Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Life was a scary.

You want to have to see him.

I want be long.

see a death person

empty handed to see find out

Beth...

A lovely, emotional story with just a few typos I think.
Enjoyed reading. I think many children and some adults have a very difficult time dealing with death. My 18 year old son had been fortunate to never have anyone die that was close to him and when his lifelong 4 legged friend died...he was inconsolable, his sobbing almost killed me too.

Thanks for sharing.

CArol

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thanks for reading. Yes, even adults have problems dealing with death. I appreciate you pointing out the spags. I had fixed all but two of them but now I've taken care of those.
Beth

Comment from joq1958

Excellent

Well written. Flows from beginning to end. A child's memories of death can linger on until their own.
The shock of a naieve child on finding out their own mortality the stuff of nightmares.

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 Comment Written 12-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thank you for reading and for your nice comments.
Beth

Comment from Thesis

Excellent

Wow, Beth. You were certainly traumatized as a child. Your fears really took hold of your thoughts about death.

I was never too kean on it either. I always thought the person was faking and would sit up and scare the hell out of me.

You need to edit the piece in three spots: one "Life was a scary," delete the "a", and "It too hot" should be "It's", and "I want be long," should be "I won't be long." - Thesis

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 Comment Written 12-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thanks for reading and comment and also for finding the spags I needed to fix. I have taken care of them.
Beth