, but you'll find I'd made major changes. It's quit a different poem now. All the best.

reply by VaV-VOOM on 29-Apr-2016

Cool, i'll check it out.

Comment from victor 66

Excellent

I don't know if a child involves romance but I'm not criticizing. I can feel the obvious love here and I'm sure romance is involved. I wish you good luck in this contest. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Thanks for this and I have had second thoughts. It's a total different poem now and I hope that you'll like it. All best.

reply by victor 66 on 29-May-2016

You are welcome.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Is this what passes for romance these days?
Where's the fiery passion, that burning, wanton desire?
I would hardly call familial love romantic. Perhaps you simply misunderstood the prompt?

Romance is many things, but can you have a romantic love for your children? Good Lord, I hope not!
Look, I mean no disrespect, really, I don't. It's just that if you really wanna win this thing, you might want to rethink your context.
I'm only trying to help...honestly...

No matter what you decide to do, I wish you the very best of luck.
~Dean

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Hi Dean, Well, I have changed the picture and now there's no connection to a baby. As I saw it was a romantic moment for the parents looking at their new arrival, but God forbid that it should be misunderstood. Now it reads differently I think and hope. All best.

reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Apr-2016

I've raised your rating, that's much better!
Good luck.
~Dean :}

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Hi Dean, thank you so much. That was an unfortunate mishap on my part. All the best.:))

reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Apr-2016

That's what we're here for. To try to help, if possible. Hey, I'd want someone to let me know, and I wasn't going to say anything to you at first. But, the way I see it, everyone wants a fighting chance at winning any contests they enter, so I thought I'd let you know, just to be safe.

Good luck. I'll be watching for your entry.
~Dean

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Dean, you can't imagine how pleased I am that you did let me know. I can see where I went wrong, and whether I do well or not is not the point ( that's a lie LOL) but I would hate to be misunderstood. I so appreciate your help. One other writer pointed it out, you probably know who, and also helped me along. :)))

reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Apr-2016

Well, it's good to know that I wasn't the only one who noticed it. I'm sure they were many more. Some simply won't say anything for fear of offending the author. I offend people everyday, so I'm used to it, heh-heh.

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

You certainly never offended me. As you say we are here to help each other not to belittle. And again, I'm happy you put me right:)))

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, anonymous. This is a very nice 5/7/5 wonderful job with the presentation! Your syllable count is good and the picture is attractive. Excellent!

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Hi Gypsy, I have taken your advise and changed the picture. No connection with a child. I never thought it could be so misunderstood but as it reads now it's love between two people. Well at least I hope so. All the best.

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 29-Apr-2016

Yes, it makes more sense now. Good job with the new picture. I hope you don't feel I am picking on you but I think the presentation would look better if you changed the font color to white. Let me know if you need help with that part. The poems is great!

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Thanks a lot, There's something wrong with the fonds. I didn't chose gray but all writing has grey surroundings. When I update it doesn't do it. Thanks a lot for your great help.

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 29-Apr-2016

I now what you mean that advance editing can be a pain. Let me check and I will change my rating for your efforts. Good job!

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 29-Apr-2016

It looks great! Good job and good luck with the contest. I changed the review and rate to 5 stars. Your poem deserves it.

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Thank you so much for helping me out and for the new review and for changing the rate. That's so kind of you. I'm glad you like it. :)))

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

The eternal life-cycle - that's what love is all about. The love of a parent for a child is indeed a new blossoming. The seed that comes to fruition is a true blessing.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Thank you very much, but I have ended up with quite a different poem. Mad a big mistake with the first one. All best.

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

The picture with the baby at center misleads a little, but since the couple seems romantically inclined, it's a triviality. An excellent entry, I think.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Well, thanks for the review, I have changed the picture and now it reads totally different. Now it's about love between two people. All the best.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

I have been reviewing all of the 5-7-5's for this contest and I will have to say that this will be a close one. Your poem touches my heart and every good parents hearts. well done.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Thanks a lot for your great review. I have changed it to something totally different, not the words as such but it was misunderstood by quite a few reviewers as it was portrayed. I don't mean to have another review, but would be pleased if you had a look. All the best.