I Issued an Invitation
poem in mixed meter and abcb rhyme122 total reviews
Comment from words
I love how your personify nature here and seem to have personal relationship with her.
It makes for delightful readind, Brooke.
You always leave me with a smile and an appreciation for well-crafted verse.
You are the master of all of the forms and make us all look good by being in the number one slot. You set the bar hight.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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I love how your personify nature here and seem to have personal relationship with her.
It makes for delightful readind, Brooke.
You always leave me with a smile and an appreciation for well-crafted verse.
You are the master of all of the forms and make us all look good by being in the number one slot. You set the bar hight.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Diane - here's something else to make you smile.
Miranda found a big lizard in their house several days ago and it is still on the loose. She has been freaking out about it. So this morning Sawyer said to her - Ouch, my foot hurts. She asked him what happened. My toe stepped on something. She asked him what and he told her a lizard. So she went to examine his foot to see if he's been bitten. He started to giggle. She asked if he was telling the truth of fibbing. Fibbing. And then he giggled again. LOL The kid is just 30 months old. I don't think many kids that age are half sophisticated enough to pull a prank like that :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
Ah! The other half of the pairing (the one I read first actually :-)
I actually found this one quite enchanting, and have been thinking about a response since I read it yesterday. . .but now that "The Moon Is My Companion" has been posted, I see t in a whole new light (LOL - no pun intended).
As a stand alone, I love the feeling of joyful embrace it conveys. And the wishfulness for endlessness. And yet, the acceptance that that cannot be.
Paired up with the other. . . simply wonderful :-)
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Ah! The other half of the pairing (the one I read first actually :-)
I actually found this one quite enchanting, and have been thinking about a response since I read it yesterday. . .but now that "The Moon Is My Companion" has been posted, I see t in a whole new light (LOL - no pun intended).
As a stand alone, I love the feeling of joyful embrace it conveys. And the wishfulness for endlessness. And yet, the acceptance that that cannot be.
Paired up with the other. . . simply wonderful :-)
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Leineco, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Charlene0513
To adewpearl,
A short skit addressing the sun as it tries to look its best on the disapproval of a friend that longs for the essence of the sun to stay.
Having good cadence with enjambments.
Charlene
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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To adewpearl,
A short skit addressing the sun as it tries to look its best on the disapproval of a friend that longs for the essence of the sun to stay.
Having good cadence with enjambments.
Charlene
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Charlene, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
The sun is a dazzling guest at any time, indeed, but as you note the day only lasts so long! MoonWillow's work is very striking.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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The sun is a dazzling guest at any time, indeed, but as you note the day only lasts so long! MoonWillow's work is very striking.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Evi, I so appreciate your generous an gracious response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from sibhus
What a really cool fanciful poem, Brooke. Nice to imagine that the sun could come out and spend time with us. You have done a wonderful job of painting the scene with your well rhymed words. They have such a happy carefree fell to them that is such fun to read. Good stuff there, Brooke.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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What a really cool fanciful poem, Brooke. Nice to imagine that the sun could come out and spend time with us. You have done a wonderful job of painting the scene with your well rhymed words. They have such a happy carefree fell to them that is such fun to read. Good stuff there, Brooke.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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sibhus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ninap2
Stunning. I love your rhyme scheme and wonderful word choice. Interesting that the sun is asked to stay awhile and says he will try to come again tomorrow. Very interesting perspective. I love that you used the word "set" and "down" as you suggest that the sun is setting I think.
"I'll don my finest frocks for you,
my scepter and my crown." -Superb lines. The sunset?
Your picture is just perfect. Thanks for sharing. -Nina
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Stunning. I love your rhyme scheme and wonderful word choice. Interesting that the sun is asked to stay awhile and says he will try to come again tomorrow. Very interesting perspective. I love that you used the word "set" and "down" as you suggest that the sun is setting I think.
"I'll don my finest frocks for you,
my scepter and my crown." -Superb lines. The sunset?
Your picture is just perfect. Thanks for sharing. -Nina
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Nina, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
Brooke, I like the broadness (I'm not calling you a broad--in fact, I'm sure you're not)of your imagination and your topics.
I like the way you frequently personify things, or concepts, or events as a way to explain things to children.
But (I'm not saying you have a big butt--in fact, I'm certain you don't), you never pander or talk down to the kids. Your vocabulary is nicely challenging, and clearly intended to expand young minds (I'm not saying you take LSD--my gosh, of course you don't, and you probably never even met Timothy Leary).
I'd better quit now. I'm late for my meds.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Brooke, I like the broadness (I'm not calling you a broad--in fact, I'm sure you're not)of your imagination and your topics.
I like the way you frequently personify things, or concepts, or events as a way to explain things to children.
But (I'm not saying you have a big butt--in fact, I'm certain you don't), you never pander or talk down to the kids. Your vocabulary is nicely challenging, and clearly intended to expand young minds (I'm not saying you take LSD--my gosh, of course you don't, and you probably never even met Timothy Leary).
I'd better quit now. I'm late for my meds.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Lee, I can get more enjoyment out of your reviews than out of many people's posts :-) Thank you so much, my friend. Gee golly, I don't get to be a broad? I'm sure they have way more fun than I do. Brooke
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I hope you don't mind when I get silly, Brooke. It's hard to review you without repeating myself in the praise department.
So, sometimes I opt for being entertaining. And you can be my broad any time you want.
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mind? you're fun than a barrel of monkeys :-) and the first guy who's said I can be hid broad in a few decades ;-)
Comment from Just2Write
A loving relationship, newly formed with the Sun. So glad she could make it to the party. Wonderful personification and 'feel good' messages in the speaker's encounter with a new-found friend. The flow on this write is as smooth as honey, and just as sweet. A great poem for children, and those of us who still wished we were.
Rose.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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A loving relationship, newly formed with the Sun. So glad she could make it to the party. Wonderful personification and 'feel good' messages in the speaker's encounter with a new-found friend. The flow on this write is as smooth as honey, and just as sweet. A great poem for children, and those of us who still wished we were.
Rose.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Rose, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Nosha17
I like the personification of the sun in your poem and the interplay between the narrator and the sun. Excellent imagery and rhyming. Most enjoyable and lovely illustration. Faye
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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I like the personification of the sun in your poem and the interplay between the narrator and the sun. Excellent imagery and rhyming. Most enjoyable and lovely illustration. Faye
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Faye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from robina1978
The artwork is stunning and complements your poem very well. Nice colours you chose. Difficult for me to judge the rhyme and mixed meter. But I take your word for it:)
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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The artwork is stunning and complements your poem very well. Nice colours you chose. Difficult for me to judge the rhyme and mixed meter. But I take your word for it:)
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Ine, thank you so much, my friend, for your generous review :-) Brooke
