Happy Holidays?
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Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Ward - I really enjoyed your dream poem, very characteristic of dreams where different situations and periods intermix - strange how the brain works when we sleep. You packed a lot into stanza 2 - Line 1 with the way so many Native Americans were treated and the turkey, which originated in US. Line 2 the washing of the feet symbolising Jesus having his feet washed, Line 3 - Children dressed for Halloween then stanza 4, brings in the defeat of the South in the Civil war. That stanza, and the rest of your poem is so typical how muddled and intermixing our dreams are and you have expressed it so well in this poem. Very well written. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Hi Ward - I really enjoyed your dream poem, very characteristic of dreams where different situations and periods intermix - strange how the brain works when we sleep. You packed a lot into stanza 2 - Line 1 with the way so many Native Americans were treated and the turkey, which originated in US. Line 2 the washing of the feet symbolising Jesus having his feet washed, Line 3 - Children dressed for Halloween then stanza 4, brings in the defeat of the South in the Civil war. That stanza, and the rest of your poem is so typical how muddled and intermixing our dreams are and you have expressed it so well in this poem. Very well written. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Dorothy Fennell,
Thank you for your review with a six. There getting hard to come by, also I appreciate your kind remarks.
Ward
Comment from seaglass
Most of our holidays are a mixture of Christian and pagan traditions. I have no problem with holidays as long as they draw families together and create happy memories. I don't like the capitalistic craz.
However, history is another matter. the truth is interesting, so why did they rewrite it, making heroes out of those who did more wrong than right? I can't believe I was taught in school that Betsy Ross made the flag. NOT. This poem has great rhyme and meter and challenges our divisive history.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Most of our holidays are a mixture of Christian and pagan traditions. I have no problem with holidays as long as they draw families together and create happy memories. I don't like the capitalistic craz.
However, history is another matter. the truth is interesting, so why did they rewrite it, making heroes out of those who did more wrong than right? I can't believe I was taught in school that Betsy Ross made the flag. NOT. This poem has great rhyme and meter and challenges our divisive history.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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seaglass,
Thank you for your review and comments. I think my prompt was
was reading a book about all the lies I learned in school before
going to sleep.
Ward
Comment from royowen
You've posed many questions and happenings in your well written and a provocative poem, a little too dense for me, but interesting never less, these are questions for the wisest of all philosophers!
Christ absorbed all problems, sin, illness, poverty, injury, sadness, iniquity, Sadness, loneliness, the list is endless, on the cross, before that, He said, "come to me all ye weak and heavy laden and I will give you rest!" Matthew. 11:28-30! Interesting rhyme scheme, nice even meter, well expressed and articulate, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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You've posed many questions and happenings in your well written and a provocative poem, a little too dense for me, but interesting never less, these are questions for the wisest of all philosophers!
Christ absorbed all problems, sin, illness, poverty, injury, sadness, iniquity, Sadness, loneliness, the list is endless, on the cross, before that, He said, "come to me all ye weak and heavy laden and I will give you rest!" Matthew. 11:28-30! Interesting rhyme scheme, nice even meter, well expressed and articulate, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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royowen,
Thank you for four review and feedback.
Ward
Comment from kittykatnoel
Excellently written poem. You must have the most interesting dreams. I almost didn't read it, with the title being "Happy Holidays", because I get so tired of sappy sanctimonious dribble. This poem is not those things, and I found it quite engaging. Thank you for sharing your dream and writing.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Excellently written poem. You must have the most interesting dreams. I almost didn't read it, with the title being "Happy Holidays", because I get so tired of sappy sanctimonious dribble. This poem is not those things, and I found it quite engaging. Thank you for sharing your dream and writing.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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kittykatnoel,
Thank you for four review and feedback.
Ward
Comment from Sam Mendonca
I enjoyed your powerful poem with such descriptive wording, reminding all of us that there's more to Thanksgiving and Christmas than just material things. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I enjoyed your powerful poem with such descriptive wording, reminding all of us that there's more to Thanksgiving and Christmas than just material things. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you for reading and for your feedback.
Ward
Comment from kiwijenny
What a thought provoking poem...
Well penned and it made me think and question....why does a rabbit bring eggs? He's forgiven because they are chocolate but who lays out a our laws and fashions our fashions? So glad we just wear high heels and don't bind children's feet.
