A Ladybug of Several Dots
A Quatern126 total reviews
Comment from TOMORAL
Loved this one as well. Perfect with the first line ambling through each stanza to find just the right spot. Lovely poem and lightens my day, as all of yours do.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Loved this one as well. Perfect with the first line ambling through each stanza to find just the right spot. Lovely poem and lightens my day, as all of yours do.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Tomoral, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from James Dooney
YOu have done another decent work here too Brooke ! You know how to keep them coming huh ! The rhyme, the rhythm and the reason wins here again !
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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YOu have done another decent work here too Brooke ! You know how to keep them coming huh ! The rhyme, the rhythm and the reason wins here again !
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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James, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from harmony13
Excellent poem! The poem flows and connects well. The rhyming supports the flow of this poem. The author's words are descriptive, creative and clear. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Excellent poem! The poem flows and connects well. The rhyming supports the flow of this poem. The author's words are descriptive, creative and clear. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of this poem.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Harmony, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
And eating aphids by the pots, I hope!
Nice, Dr Seuss-like piece in the formal structure of the quatern. The strong rhyme of lots/dots/spots gives a light-hearted feel.
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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And eating aphids by the pots, I hope!
Nice, Dr Seuss-like piece in the formal structure of the quatern. The strong rhyme of lots/dots/spots gives a light-hearted feel.
Steve
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Steve, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from BLACKDYKE
You do know don't you Brooke, that there
are lots and lots of beetles with dots
moving around like little red blots, not
wanting to taste any sprouting shallots
and travelling light to stop any plots
against traitorous Scots, who aim to leave
with a whisky shot before they elope whilst
leaving a blot-on the landscape a lot!
I'm fedup now, I'm off to see the wizard. Eric
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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You do know don't you Brooke, that there
are lots and lots of beetles with dots
moving around like little red blots, not
wanting to taste any sprouting shallots
and travelling light to stop any plots
against traitorous Scots, who aim to leave
with a whisky shot before they elope whilst
leaving a blot-on the landscape a lot!
I'm fedup now, I'm off to see the wizard. Eric
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Eric, thank you :-) What a delightful poetic response to my poem :-) Brooke
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Sorry for the potty response. My pleasure.
Comment from 9999pool
Another story of the great and pretty ladybug. As she wanders all over the leaves and basking here and then at a certain spot, she will enjoy the sunshine on her spot with that spot she and rooted herself.
She will continue on her adventure of spots within spots on the leaves and her droppings will mark the spot she had been too, smiles.
A great children's story and for adults too.
Great write.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Another story of the great and pretty ladybug. As she wanders all over the leaves and basking here and then at a certain spot, she will enjoy the sunshine on her spot with that spot she and rooted herself.
She will continue on her adventure of spots within spots on the leaves and her droppings will mark the spot she had been too, smiles.
A great children's story and for adults too.
Great write.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Ritchie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure, Brooke.
Have a great day and a wonderful time too.
Cheerio, Ritchie. ;))
Comment from Ben Colder
Excellent poem Brooke. I wish to see many of these creatures in my garden and orchard. They eat aphids and other insects. A Gardner's friend. Blessings
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Excellent poem Brooke. I wish to see many of these creatures in my garden and orchard. They eat aphids and other insects. A Gardner's friend. Blessings
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Ben, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from N.M Bernia
Nicely rhymed and interesting. Very nice picture :) One thing, hate to be picky, but several usually means three or four...not that it matters much at all :D
Great poem all the way around, keep up the great work XD
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Nicely rhymed and interesting. Very nice picture :) One thing, hate to be picky, but several usually means three or four...not that it matters much at all :D
Great poem all the way around, keep up the great work XD
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, N.M. - I take it to mean more than three, which is a few, but not many. :-) Brooke
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Yeah...maybe it just means more than three but less than ten :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This quatem is a nice delivery of this ladybug story that trills along gathering the readers interest in the activity of this tiny creature. Is the rhyme scheme always the same? AABB AACC DDAA EEAA I noted that the end words on lines 1,2 and 3,4 are consonic (I just made this word up) with each other, as are lines 9,10 and 13,14. That is marvelously sneaky.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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This quatem is a nice delivery of this ladybug story that trills along gathering the readers interest in the activity of this tiny creature. Is the rhyme scheme always the same? AABB AACC DDAA EEAA I noted that the end words on lines 1,2 and 3,4 are consonic (I just made this word up) with each other, as are lines 9,10 and 13,14. That is marvelously sneaky.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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I use couplets throughout and need to follow the quatern pattern of the first line repeating and descending one line in each stanza, so that is how it works out :-) One can also use abab rhyming in the quatern, which is actually what I usually do.
Thanks for your review, Bill :-) Brooke
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Thank you
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with lots/dots. Good alliteration with spot/special/stay...can/choose...sun/shone...so/sun/shed...she'd/savor/sun. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with lots/dots. Good alliteration with spot/special/stay...can/choose...sun/shone...so/sun/shed...she'd/savor/sun. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you so much :-) Brooke
