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NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest

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Comment from Chrissy710
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Hi Jessica what a sweet poem for your dear Camryn who will meet all her challenges with gusto and love from you
How old is she?
Is this your picture too ?
Lovely presentation and words
Good luck in the contest
Cheers Chris

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Chris. Though I wish I could take credit for the stunning picture, It is not mine. I was in awe of it though, when selecting one for this poem- as it perfectly captures Camryn's energy. She is 6 years old and sassy through it all! Haha. Thank you so much!
    Jessica
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Excellent poem entry for the No Rules Poetry Contest in Camryn Kelly's honor.

The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.

the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Gypsy!
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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That's so pretty it's amazingly gorgeous. I love the picture you chose and the script style as well as your word choice amazingly well done! Kudos to your daughter as well for her accomplishments in spite of her illness.
impressive and with a wonderful mom too she can only win! I see no issues grammatically with your palm And it is aesthetically pleasing I find it a wonderful submission and I wish you best to luck Have a great day

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Lea!!
    Xo
    Jessica
Comment from Paul McFarland
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Very nice poem, Jessica. Your child is going to do well, because you are setting the right example for her.

As your child looks into your eyes,
Your love and confidence she spies.
No matter what the task she tries,
She'll always catch those butterflies.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Paul I'm so moved by your words. Truly, that means the world thank you so much.
    Jessica
Comment from Jane Jane King
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What a lovely tribute to your daughter! I especially love the last two lines. You have put her strength and determination into lovely, delicate poetic form. Enjoyed very much.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Jane, thank you so much-that means the world.
    Jessica
Comment from royowen
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I'm so sorry Jessica, we were never aware of these types of afflictions years ago, as well as the disturbing decline in people's behavioural activities, there seems to be other things too, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Thank you, Roy. I appreciate that so much.
reply by royowen on 22-Apr-2023
    Most welckme
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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Wow, I am rooting for Camryn with her disabilities not standing in her way!
This children's poem speaks loud and clear about the determination and resilience Camryn can muster with her mother by her side!
I hope she goes through the roof as far as getting to where she wants to go!
Jesse

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Jesse, I truly appreciate that. Your words of support and encouragement absolutely mean the world to me-Camryn, too!
    Xo
    Jessica
reply by Jesse James Doty on 22-Apr-2023
    I wish the best for both of you!
    Enjoy your weekend!
    Jesse
Comment from Cherish Adams
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This is a beautiful poem of optimism and using fear as a fuel. We should all use fear as fuel so that we are limitless. Great rhyming poem for the contest. Cherish

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, cherish! I have since added an authors note to provide a bit more clarity behind the poems meaning.
    Xo
    Jessica
reply by Cherish Adams on 21-Apr-2023
    Limitless is defined differently for all of us. Your daughter will be limitless in areas that we find ourselves limited. Prayers and love to you both. Cherish
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
    Your words moved me to tears, thank you for them
reply by Cherish Adams on 21-Apr-2023
    You're welcome Jessica.
Comment from shelley kaye
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such a cute little poem!
love the dreams and butterflies line
smooth simple rhyme and flow
and a cool pic to accompany

one suggestion i have is maybe try a blue or green background and pink font to blend in with the cool pic? just a thought ;)


thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)



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 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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What a very gentle and sweet verse! A lovely depiction of the innocence of childhood captured in simple but evocative imagery and image. I don't know if I'm seeing too much but wondered if it wasn't also a celebration of summer and its limitless joys? Thanks for sharing, Debbie

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 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
    Debbie, thank you so much for your comment. I have since added author notes to explain what's behind the poem. I apologize for doing it late and appreciate your noticing there was an underlying message!
    Jessica
reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 22-Apr-2023
    I'm so sorry to read this but I have to say that, with such beautiful sentiments both you and she can soar above these challenges. Take care Debbie