Spencer and Freda
90 years old, still farming. Freda and Spencer32 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is raw and real, the lyrics speak of real people, real dialog and situations. I really like the characters. The only suggestion I have is to change the word color, as it's almost impossible to see. When I first looked at it, I thought the words were missing, I'm guessing you did it for effect, but someone with less then stellar eyesight like me, might miss out on this....and that would be a shame. Thanks for sharing. :)
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This is raw and real, the lyrics speak of real people, real dialog and situations. I really like the characters. The only suggestion I have is to change the word color, as it's almost impossible to see. When I first looked at it, I thought the words were missing, I'm guessing you did it for effect, but someone with less then stellar eyesight like me, might miss out on this....and that would be a shame. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
Comment from Every_Dia
Hey there!
First, it's a bit hard read! The text is grey with a black background making it a challenge to read.
I really like the parallel of the door again and down again in the first stanza! Small thing, but also making sure to capitalize for John Deere. Some punctuations stuff, mainly just the Freda comment should be in quotations. Otherwise, your punctuation and the flow of the work is superb.
I also appreciate the repetition of the OK wind line. Good piece!
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Hey there!
First, it's a bit hard read! The text is grey with a black background making it a challenge to read.
I really like the parallel of the door again and down again in the first stanza! Small thing, but also making sure to capitalize for John Deere. Some punctuations stuff, mainly just the Freda comment should be in quotations. Otherwise, your punctuation and the flow of the work is superb.
I also appreciate the repetition of the OK wind line. Good piece!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
