In My Dream
A dream I had involving The Doors lead singer80 total reviews
Comment from Mishelly
I really enjoyed reading this. It could have easily worked just as well as a story or a poem. It's so unique, and has a real fantasy-like quality to it. I'm glad you put in the author's notes because it makes things a lot clearer for people who - like myself - don't know much about Jim Morrison.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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I really enjoyed reading this. It could have easily worked just as well as a story or a poem. It's so unique, and has a real fantasy-like quality to it. I'm glad you put in the author's notes because it makes things a lot clearer for people who - like myself - don't know much about Jim Morrison.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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Thank you Shelly.
Comment from Glasstruth
A fantastic tribute to Jim Morrison. You used a lot of imagery like: "Lizard King, Snakes, Komodo Dragons, and Monsoons of blood" I think if Morrison were alive he'd get a kick out this. Well done! Les
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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A fantastic tribute to Jim Morrison. You used a lot of imagery like: "Lizard King, Snakes, Komodo Dragons, and Monsoons of blood" I think if Morrison were alive he'd get a kick out this. Well done! Les
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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Thank you Les.
Comment from Doc Holiday
Almost like a Garden of Eden scene, where the Morrison (devil) says if you eat this you will be all knowing, or if your wear this you will sing like the Lizard King. Jim Morrison was a little out there, as I remember from his real life and not his legendary stories that are going around now. Well-written and Errrie!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Almost like a Garden of Eden scene, where the Morrison (devil) says if you eat this you will be all knowing, or if your wear this you will sing like the Lizard King. Jim Morrison was a little out there, as I remember from his real life and not his legendary stories that are going around now. Well-written and Errrie!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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I didn't even think about that allusion to the book of Genesis until you mentioned it Doc. I can see it now thank you for your review and the Biblical interpertation of my work.
Comment from Bobbi22
This is a very interesting story in a poem. I did not know that was Jim Morrison's nickname. It does fit well here in your well written poem.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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This is a very interesting story in a poem. I did not know that was Jim Morrison's nickname. It does fit well here in your well written poem.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you pics.
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written story in a poem. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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This is a very well written story in a poem. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you lucas.
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You're welcome, Justin. Charlie
Comment from ennahanid
A very vibrant presentation that pulls the reader into your page begging to be read. Creepy stuff and I guess it would be wise not to accept gifts from people you don't really know. I don't like snakes but you sure got me to read about them...good and unique and imaginative write...thank you for this gem - Dinah
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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A very vibrant presentation that pulls the reader into your page begging to be read. Creepy stuff and I guess it would be wise not to accept gifts from people you don't really know. I don't like snakes but you sure got me to read about them...good and unique and imaginative write...thank you for this gem - Dinah
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you Dinah.
Comment from fictionwriter
You very seldom get something for nothing, so if offered the ring of power(ha,ha, Lord of the Rings Humor) you ought to question it. Great job.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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You very seldom get something for nothing, so if offered the ring of power(ha,ha, Lord of the Rings Humor) you ought to question it. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you writer.
Comment from MumEsGirl
I really enjoyed reading this most unusual poem. Your images are vivid, to say the least. I am not a fan of creeping things, so it made me squirm.
Perhaps you should have sung The Sound Of silence. Great write
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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I really enjoyed reading this most unusual poem. Your images are vivid, to say the least. I am not a fan of creeping things, so it made me squirm.
Perhaps you should have sung The Sound Of silence. Great write
hugs
kate
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you Kate.
Comment from babyross
This is a good write. I like the visuals... I began to panic.
The room was filled with reptiles.
Snakes, Komodo Dragons, had taken their seats,
To watch me sing.
Going up to the microphone,
I felt something burning me.
Nice visuals here. Was this really your dream?
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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This is a good write. I like the visuals... I began to panic.
The room was filled with reptiles.
Snakes, Komodo Dragons, had taken their seats,
To watch me sing.
Going up to the microphone,
I felt something burning me.
Nice visuals here. Was this really your dream?
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you Ross. No I just made the poem up to read like a nightmare.
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Mission accomplished! lol
Comment from clumsyninja
I think you have an interesting idea here but I'm not convinced it gells together all that well. I think you still need to polish this piece up. Lines like Feasting on me until I was dead is a little redundant and 'and he gave me a dark red ring' the second one should be something like... Either a darkened ring... Darkened ruby ring. I just think that A dark red ring kills the tempo and flow here unless a dark red ring is a line from one of his songs?
Anyway nice work.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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I think you have an interesting idea here but I'm not convinced it gells together all that well. I think you still need to polish this piece up. Lines like Feasting on me until I was dead is a little redundant and 'and he gave me a dark red ring' the second one should be something like... Either a darkened ring... Darkened ruby ring. I just think that A dark red ring kills the tempo and flow here unless a dark red ring is a line from one of his songs?
Anyway nice work.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your advice ninja.
