The Sonnet Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Ashes of Lost Hope"a poetic collage of my sonnets
109 total reviews
Comment from Summer Falls
You met the requirements of the contest with the ease of an accomplished poet.
The rhyme scheme flowed well and the story it told was a sad one.
I especially liked the line:
Love's ashes buried 'neath the graveyard stone.
Strong imagery there.
Best wishes in the contest!
summergirl
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You met the requirements of the contest with the ease of an accomplished poet.
The rhyme scheme flowed well and the story it told was a sad one.
I especially liked the line:
Love's ashes buried 'neath the graveyard stone.
Strong imagery there.
Best wishes in the contest!
summergirl
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
Comment from Freeflyer
A lovely old fashioned sad but romantic sonnet. I wish there were more like it. I totally enjoyed the read. Good luck in the competition.
Freeflyer
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A lovely old fashioned sad but romantic sonnet. I wish there were more like it. I totally enjoyed the read. Good luck in the competition.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
Great poem. Really loved the verse with knight and lyer. Being a fantasy author, that spoke to me.
no spag, no room for improvement...perfect!
Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Great poem. Really loved the verse with knight and lyer. Being a fantasy author, that spoke to me.
no spag, no room for improvement...perfect!
Good job.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Thank you, Brian, for such a great review. Glad you enjoyed this poem. Please, take care.
Comment from ulster3
Hello yeltel.
This is a brilliant entry. Someone wooed falsley by a poet.
The rhyme scheme looks hard to remember but looks like you have done a great job. Great luck to you with your Spenserian Sonnet. I was unable to see your picture, but it could be my computer. fondly, rebecca
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Hello yeltel.
This is a brilliant entry. Someone wooed falsley by a poet.
The rhyme scheme looks hard to remember but looks like you have done a great job. Great luck to you with your Spenserian Sonnet. I was unable to see your picture, but it could be my computer. fondly, rebecca
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Yelena..This is a lovely sonnet...it has good flow and rhyme. In a few places your iambics are not true but that can be overlooked as the flow is even as it slides down the page. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Hi Yelena..This is a lovely sonnet...it has good flow and rhyme. In a few places your iambics are not true but that can be overlooked as the flow is even as it slides down the page. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Thank you, dear Chey. I tried to make it more "real" and less "marble statue like" by deviating from classic pentameter. But it seems to work in the overall. Often, the "too classic" a form makes the work a bit too scholastic, and I wanted to sprinkle real life emotion into this one. That was intentional, and I am very well aware of the spots where the pentameter's took the fall for the above (smiles). Appreciate your time in reviewing this, always happy to see at my page, fondly, Yelena
Comment from raimie
What a wonderful job you did with this entry. It is full with all the sophistication and imagery that makes these sonnets so ejoyable to read. They are truly a dying art form and you have revived them well. Thanks so much for sharing this.
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What a wonderful job you did with this entry. It is full with all the sophistication and imagery that makes these sonnets so ejoyable to read. They are truly a dying art form and you have revived them well. Thanks so much for sharing this.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
Comment from mildredmolanki
Very interesting style. I enjoyed your poem, which I think is a little less sickly sweet than the traditional sonnet style, yet retains the drama. Kind regards, MM
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Very interesting style. I enjoyed your poem, which I think is a little less sickly sweet than the traditional sonnet style, yet retains the drama. Kind regards, MM
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
Comment from jamar2
An excellent Sonnet my dear, so beautiflly set out and the picture sets of the piece so well, no errors spotted, very well done indeed.
best wishs with the comp..
jamar.
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An excellent Sonnet my dear, so beautiflly set out and the picture sets of the piece so well, no errors spotted, very well done indeed.
best wishs with the comp..
jamar.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
Comment from Suzie B
Hello: once again you have captured the bitter-sweet taste
of a love that came to nothing,Your presentation was marvelous .
I have not encountered a 'Spenserian Sonnet' before,however as written in your Author notes,this work follows the three quatrains and a couplet rule and has the linking rhymes required.
Well Done.
Warm regards
Suzie B
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Hello: once again you have captured the bitter-sweet taste
of a love that came to nothing,Your presentation was marvelous .
I have not encountered a 'Spenserian Sonnet' before,however as written in your Author notes,this work follows the three quatrains and a couplet rule and has the linking rhymes required.
Well Done.
Warm regards
Suzie B
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
Comment from giftid3
There is much passion in this bound together with a questioning regret of a love unfelt, expressionless and unreturned. The imagery that flowed through this showed one whose heart had been torn from within, stomped and tossed away. The pleas made to the one whose disregard and disdain for the love shared, go on deaf ears, for their shallowness and cowardice breaks the news through words on paper than face to face.
This is well worded, well expressed and has a good flow from beginnning to end. Thanks for sharing and many blessings to you
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There is much passion in this bound together with a questioning regret of a love unfelt, expressionless and unreturned. The imagery that flowed through this showed one whose heart had been torn from within, stomped and tossed away. The pleas made to the one whose disregard and disdain for the love shared, go on deaf ears, for their shallowness and cowardice breaks the news through words on paper than face to face.
This is well worded, well expressed and has a good flow from beginnning to end. Thanks for sharing and many blessings to you
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
