Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Unprepared"Musings of an old man -2021
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Comment from Mrs. KT
Good to "see" you, JLR!
I've missed you!
I so appreciate the sentiments expressed in your eight word poem.
Edit to consider:
1. I would reverse the two lines for "punch!"
2. Nearing deaths (death's) unknown rivers.
Thanks for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Good to "see" you, JLR!
I've missed you!
I so appreciate the sentiments expressed in your eight word poem.
Edit to consider:
1. I would reverse the two lines for "punch!"
2. Nearing deaths (death's) unknown rivers.
Thanks for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Hi Diane, yes it has been along dry spell, your prompt is welcomed indeed. Thank you!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Unprepared ' , is short, succinct and deftly descriptive. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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' Unprepared ' , is short, succinct and deftly descriptive. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Hello Duchess, I appreciate your inquiry, I am doing well. I had put my pen and ink away for several months and hope to rekindle my effort?s once again.
Hello JLR, I'm delighted to know your doing well. Getting back to writing is probably just what I need !!
Bless you and have a great week.
the Duchess
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done for a really short one. This one brings to mind the poem "A Request" that I just recently posted. Take a look and I think you will see what I mean.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Nicely done for a really short one. This one brings to mind the poem "A Request" that I just recently posted. Take a look and I think you will see what I mean.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Hi Paul, thank you for your suggestion! Your well crafted spiritual poem, as reflected, is worthy of the award your received.
Comment from E. Denison
Excellent job with this entry, JLR. I like that you were able to make both biblical (in association with the chosen image) and Greek mythological references in this brief work. You have done well to create a poem that lives beyond its small frame. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Excellent job with this entry, JLR. I like that you were able to make both biblical (in association with the chosen image) and Greek mythological references in this brief work. You have done well to create a poem that lives beyond its small frame. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you, I value the artist for this perfect depiction of struggle, faith versus agnostic.
Comment from dragonpoet
JLR,
This is how some end their lives, not really knowing if they did it right
If you can get to the end without bemoaning life, no quivers will come Just faith that the rivers will be forded.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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JLR,
This is how some end their lives, not really knowing if they did it right
If you can get to the end without bemoaning life, no quivers will come Just faith that the rivers will be forded.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you Joan, our one remaining mystery.
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You'rew welcome, JLR.
Joan
Comment from Frances Jean
Good end rhyming in your little eight word poem. Written with vivid imagery depth is an unknown for us all. As we age we start to dwell on our mortality much more. Good luck in the competition Franky
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Good end rhyming in your little eight word poem. Written with vivid imagery depth is an unknown for us all. As we age we start to dwell on our mortality much more. Good luck in the competition Franky
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the good wishes.
Comment from Bill Schott
This eight-word poem, Unprepared, has the right set up and captures the angst that likely comes to those who now believe what they long did not. Time does run out.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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This eight-word poem, Unprepared, has the right set up and captures the angst that likely comes to those who now believe what they long did not. Time does run out.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you Bill.
Comment from Tina Crute
What a vivid picture for black and white, due to its meaning. You have expressed much in 8 little words, as you conjure upf the emotional turmoil of what is before Him, Good luck in the contest:)
Tina
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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What a vivid picture for black and white, due to its meaning. You have expressed much in 8 little words, as you conjure upf the emotional turmoil of what is before Him, Good luck in the contest:)
Tina
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you Tina.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-It is good to see you, Jim.
-A number of people have
been coming back.
-Hope things are good with you.
-Good artwork and presentation.
-You have used your 8 words well.
-Effective imagery and rhyme that
shows this man's feelings about
life's final journey.
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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-It is good to see you, Jim.
-A number of people have
been coming back.
-Hope things are good with you.
-Good artwork and presentation.
-You have used your 8 words well.
-Effective imagery and rhyme that
shows this man's feelings about
life's final journey.
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Hi Pam, thanks for the acknowledgement that I have been away, I do hope to reclaim time to put back into my writing. I am well and I trust the same goes for you.
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You are very welcome, and we are doing well, too.
Comment from Jill McCauslin
I like this. It's hard to say much in eight words but you manage to convey a lot. I like death's unknown rivers because it suggests all of the rivers leading to the underworld, like the River Styx. But the artwork keeps it rooted in Christianity. Very nice. I do like the art selection too.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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I like this. It's hard to say much in eight words but you manage to convey a lot. I like death's unknown rivers because it suggests all of the rivers leading to the underworld, like the River Styx. But the artwork keeps it rooted in Christianity. Very nice. I do like the art selection too.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you Jill I found the artist provided the perfect juxtaposition for the lamenting soul.
