Gloom Soon Passes
trochaic meter in 7/8/7/8122 total reviews
Comment from Leigh Ann
Hello, oh I'm so glad to be back here reading your excellent works again! This poeme is has just the right feeling for this fall time of year. The way you contrast the flowers with the child's bubbles is wonderful. Great work as usual. :)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Hello, oh I'm so glad to be back here reading your excellent works again! This poeme is has just the right feeling for this fall time of year. The way you contrast the flowers with the child's bubbles is wonderful. Great work as usual. :)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Leigh Ann, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. Please excuse the typos. I need to start editing my reviews.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
A wonderful message of renewal, Brooke. At least, that's how I see it. Life can take our dreams and tear them apart - but we can always create new ones.
Love the personification of the plants. True, too, that blades of grass can be sharp - like paper cuts - they really sting!
I also love bubbles! You don't have to be a kid to enjoy them.
Av
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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A wonderful message of renewal, Brooke. At least, that's how I see it. Life can take our dreams and tear them apart - but we can always create new ones.
Love the personification of the plants. True, too, that blades of grass can be sharp - like paper cuts - they really sting!
I also love bubbles! You don't have to be a kid to enjoy them.
Av
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Av, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Rmocruz
This metamorphosis is poetically presented in solidly rhymed quatrains. Colorful natural imagery and metaphor are effectively employed.
Excellent overall.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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This metamorphosis is poetically presented in solidly rhymed quatrains. Colorful natural imagery and metaphor are effectively employed.
Excellent overall.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Rmocruz, thanks so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome Brooke, my pleasure.
Rich.
Comment from Genya
Not everybody's favourite flower but how beautiful they are both in flower and in seed. Gone are the days I would pick them and see what time it was by blowing them. Gone are the days when we were told we would wee the bed if we picked them. A beautiful contrast of the dandelions and the bubbles. Dandelion seeds of silk, hitch a ride on breezes blowing. One thing we can always be sure of, there will be hundreds more next year. Beautiful. Genya
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Not everybody's favourite flower but how beautiful they are both in flower and in seed. Gone are the days I would pick them and see what time it was by blowing them. Gone are the days when we were told we would wee the bed if we picked them. A beautiful contrast of the dandelions and the bubbles. Dandelion seeds of silk, hitch a ride on breezes blowing. One thing we can always be sure of, there will be hundreds more next year. Beautiful. Genya
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Genya, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Ah, Brooke, all your favourites in one poem, and this time full of images of floating dandelion seeds and bubbles side-by-side, spangled globes, Giddy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Ah, Brooke, all your favourites in one poem, and this time full of images of floating dandelion seeds and bubbles side-by-side, spangled globes, Giddy
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Giddy, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Dom G Robles
I suppose this poem has a lot of images. They are amusing and alluring. The rhyme, I suppose, is great but not very much on the rhythm, I think. I am impressed by the expression, as well as with the picture accompanying. Thanks for sharing. Dom
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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I suppose this poem has a lot of images. They are amusing and alluring. The rhyme, I suppose, is great but not very much on the rhythm, I think. I am impressed by the expression, as well as with the picture accompanying. Thanks for sharing. Dom
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Dom, for reviewing :-) The rhythm is trochaic, a meter that is not as familiar to many. Brooke
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Thank you. Trochaic. I still like free verse where you have greater latitude and you can move freely around. More freedom. Dom
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that is what I like about poetry - you are free to write in a style you find best suited to you and I am free to write in meter and rhyme
Comment from Acquired Taste
Orange lollipop - works for me.
I enjoy reading your work because as you've posted above, you have a talent for making the sometimes darker side of things, items that might make us sad, seem momentary and renewal is but around the corner. Lovely poem. Jean
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Orange lollipop - works for me.
I enjoy reading your work because as you've posted above, you have a talent for making the sometimes darker side of things, items that might make us sad, seem momentary and renewal is but around the corner. Lovely poem. Jean
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Jean, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ronnie k
"Flowing rainbows dashed....by assassin sword..." when I reached this exceptional line I was forced to return to the opening for no other reason than to read it again, loved it.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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"Flowing rainbows dashed....by assassin sword..." when I reached this exceptional line I was forced to return to the opening for no other reason than to read it again, loved it.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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ronnie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from zanya
A poem with magic at its heart encouraging our young ones to 'raise your magic wands...
till the gloom of loss soon passes'.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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A poem with magic at its heart encouraging our young ones to 'raise your magic wands...
till the gloom of loss soon passes'.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Thank you, zanya, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
Good job Brooke with your traditional poem. The abab rhyne scheme flows and the description paint great imagery. Nice charge to the children at the end. 8-)
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Good job Brooke with your traditional poem. The abab rhyne scheme flows and the description paint great imagery. Nice charge to the children at the end. 8-)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