Thank you and happy thanksgiving.
God bless
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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What a thought provoking poem...
Well penned and it made me think and question....why does a rabbit bring eggs? He's forgiven because they are chocolate but who lays out a our laws and fashions our fashions? So glad we just wear high heels and don't bind children's feet.
Thank you and happy thanksgiving.
God bless
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you for reading and for your feedback. We have managed to escape that particular fashion torture, but there are plenty lesser ones we have been through.
Ward
Comment from Sonaleeka
How insanely beautiful can a poem be?
So pleased with the self-descriptory artwork.
Very exciting. Very mind-blowing.
God bless!Have a nice day!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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How insanely beautiful can a poem be?
So pleased with the self-descriptory artwork.
Very exciting. Very mind-blowing.
God bless!Have a nice day!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much for you kind review. I appreciate the feedback and the stars. Your comments mean a lot to me, more than any stars.
Comment from Muffins
The rhyme sustains a powerful presence throughout the poem. Each stanza asks strong, uncomfortable questions about ourselves and our history. The 2 stanzas that stood out for me were:There were a dozen dead natives with turkey to eat
People standing in line to wash a man's feet
Children dressed as demons awaiting a treat
In the south, millions reenact a defeat.
And:There was a man finding a land not lost
The natives saved him to their own cost
Taking their god and getting a cross
While gold and silver was treasure sought.
This poem took me to a new place in regards to thinking about history and holidays. I really enjoy it when I read something that makes me pause.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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The rhyme sustains a powerful presence throughout the poem. Each stanza asks strong, uncomfortable questions about ourselves and our history. The 2 stanzas that stood out for me were:There were a dozen dead natives with turkey to eat
People standing in line to wash a man's feet
Children dressed as demons awaiting a treat
In the south, millions reenact a defeat.
And:There was a man finding a land not lost
The natives saved him to their own cost
Taking their god and getting a cross
While gold and silver was treasure sought.
This poem took me to a new place in regards to thinking about history and holidays. I really enjoy it when I read something that makes me pause.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your review and your feedback. Our holidays do have some very interesting history to go along with them. I find it very interesting that Valentines day is named for a murdered saint and after the native Americans saved the colonists from starving, remembered by Thanksgiving, and were repaid by having their land taken away.
I appreciate that you took the time to read my poem and write your comments.
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I re-read this poem several times, thinking about how we brush the raw wounded part of hoilday's in order to justify celebrating them. Again, great job.
Comment from Caressa_08
Quite a satirical read in part & some kind of dream that showed the other side of Thanksgiving, really?. ..A possible realization of the historical past, with maybe for some, nonsensical things occurring, or who knows all went on then, when life seemed pleasant enough for just a little while & too ever-changing & turning so cruel about how even later in America, starting with the Indians, & what pale faces did to them to get their land & now what men of all colors have to endure today, which seems to be about in part circumstances of the past that started from way back when ..Really like the last stanza...It kept my attention from beginning to end with good rhyme. Hope to read more of your poetry.
Caressa
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Quite a satirical read in part & some kind of dream that showed the other side of Thanksgiving, really?. ..A possible realization of the historical past, with maybe for some, nonsensical things occurring, or who knows all went on then, when life seemed pleasant enough for just a little while & too ever-changing & turning so cruel about how even later in America, starting with the Indians, & what pale faces did to them to get their land & now what men of all colors have to endure today, which seems to be about in part circumstances of the past that started from way back when ..Really like the last stanza...It kept my attention from beginning to end with good rhyme. Hope to read more of your poetry.
Caressa
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and to leave feedback. I appreciate your input. I find the origins of some of our holidays to be intriguing.
Comment from c_lucas
The "New World" had over twenty one million inhabitants. Buffalo roamed in numbers of tens of million. Forests were in abundant. Looking deep, your dream was a nightmare for those who stood in the way of progress. Very well written.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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The "New World" had over twenty one million inhabitants. Buffalo roamed in numbers of tens of million. Forests were in abundant. Looking deep, your dream was a nightmare for those who stood in the way of progress. Very well written.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2014
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c_lucus,
Thank you for the excellent review.
Have a good evening.
Ward
