Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Nicely done, Bill. A real feel good story.
Am I to assume this is the end of the Rabbit stories,
or just the end of this 'chapter'?.
For what it's worth, I think more is better.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013

Hi Lee - not the last chapter. I've outlined two more, so it won't end for awhile. Thanks for your support and encouragement. Bill

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

I hope this isn't the last chapter. I'll miss Virge's wisdom and the adventures on the farm. Great part here about instinct and then how to go on in life even if you don't always win.

Suggestions:
-say goodbye to Virge(.")
-I'm anxious to get home(a boy might not use the word anxious. This sounds so grown up. Maybe, 'I can't wait to get home...' )

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013

Thanks for reading, the spot and suggestion. It's actually been hard to stay true to the POV of a boy. I circled back and changed. Regards, Bill

reply by barkingdog on 05-Jul-2013

I was writing as a four year old several years ago. Try that one. Very hard. Their logic is different, too.
I think you're doing very well, Bill.

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

Simply nice, the bond of friendship between Rabbit and Virge is exceptional , the nuggets of wisdom, the instincts of snakes, cats, and dogs, the virtue of sportsmanship in
losing, and in striving to get better after a failure, all these were impressed upon the young mind of Rabbit and this boy will carry the lessons until he grows up. The exchange od conversations between Virge and Rabbit is effective in presenting those lessons without lecturing, it comes out naturally in their easy banter. Well done.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013

Thank you for reading and for your kind feedback. I appreciate both. Bill

Comment from Titanx9

Excellent

It's been a long time since I visited Virge and Rabbit. I didn't realize how much I missed the ease of your storytelling until I started to read this chapter. I hope there are a few more for me to savor before the end of the book. Congratulations on publishing your book! I'm not surprised.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013

Thanks for reading and the kind feedback. I have outlines prepared for two more chapters, and might squeeze out three. Regards, Bill

Comment from Matthew M.

Exceptional

I enjoyed this last day of Rabbit with his friend Virge. It was a sweet scene.

Virge was a ninety years old black man
It reads a little better if it was:
a ninety-year-old black man

The six is for this line:
You taught me that if you try your best and things don't work out, just walk away with your head high and a smile on your face.



Congratulations on your upcoming published story!

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013

Thanks for reading Matthew and the wonderful compliment of the six. We get so few, so I'm always honored to get one. Bill

Comment from marion

Excellent

I enjoyed this chapter. Well written. Consistent flow.

My favourite line: It looked like his wrinkles had wrinkles.

Then, you ought to go and say goodbye to Virge (.") Left out.

Marion

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013

Thanks for reading Marion and your kind words. I did circle back for that correction. Regards, Bill

Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

I am glad to see another one of these chapters, bhogg. I've enjoyed reading them. Is this the last chapter? I hope not.

I tried several time to write a review on my laptop for this, but some reason I can't type on it. I'll have to get it checked out to see what's wrong.

I was going to say something about the two Grandpa's in the first sentence, but I see you've already correct it.

This is well written.

April :o)

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013

Thanks for reading April, and your kind feedback. I've outlined two additional chapters and might squeeze out three. Warm regards, Bill

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

Sure sounds like a great breakfast for a man or boy, rabbit. I think you southern folks live well!

It must have been sad saying goodbye to Virge. At his age, every goodbye might have been his last. Maybe you were too young to realize it. Very touching!

I just love the way Virge never missed an opportunity to teach Rabbit another lesson. Good lesson on instincts.

And then Rabbit gets him on the old Walter Raleigh in the can, joke. Too cute, Bill.

I love your rabbit stories. Well done!

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013

Thanks Adri - I love kind feedback from writers I admire! Bill

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This is great. I love your stories about Rabbit and Virge. There is one typo that you might want to change. In the first sentence you said "grandpa and grandpa". I think you meant to say "grandpa and grandma". The story is fantastic, as always.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Judy - thanks so much for reading and your kind words and spot. Corrected! Regards, Bill

Comment from N.K. Wagner

Excellent

I've enjoyed your summer in Georgia, Bill. A great last line. One thing to look at:

I watched a movie with my grandpa and grandpa - grandma?

:) Nancy

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Hi Nancy - always glad when you stop by. Correction made. Do you think some of my material might be appropriate for your blog? Warm regards, Bill