Savannah Love
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Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara,
This is an excellent continuation of the story and helps the reader better understand the class system in Charleston. It would appear the locals don't approve of Paige's indifference to the subject. The dialog is excellent and the characters communicate effectively.
There is one sentence you may want to review.
"Hmm, I'm wondering if either or both of you are part of the Walkers who own the large [planation](plantation) north of town by the river."
It was a pleasant read.
Curtis
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Barbara,
This is an excellent continuation of the story and helps the reader better understand the class system in Charleston. It would appear the locals don't approve of Paige's indifference to the subject. The dialog is excellent and the characters communicate effectively.
There is one sentence you may want to review.
"Hmm, I'm wondering if either or both of you are part of the Walkers who own the large [planation](plantation) north of town by the river."
It was a pleasant read.
Curtis
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I have fixed that little typo.
Comment from judiverse
It sounds like Dwayne Walker has sent this grandmother to snoop a bit. The ladies who visit Paige are all about social standing, and are all about the DAR, Daughters of the Revolution, etc. They do leave quickly when Paige mentions the Chicago Board of Trade. Maurice makes another of his colorful appearances. He's always entertaining. Paige is onto the ladies, and the purpose of their visit. One observation. I wonder if you're overdoing Paige's injury a bit. Wouldn't she be able to get around better by now? judi
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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It sounds like Dwayne Walker has sent this grandmother to snoop a bit. The ladies who visit Paige are all about social standing, and are all about the DAR, Daughters of the Revolution, etc. They do leave quickly when Paige mentions the Chicago Board of Trade. Maurice makes another of his colorful appearances. He's always entertaining. Paige is onto the ladies, and the purpose of their visit. One observation. I wonder if you're overdoing Paige's injury a bit. Wouldn't she be able to get around better by now? judi
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement.
Comment from unimatrix001
Greed is a powerful incentive for immoral behavior. Fortunately, Paige is smart and has done her homework.
This is a good example of threatening quitely, which is rarely done well, but highly useful for intimidating polite company.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Greed is a powerful incentive for immoral behavior. Fortunately, Paige is smart and has done her homework.
This is a good example of threatening quitely, which is rarely done well, but highly useful for intimidating polite company.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
We had fun right along with Paige in this post, Barbara. It sure helps to have a sense of humor when dealing with the "upper crust". Well done. :) nancy
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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We had fun right along with Paige in this post, Barbara. It sure helps to have a sense of humor when dealing with the "upper crust". Well done. :) nancy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Jones
The blueberry muffins are making me hungry. Stuffy old bags. How clever Paige is. Well written as always.
Look forward to the next chapter.
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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The blueberry muffins are making me hungry. Stuffy old bags. How clever Paige is. Well written as always.
Look forward to the next chapter.
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from chasennov
Savannah Love. 'Chapter 10, part two.' A good chapter which I thought was very well written and also indicates a neat structure to the narrative. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Savannah Love. 'Chapter 10, part two.' A good chapter which I thought was very well written and also indicates a neat structure to the narrative. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome, Barbara.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
What a nice slice of the Savannah Social (Snooty?) Register. The fact that they were grandparents of Dwayne Walker seemed to be enough to put Paige on edge. I don't quite know why they came to visit, but I'm sure it was more out of curiosity than to be neighborly.
Were they really there to put Paige 'in her place.' I'm sure they won't be back.
Nice chapter with 'telling' dialog.
Roger
1. "Oh my, maybe we came at a bad time." [The lady without the cane eyebrows rose.==> The lady with the cane mused as her eyebrows rose.] {This seemed like an awkward sentence structure, hense the suggested change.}
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Hi Barbara:)
What a nice slice of the Savannah Social (Snooty?) Register. The fact that they were grandparents of Dwayne Walker seemed to be enough to put Paige on edge. I don't quite know why they came to visit, but I'm sure it was more out of curiosity than to be neighborly.
Were they really there to put Paige 'in her place.' I'm sure they won't be back.
Nice chapter with 'telling' dialog.
Roger
1. "Oh my, maybe we came at a bad time." [The lady without the cane eyebrows rose.==> The lady with the cane mused as her eyebrows rose.] {This seemed like an awkward sentence structure, hense the suggested change.}
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Sorry for the late reply, but I needed time to make the corrections without making further corrections. I appreciate the eagle eye. That sentence has been giving me fits.
Comment from barkingdog
She sure did have those two running out the door when she mentioned the commodities market. LOL I loved it. Point for her!
Only two small suggestions, barbara:
-You're new in Savannah[,] and we wanted to welcome
- with the Daughters of[the] American Revolution
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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She sure did have those two running out the door when she mentioned the commodities market. LOL I loved it. Point for her!
Only two small suggestions, barbara:
-You're new in Savannah[,] and we wanted to welcome
- with the Daughters of[the] American Revolution
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Will take care of those issue. Thank you for the eagle eye.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Very polite way to get rid of unwanted guests whose mission is not clear. I enjoyed reading this post. The visitors have introduced a twist to the story. Very nice ending. kudos
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Very polite way to get rid of unwanted guests whose mission is not clear. I enjoyed reading this post. The visitors have introduced a twist to the story. Very nice ending. kudos
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Very well done and most interesting. Just one thing, You write, "The Lady without the cane eyebrows rose." It took me a moment to understand that you were speaking of a walking cane, I thought the other one had a unibrow or something. =}
Maybe it could read, "the lady without the cane raised her eyebrows." or maybe just a comma would help. Or maybe I'm just a little dense, =} Otherwise really good read. Rox
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Very well done and most interesting. Just one thing, You write, "The Lady without the cane eyebrows rose." It took me a moment to understand that you were speaking of a walking cane, I thought the other one had a unibrow or something. =}
Maybe it could read, "the lady without the cane raised her eyebrows." or maybe just a comma would help. Or maybe I'm just a little dense, =} Otherwise really good read. Rox
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I will work on that sentence.
