Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart

Excellent

Now is this what is called a script piece. This was very interesting and cute. You are definitely one that has a vivid imagination. Good job. God loves you and so do I.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013

Thanks for the kind, loving remarks.

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Just out of curiousity, why is this story set in 1947? I notice no period (the other period) references.

Best of luck with the voters.

Peace, Lee


'Punctuation(,) though(,) is something that(,) at times(,) is completely out of control. --Ironic, isn't it?

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013

I like the time era and I wanted it to sound like an old Dragnet show.

reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013

I actually just changed the year to 1967 when Dragnet first ran on TV

reply by humpwhistle on 14-Jun-2013

Ah. I think '67 was the second incarnation of Dragnet. Not that anybody cares, but Joe Friday's badge number was 714.

reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013

I guess the radio program was first. Maybe I'll use the badge number, thanks.

reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013

I guess the radio program was first. Maybe I'll use the badge number, thanks.

Comment from abbasjoy

Excellent

Hilarious! I love the fun way that you use these various punctuation marks by giving them names and characters.
Each one has taken on a personality and truly comes alive, making what could easily be a boring topic, one filled with humour.
Truly funny post.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013

Thanks, your rating and comments makes me feel good about what I wrote.

Comment from kiddo58

Needs Improvement

You had a nice concept, but didn't hold it together well. I think you wanted it to be funny, but I lost interest half way into it. Maybe it's me and not you?

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013

Must be you because everyone else who read it gave me great reviews.

reply by kiddo58 on 13-Jun-2013

I'll buy that. That's what makes the world go round. I'm happy for you that you did get positive feedback. It sucks when we get negative feedback. But we put ourselves out there and we have to be able to take it.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this si very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this cute story about the punctuation squad ruling the universe. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from Rosalyne

Excellent

What a marvelous story! Yes, I used an exclamation mark. lol
Your story is so clever, and well written. I really enjoyed how you used grammar as characters. Very very clever.
Best of luck with the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Bye
Rosalyne

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 Comment Written 13-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013

Thanks for the stars. it was a fun write.