Don't Wait Until Too Late
A couple meet the end, with two different results40 total reviews
Comment from wierdgrace
keep up with your believe, and I hope it will happen, I had tears when I read it, The characters had heart and so do you, so go for it and trust that it will. thank you for sharing.
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keep up with your believe, and I hope it will happen, I had tears when I read it, The characters had heart and so do you, so go for it and trust that it will. thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
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Thank you, wierdgrace, I appreciate the encouraging words and the great review.
Comment from Marjorie D.
While your interpretation of the Bible is different than mine, I think the story is different and imaginative. It's certainly written very well. At first, I thought this was going to be about a UFO encounter. The reason, I think, is because of the car engine failing. A really nice job. The best of luck to you in the contest, Red!
Marjorie
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While your interpretation of the Bible is different than mine, I think the story is different and imaginative. It's certainly written very well. At first, I thought this was going to be about a UFO encounter. The reason, I think, is because of the car engine failing. A really nice job. The best of luck to you in the contest, Red!
Marjorie
Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
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thank you, Marjorie, I appreciate the warm review
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is quite lovely, something
really different which drew my
attention and held it throughout.
A pleasure to review.
My husband is a non-believer, but
he respects my belief, and hopefully,
one day he too will know.
Everyone was gaping (up)at the sky,
This is a great entry for the contest - Good luck.
Regards,
Margaet.
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This is quite lovely, something
really different which drew my
attention and held it throughout.
A pleasure to review.
My husband is a non-believer, but
he respects my belief, and hopefully,
one day he too will know.
Everyone was gaping (up)at the sky,
This is a great entry for the contest - Good luck.
Regards,
Margaet.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2008
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Thank you, Margaret, for the great review and for the nit. I hope your husband will come to faith one day.
Comment from Wilder
First- please understand that I loved this piece. Second- if you are married to the man- he will be at your side if you believe this will happen. Personally- I do not believe- I am an unbeliever in that way- though a very spiritual person so I'm certainly not worried. I really hope you read your bible- the part that says and here I can't remember what the verse is or even where it is- but it does say that if you are married to someone then they are saved because of you.
But please don't think that unbelievers are bad or evil or will not get to have a good death. That is one of the main reasons why I am not a part of any organized religion. It leaves people feeling the way you do.
I hate that- it isn't right-
Wilder
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First- please understand that I loved this piece. Second- if you are married to the man- he will be at your side if you believe this will happen. Personally- I do not believe- I am an unbeliever in that way- though a very spiritual person so I'm certainly not worried. I really hope you read your bible- the part that says and here I can't remember what the verse is or even where it is- but it does say that if you are married to someone then they are saved because of you.
But please don't think that unbelievers are bad or evil or will not get to have a good death. That is one of the main reasons why I am not a part of any organized religion. It leaves people feeling the way you do.
I hate that- it isn't right-
Wilder
Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2008
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Thank you, Wilder. I know the verse you're talking about, and it is the sole source of any comfort I have. I still hope and pray that he will see the light before it's too late. Thank you for the kind words and the generous rating.
Comment from carolm5415
This is very well written and a very visual story. I'm afraid I don't accept the Bible as literally as you do, but I try to live a good life.
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This is very well written and a very visual story. I'm afraid I don't accept the Bible as literally as you do, but I try to live a good life.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
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thank you, carol, I appreciate your honesty
Comment from Jasmine J
Very interesting but rather disturbing. I believe that no one deserves an eternity of Hell just for not believing, but that's strictly my opinion. I also felt sad for Hank. Poor guy...
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Very interesting but rather disturbing. I believe that no one deserves an eternity of Hell just for not believing, but that's strictly my opinion. I also felt sad for Hank. Poor guy...
Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
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Thank you, Jas.
Comment from Zaphod
Hey Freckles,
Great story. I have often thought about what would happen if the Bible turned out to be correct. I loved the begining, you had me thinking "Close Encounters of the Third Kind." I just had a couple of suggestions from my read. Do what you will with them.
and then she held (at) him like she never wanted to let go. {Held at him just reads rough and doesn't really make sense.}
The end of days she had told him would come one day, when believers {I stumbled the "comne one day." Don't know why but it seems to me if it would read smoother "The end of day she had said would one day come." I don't know why. I don't even think that's correct, but my mind wanted to read it like that.}
Seemed Hank was about to find out if he was good enough.
{Seemed to me that this was a quick jab sentence. Felt to quick and impersonal starting with seemed. Maybe It appeared, or it seemed.}
Really excellent story. Should do well in the contest.
All the best.
Z
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Hey Freckles,
Great story. I have often thought about what would happen if the Bible turned out to be correct. I loved the begining, you had me thinking "Close Encounters of the Third Kind." I just had a couple of suggestions from my read. Do what you will with them.
and then she held (at) him like she never wanted to let go. {Held at him just reads rough and doesn't really make sense.}
The end of days she had told him would come one day, when believers {I stumbled the "comne one day." Don't know why but it seems to me if it would read smoother "The end of day she had said would one day come." I don't know why. I don't even think that's correct, but my mind wanted to read it like that.}
Seemed Hank was about to find out if he was good enough.
{Seemed to me that this was a quick jab sentence. Felt to quick and impersonal starting with seemed. Maybe It appeared, or it seemed.}
Really excellent story. Should do well in the contest.
All the best.
Z
Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2008
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Thank you, Z-man. I appreciate your thorough, thoughtful review. I will take a look at those spots.
Comment from MumEsGirl
What a bequtiful story. Your faith shines through in your writing. The stroy reads well with a tinge of humour, adding to the very human element.
It is hard to watch those who dont believe, but the good Lord knows best and in him we hve to place your trust.
Best of luck n the competition
kate
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What a bequtiful story. Your faith shines through in your writing. The stroy reads well with a tinge of humour, adding to the very human element.
It is hard to watch those who dont believe, but the good Lord knows best and in him we hve to place your trust.
Best of luck n the competition
kate
Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
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Thank you, Kate, I appreciate the great review.
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
Well written, easy to read and realistic; excellent contest entry; good imagery and twist too; absolutely great! strong contest entry too. A powerful message!
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Well written, easy to read and realistic; excellent contest entry; good imagery and twist too; absolutely great! strong contest entry too. A powerful message!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
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Thank you, astrolite.
Comment from kiwirose
Your story is real amazement as description is brilliant as well. Yes true some wives always pray for their husband who is unchristian but some of them are real good heart to their wives. I have a friend like your story.
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Your story is real amazement as description is brilliant as well. Yes true some wives always pray for their husband who is unchristian but some of them are real good heart to their wives. I have a friend like your story.
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2008
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Thank you for your kind words.
