Savannah Love
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Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, barbara. I like how you're slowly revealing your plot and the character's revolving around Paige's life. I'm glad she has some friends emerging that also have an interest in the supernatural. That should be very helpful down the road LOL. Very well written chapter, b.
Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Hi, barbara. I like how you're slowly revealing your plot and the character's revolving around Paige's life. I'm glad she has some friends emerging that also have an interest in the supernatural. That should be very helpful down the road LOL. Very well written chapter, b.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome, barbara.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I enjoyed this read, Barbara. You do a great job with the dialogue. Love that you sprinkle it with humour, as here:
Cash frowned and looked at Paige. "It's hard to get good help, especially when you have to stop and attend the old help's funeral." LOL!
She walked over and picked up the book she had looked at. "It seems when Major General William Tecumseh Sherman." - This didn't quite make sense to me, and I'm not sure why. Maybe I'm missing something. Perhaps you could take a look? Was she supposed to be interrupted by Cash, maybe?
Otherwise, good story, great intrigue. Looking forward to the next.
Hugs, Av
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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I enjoyed this read, Barbara. You do a great job with the dialogue. Love that you sprinkle it with humour, as here:
Cash frowned and looked at Paige. "It's hard to get good help, especially when you have to stop and attend the old help's funeral." LOL!
She walked over and picked up the book she had looked at. "It seems when Major General William Tecumseh Sherman." - This didn't quite make sense to me, and I'm not sure why. Maybe I'm missing something. Perhaps you could take a look? Was she supposed to be interrupted by Cash, maybe?
Otherwise, good story, great intrigue. Looking forward to the next.
Hugs, Av
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I will take another look.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh how I love this story! It's pace is easy and comfortable, like a pair of silk pajamas, yet there is still plenty of action to keep your reader interested. The southern hospitality is shining through in this chapter as well, even more so than the last. Just a couple of things I found - 1)"...held the chair as she stood." The only thing I might suggest here is that it would be more personal if you said his wife or called her by name instead of 'she',as she is not referred to directly in this paragraph and he was speaking to Cash prior and during the action. 2) You've left this sentence dangling- what about this major General? (or did I miss something?)
Your characters are once again leaping from the page, they are so authentic, and the dialogue is natural and charming. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Oh how I love this story! It's pace is easy and comfortable, like a pair of silk pajamas, yet there is still plenty of action to keep your reader interested. The southern hospitality is shining through in this chapter as well, even more so than the last. Just a couple of things I found - 1)"...held the chair as she stood." The only thing I might suggest here is that it would be more personal if you said his wife or called her by name instead of 'she',as she is not referred to directly in this paragraph and he was speaking to Cash prior and during the action. 2) You've left this sentence dangling- what about this major General? (or did I miss something?)
Your characters are once again leaping from the page, they are so authentic, and the dialogue is natural and charming. Well done!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Sherman's march to the sea is famous in American history. He burnt Atlanta to the ground then went on to Savannah, before hitting SC. I guess I should have explained that in the author's notes. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sefiros
You jump around a lot with perspective. I know the need to get through the plot but simply jumping from place to place can make you sloppy. Try filling in the time between segments with more dialogue or inner reflection. That's just me though. Nice start to the chapter.
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You jump around a lot with perspective. I know the need to get through the plot but simply jumping from place to place can make you sloppy. Try filling in the time between segments with more dialogue or inner reflection. That's just me though. Nice start to the chapter.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Thank you
Comment from Chris Tee
Wow now the story is in full swing here Barbara. I am getting settled in with a promising story and enjoyed this part chapter as well. Excellent work here by a talented writer.
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Wow now the story is in full swing here Barbara. I am getting settled in with a promising story and enjoyed this part chapter as well. Excellent work here by a talented writer.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
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Thank you for th ekind review.
Comment from unimatrix001
Lovely continuation of the southern tale. Good descriptions and excellent chronology of the house. I like the tie into civil war.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Lovely continuation of the southern tale. Good descriptions and excellent chronology of the house. I like the tie into civil war.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
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Thank you for th ekind review.
Comment from smudge
Mr. Cash goes to find silver plated door knobs for the house. Billy Joes wife calls to get keys from Billy Joe. Paige makes a new friend.
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Mr. Cash goes to find silver plated door knobs for the house. Billy Joes wife calls to get keys from Billy Joe. Paige makes a new friend.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
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Thank you for th ekind review.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
Another excellent chapter as Paige continues to get acquainted and settle into her new home. I like the way you tie your prologue into the story with the old family photographs.
Some of my family still owns an antebellum home constructed in 1840. I have never visited it because, although my great great grandfather built the house in 1740, the relatives who own it now are distant cousins. I have photos of the old house, but I don't know exactly where it is located. Perhaps I can look it up someday. As you might guess our family was divided by the Mason-Dixon Line.
Keep up the great writing.
Love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Hi Barbara:)
Another excellent chapter as Paige continues to get acquainted and settle into her new home. I like the way you tie your prologue into the story with the old family photographs.
Some of my family still owns an antebellum home constructed in 1840. I have never visited it because, although my great great grandfather built the house in 1740, the relatives who own it now are distant cousins. I have photos of the old house, but I don't know exactly where it is located. Perhaps I can look it up someday. As you might guess our family was divided by the Mason-Dixon Line.
Keep up the great writing.
Love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Thank you for th ekind review.
Comment from c_lucas
When I was in my childhood, teacher, especially Southern born teachers would mid direct Civil War History. As a young adult reading about the era, brought new understanding. This is very well written. Paige is about to receive her first lesson.
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When I was in my childhood, teacher, especially Southern born teachers would mid direct Civil War History. As a young adult reading about the era, brought new understanding. This is very well written. Paige is about to receive her first lesson.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
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Thank you for th ekind review.
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You're welcome
Comment from chasdflynn
I enjoyed the story. It kept my interest, although at times it did seem a bit dragged out. I followed through to the finish. You have a great novel here and it is enjoyable reading.
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I enjoyed the story. It kept my interest, although at times it did seem a bit dragged out. I followed through to the finish. You have a great novel here and it is enjoyable reading.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
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Thank you for th ekind review.
