Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "This fellow's on the Square"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Amicus
I like this one, deepwater. The matter of fact tone that the speaker utilizes in giving voice to how he wishes to be remembered reminds me of my father and the hard working honest men of his generation for whom being known as "on the square" was an honored and satisfying thing. Good poem.
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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I like this one, deepwater. The matter of fact tone that the speaker utilizes in giving voice to how he wishes to be remembered reminds me of my father and the hard working honest men of his generation for whom being known as "on the square" was an honored and satisfying thing. Good poem.
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you Amicus
Comment from skye
To always be thought of as living life upon the square is a great ambition indeed.
Honor, truth, integrity, selflessness, all of these things are indicated by living on the square.
I love this. I don't know much about the free masons, but the square is an essential instrument in building, thus essential to building a good life.
Well done.
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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To always be thought of as living life upon the square is a great ambition indeed.
Honor, truth, integrity, selflessness, all of these things are indicated by living on the square.
I love this. I don't know much about the free masons, but the square is an essential instrument in building, thus essential to building a good life.
Well done.
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you Skye
Comment from fictionwriter
Well that would be simple, but would those passing by understand the meaning behind it. I sometimes wonder what it left of our lives then. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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Well that would be simple, but would those passing by understand the meaning behind it. I sometimes wonder what it left of our lives then. Great job.
Comment Written 23-May-2010
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thank you fictionwriter
Comment from nancyjam
Nice poem and a very sensible
thought - to be remembered for
being fair in all dealings.
Did you mean grave or "carve" upon my monument?
whatever, it's a great poem.
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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Nice poem and a very sensible
thought - to be remembered for
being fair in all dealings.
Did you mean grave or "carve" upon my monument?
whatever, it's a great poem.
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you nancy
Comment from Shirley McLain
I like your poem very much. It flowed well and was easy to read. Your told your story with few words and it was understoon. I did not find any spag. Good job.
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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I like your poem very much. It flowed well and was easy to read. Your told your story with few words and it was understoon. I did not find any spag. Good job.
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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thank you for reading Tex
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
I have become a great fan of your poetry now. They all are well versed and sweet in meaning.
Just this one phrase of all I choose
To show my life was fair
Here sleeps now a fellow who was always on the Square[ Loved these lines]
K
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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I have become a great fan of your poetry now. They all are well versed and sweet in meaning.
Just this one phrase of all I choose
To show my life was fair
Here sleeps now a fellow who was always on the Square[ Loved these lines]
K
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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thank you K
Comment from percival86jack
This is amazing my friend. It expresses my sentiments down to a "t"! When I'm gone, don't weep for me, my life has been a marvelous journey... cheers, Jack
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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This is amazing my friend. It expresses my sentiments down to a "t"! When I'm gone, don't weep for me, my life has been a marvelous journey... cheers, Jack
Comment Written 23-May-2010
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thank you Jack
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a nice picture, i think this is written about a man who wants to be remembered for his faithfulness and earnest behavior rather than any achievement
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a nice picture, i think this is written about a man who wants to be remembered for his faithfulness and earnest behavior rather than any achievement
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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thank you sweet
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I fully agree with you,
Gary - who wants to be
buried under a great stone..
I want to be cremated and
my ashes scattered on a
hill under a great oak.
Well thoughtout, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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I fully agree with you,
Gary - who wants to be
buried under a great stone..
I want to be cremated and
my ashes scattered on a
hill under a great oak.
Well thoughtout, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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thank you Margaret mine in the sea
Comment from fairydancer
Hi Gary,
Perhaps slightly controversial to some?
But a friend of mine once told me a few things about masons - seems to me now that a lot of it involves self-improvement? True there are some antiquated rituals but that's just part of the tradition. A strange combination of both change and tradition really?
If that is true though, that means that in the latter half of this poem you are asking to be remembered as someone who always tryed to improve himself and be fair - not a bad thing to want, now is it?
- Cally :)
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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Hi Gary,
Perhaps slightly controversial to some?
But a friend of mine once told me a few things about masons - seems to me now that a lot of it involves self-improvement? True there are some antiquated rituals but that's just part of the tradition. A strange combination of both change and tradition really?
If that is true though, that means that in the latter half of this poem you are asking to be remembered as someone who always tryed to improve himself and be fair - not a bad thing to want, now is it?
- Cally :)
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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thank Caiil and improve yes or try to Gary
