Shadow Dance
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6167 total reviews
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke Another lovely poem and delightful photo that goes with it.I like the rhyming pattern. Also your clever use of rhyming words ie regularity/and me. Not so sure about gone/dawn Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke Another lovely poem and delightful photo that goes with it.I like the rhyming pattern. Also your clever use of rhyming words ie regularity/and me. Not so sure about gone/dawn Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Gaye. The gone/dawn thing is our Australian/American accents colliding :-) Believe me, they rhyme in my corner of the globe :-) Brooke
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
This is a beautiful and perfectly crafted poem picture pair. The poem is instructive and an enjoyable read. Sawyer will love when he is able to read it. Thanks for sharing. Bob
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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This is a beautiful and perfectly crafted poem picture pair. The poem is instructive and an enjoyable read. Sawyer will love when he is able to read it. Thanks for sharing. Bob
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Bob, thank you so much for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from janalma
How very cute. I love all the ways you express the world and its revelations. Makes us all look with new eyes at what you bring before us. I think it's because you're looking with a child's eyes. Sawyer's in fact. Very good.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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How very cute. I love all the ways you express the world and its revelations. Makes us all look with new eyes at what you bring before us. I think it's because you're looking with a child's eyes. Sawyer's in fact. Very good.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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janalma, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
Wonderfully crafted. Yes, only small children think like this. They still believe in magic and aren't bound by our ridged rules. We all played with our shadows when we were young. It's shame we don't anymore.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Wonderfully crafted. Yes, only small children think like this. They still believe in magic and aren't bound by our ridged rules. We all played with our shadows when we were young. It's shame we don't anymore.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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lancellot, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, with that child's voice, reminds me of those precious, precious times as a child that I pondered so many innocent questions like this one. It takes me back to a good place.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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This poem, with that child's voice, reminds me of those precious, precious times as a child that I pondered so many innocent questions like this one. It takes me back to a good place.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Bill :-) Did you come up with good answers? LOL Brooke
Comment from tdragonfly
Very sweet. Every kid needs his shadow buddy. The photo selection was a good choice for this poem. This could be a metaphor for someone regarding a friendship but I do not think so. It's about the relationship of a boy and his shadow. Well written.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Very sweet. Every kid needs his shadow buddy. The photo selection was a good choice for this poem. This could be a metaphor for someone regarding a friendship but I do not think so. It's about the relationship of a boy and his shadow. Well written.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, tdragonfly :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
I only know one thing about shadows. They're attached to your feet, somehow. Glue? Nails? Scotch Tape? Velcro?
When I was a cub, we used to celebrate Lord Baden Powell night in February (I think) each year. The Brownies, Cubs, Girl Guides, Scouts and Venturers would sing songs and put on skits. It was like a Laverne & Shirley talent show. One year, the scouts put up a white sheet, and with the help of a bright light and shadows, they staged an "operation" using saws and hammers. They'd haul almost anything out of that famous victim. It was a spectacular show! Shadows can be fun in more ways than one.
Great picture of Sawyer having fun with his shadow.
I especially like the alliteration in these lines,
"Some people celebrate the sun"
"reappears with regularity"
and consonance in
"making morning glories bloom"
I always like to see inner rhyme...
"Appreciation flows from those"
My favourite verse,
"I miss him when the sun dips down
and wonder where he's gone --
Is there some place where shadows go
between the dusk and dawn?"
Nicely penned!
Thanks for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke
I only know one thing about shadows. They're attached to your feet, somehow. Glue? Nails? Scotch Tape? Velcro?
When I was a cub, we used to celebrate Lord Baden Powell night in February (I think) each year. The Brownies, Cubs, Girl Guides, Scouts and Venturers would sing songs and put on skits. It was like a Laverne & Shirley talent show. One year, the scouts put up a white sheet, and with the help of a bright light and shadows, they staged an "operation" using saws and hammers. They'd haul almost anything out of that famous victim. It was a spectacular show! Shadows can be fun in more ways than one.
Great picture of Sawyer having fun with his shadow.
I especially like the alliteration in these lines,
"Some people celebrate the sun"
"reappears with regularity"
and consonance in
"making morning glories bloom"
I always like to see inner rhyme...
"Appreciation flows from those"
My favourite verse,
"I miss him when the sun dips down
and wonder where he's gone --
Is there some place where shadows go
between the dusk and dawn?"
Nicely penned!
Thanks for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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I just love your memories, my clever and entertaining friend :-) Thanks so very much, Kimbob :-) Brooke
Comment from Eternal Muse
Brooke, this is so perfect! What a fantastic, rare shot of a shadow Saywer is casting, and it dances! An award-winning photo.
Loved it.
For when the morning sun appears,
my shadow tags along,
and he and I have always known --
together, we belong.
I miss him when the sun dips down
and wonder where he's gone --
Is there some place where shadows go
between the dusk and dawn?
I enjoyed the adventures of our little Sawyer again, and of course, his happiness over his own shadow. Give him a kiss for me.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Brooke, this is so perfect! What a fantastic, rare shot of a shadow Saywer is casting, and it dances! An award-winning photo.
Loved it.
For when the morning sun appears,
my shadow tags along,
and he and I have always known --
together, we belong.
I miss him when the sun dips down
and wonder where he's gone --
Is there some place where shadows go
between the dusk and dawn?
I enjoyed the adventures of our little Sawyer again, and of course, his happiness over his own shadow. Give him a kiss for me.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Yelena :-) We blow kisses to each other over the phone. I don't get to kiss him in person until December 5. Yes, it is a wonderful photo, isn't it? Brooke
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A unique photo.
Comment from Pyrrho
A pleasant walk with a shadowy friend. Your line, "between the dusk and dawn," reminds me of a poem in progress (i have a passel of them) in which the search for the perfect rhyming word led me to refer to life as the time between dust and dust Which for one with no illusions about afterlives is an interesting ... observation? conclusion? or something.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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A pleasant walk with a shadowy friend. Your line, "between the dusk and dawn," reminds me of a poem in progress (i have a passel of them) in which the search for the perfect rhyming word led me to refer to life as the time between dust and dust Which for one with no illusions about afterlives is an interesting ... observation? conclusion? or something.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Pyrhho. A passel of poems in progress - I'm envious :-) Brooke
Comment from Just Pete
Another wonderfully light and amusing poem that makes such good use of something that usually goes unnoticed.
"For when the morning sun appears,
my shadow tags along,
and he and I have always known --
together, we belong...."
A perfect match for the picture. Congratulations on those awards. Pete
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Another wonderfully light and amusing poem that makes such good use of something that usually goes unnoticed.
"For when the morning sun appears,
my shadow tags along,
and he and I have always known --
together, we belong...."
A perfect match for the picture. Congratulations on those awards. Pete
Comment Written 16-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Pete, thank you so much :-) Brooke
