Beautiful Downward Spiral
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Comment from Sarah Sandison
What a beautiful, poignant poem with such feeling. I am so sad your dad is unwell and deteriorating, your words show exactly how you are feeling. I liked the different colours of each section and I felt the sadness with you. What a privilege it was to be allowed into your world. I hope writing brings you comfort and peace. Your dad will be in my prayers tonight :)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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What a beautiful, poignant poem with such feeling. I am so sad your dad is unwell and deteriorating, your words show exactly how you are feeling. I liked the different colours of each section and I felt the sadness with you. What a privilege it was to be allowed into your world. I hope writing brings you comfort and peace. Your dad will be in my prayers tonight :)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading, Sarah. I appreciate your feedback and am thrilled my emotional experience came across so well. It was cathartic for me, too. Thank you again for reading. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from jaded831
I found your creative, imaginative, an a wonderful read. Here in the notheast snowfalls are common, but each one unique. Glad you're back, but sorry about your dad. It is so hard watching a hero fall. God be with you.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I found your creative, imaginative, an a wonderful read. Here in the notheast snowfalls are common, but each one unique. Glad you're back, but sorry about your dad. It is so hard watching a hero fall. God be with you.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, jaded831. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Even though this is my second year in Arkansas, last winter was mild compared to this year's. Regardless, I still see and appreciate its beauty. Thank you again for commenting. God be with you, too. Take care. :D :D
Comment from Navada
I can completely relate to this. I lost my Dad in 2015, and going through that, as well as clearing out and selling the family home, was incredibly traumatic. I hope you have lots of good support around you. xx
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I can completely relate to this. I lost my Dad in 2015, and going through that, as well as clearing out and selling the family home, was incredibly traumatic. I hope you have lots of good support around you. xx
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, I live with my best friend of almost 30 years, and her family has adopted me. Their support means the world to me, and my brothers, though they live in different states, stay in contact, too. I can relate to your experience. That was me when Mom passed away in 2012. Never a fun experience--but one I plan to use in a future story--once I psych myself up to write it. Thank you again for reading. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from jenintorre
This is such a beautiful and poignant poem. I feel your pain. The first two stanzas portray such lovely imagery of winter then BANG. Wonderful presentation. Excellent writing. Love Jen.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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This is such a beautiful and poignant poem. I feel your pain. The first two stanzas portray such lovely imagery of winter then BANG. Wonderful presentation. Excellent writing. Love Jen.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jen. I appreciate your feedback. It means the world to me. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from Wendy G
A very poignant post and your notes of explanation add meaning and depth to your words. It's like snippets of your life with glimpses of your emotions and pain, well expressed,a nd thoughtful. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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A very poignant post and your notes of explanation add meaning and depth to your words. It's like snippets of your life with glimpses of your emotions and pain, well expressed,a nd thoughtful. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Wendy. I appreciate your feedback, and I'm thrilled I could convey the emotional depth of yesterday's experience as "snippets of life." I was aiming for this structure, so I'm pleased I succeeded. Thank you again for reading. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from Lisasview
Wonderful when words just spill out of you....
Just be there as much as you can fr your dad.
That is what is important.
It is s difficult losing ones parents. Although for me it has been sometime since they have passed they are in my thoughts often.
Lisasview
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Wonderful when words just spill out of you....
Just be there as much as you can fr your dad.
That is what is important.
It is s difficult losing ones parents. Although for me it has been sometime since they have passed they are in my thoughts often.
Lisasview
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lisaview. I appreciate your feedback. Yes, it is difficult, and even though it's been some time for you, I'm still sorry for your loss. Mom died in 2012, and I'm hoping Dad won't go yet, but I'm also not in control of this outcome. Like you said, I can only be there for him and enjoy however much time we still have together. Thank you again for reading and reviewing. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
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If your father has any moments of clarity might i suggest asking him questions and recording him. I wish I ad done that.
Lisa
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This is wonderfully flowing poetry and does justice to your love. Absolutely, as touching, as too, emotionally raw. Great job. I know how it is seeing a love one decline. Take care.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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This is wonderfully flowing poetry and does justice to your love. Absolutely, as touching, as too, emotionally raw. Great job. I know how it is seeing a love one decline. Take care.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Kingsrookviii. I appreciate your feedback and kind words. I'm pleased it came across so well. Thank you again. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from Barry Penfold
Thanks for the notes. A lovely put together which describes both the beauty of the first snow and the declining health of your father. Interesting format. Well done. Stay brave.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thanks for the notes. A lovely put together which describes both the beauty of the first snow and the declining health of your father. Interesting format. Well done. Stay brave.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Barry. I appreciate your feedback. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I enjoy reading this sad yet beautiful poem about the sudden appearance of a few unfortunate events like your dad's declining health. Yet you are able to write such a elegant poem to express it.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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I enjoy reading this sad yet beautiful poem about the sudden appearance of a few unfortunate events like your dad's declining health. Yet you are able to write such a elegant poem to express it.
Excellent.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jasmine Girl. I appreciate your feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from Julie Helms
The series of haikus is very effective at capturing emotions you're going through. It is almost like watching a slideshow, each one being a different slide. I think this progression mirrors life in general. From the innocence of childhood, through to maturity, through end of life disappointments. Very poignant. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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The series of haikus is very effective at capturing emotions you're going through. It is almost like watching a slideshow, each one being a different slide. I think this progression mirrors life in general. From the innocence of childhood, through to maturity, through end of life disappointments. Very poignant. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Julie. I appreciate your feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed it and found the format effective in conveying my emotional journey. It helped me process a lot. Thank you again. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
