Comment from squid152

Excellent

I loved your openening stanza. A lot of big words here that I need a dictionary to understand. I don't want to insult you.-Gary

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

No worries, enjoy once you understand them it all makes perfect sense...

Comment from Curtis Hatch

Excellent

Syphilis is a debilitating disease if not treated properly and timely. The product of unsafe sex it is spread easily. If I take a symbolic approach, syphilis can represent a sick mind that relishes in the vilest acts of life. Both can ruin the minds of careless men. Curtis

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

My sentiments exactly, much appreciated.

Comment from Grace Campbell

Excellent

This rythmes great! It's very thought provoking, I thought. I like the last line, really funny--in a way. The picture and the poem work great together. I really felt like I was involved with the poem.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

I hope so it is a light hearted gesture to some a serious reprove to others...I hope...!

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello Bipen,
I see you choose a eye opening metaphor ( how some people have a disease describing their insulting thoughts about some writers here on Fanstory .

I know I may be way off.
I know one thing I don't let it worry me of what they say.

Gert

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

No worries...

reply by Gert sherwood on 07-Sep-2012

Sounds like you may eel the same way?

reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

I dont mind criticism but it must be constructive and correct...afterall this is a learning website not just a social website.

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Very creative and unusual. Even though I didn't fully understand it. It draws me back to another read. I can't say it's wrong. Syphilis like writing just grows in you and you just can't stop it. Sometimes it's destructive like syphilis, but well that's the best I can. In it's creative approach I give a fiver. Les

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

Many thanks...

Comment from Tina McKala

Excellent

Rather do not comment if you have nothing constructive to say? I am not sure if I got the message right, but I just wanted to let you know that I really liked it and I wanted to give it those 5 stars as a support for nice things with a message :) Tina

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

Excellent.

Comment from Peter@Poole

Good

Please don't pay so handsomely for poetic acclaim. Reviewers pay scant attention to your lines and just take the money. What you need is tutoring and advice on poetics. P@P

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

That maybe true can I just ask why the four anything technically amiss that I should address...

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

An infected mind has no control. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

Thanks Charlie, much appreciate.

reply by c_lucas on 07-Sep-2012

You're welcome, George. Charlie

Comment from lappmellott

Excellent

YOur piece is well written, even though I wouldn't choose to write a poem about this subject. Apparently it is a subject that is on your mind.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

Better on the mind than anywhere else...

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Bic,

I think we have all had some unfair and uncalled for reviews. If their criticism is instructive I can live with that but there are those who review an have no idea what they are talking about. A clever and compelling poem and you hit the nail on the head with this one. Well done, chey

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012

Thanks chey much appreciated.