Obsessive Tendencies
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Chapter 7 of this fantasy fiction has a fantastic taletelling, smooth and progressive plot development, good characterization, nice beginning and formal ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Chapter 7 of this fantasy fiction has a fantastic taletelling, smooth and progressive plot development, good characterization, nice beginning and formal ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Thanx so much, ALCREATOR, for stopping in on this mid-story -- would love to have you on-board for the complete ride!! ;) Take care and have a great upcoming weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Loren .
I see I have some more catching up to do, Yvette. These characters take on the persona/attitude of the historical perception of how humans were to behave and the more contemporary "free-at-last" cry of the more liberated and less indoctrinated beings. It will be interesting to see how all of this play out. I, personally, can see/understand both stances, but also am aware that false pride and lack or individual respect plays a role in both cases. Loren
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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I see I have some more catching up to do, Yvette. These characters take on the persona/attitude of the historical perception of how humans were to behave and the more contemporary "free-at-last" cry of the more liberated and less indoctrinated beings. It will be interesting to see how all of this play out. I, personally, can see/understand both stances, but also am aware that false pride and lack or individual respect plays a role in both cases. Loren
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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LOL - I actually feel like the one catching up these days, but I'm determined to do so!! ;) :) Thanx so much for stopping by for the read on this one, Loren - and, yeah, I'm setting it up to, perhaps, touch on a bit of that cry as well as marriage for the 'right' reasons... so, we'll see how it goes! :) Hope to keep this on track and my good mood along with it - forgot how fun it is to 'get lost' in my characters!! ;) Thanx again, sir, and enjoy the upcoming weekend! ;) Yvette
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Cheering yon. I can identify as well. Personally, I find I only read stories with a good moral intwined
Comment from robyn corum
Yvette,
So -- is my tutorial ready to share , yet? I mean, I've given you all of seven minutes, at least - that's assuming you have even read it. Hmmm... my stars. It takes you a long time to do things. he
Moving on to this chapter -- nice! Though I must tell you I didn't like it one bit. This is a big wrench in the romance of our main characters -- which will provide a lot of drama and problems . Nice work!
Notes:
1.) as she spoke, all teasing gone from her voice. (")You know he has to do this after we
2.) "It's better to share the glory than to have none at all(,)" (s)he sing-songed,
3.) What was the Goddess thinking with that one?
--> I wondered about this one. It's a little late but I had noticed in one of the chapters I just read that you didn't capitalize 'Goddess' in one place. If you have this in a word doc, you can do a search to find it. Otherwise, I can help, if need be - if you care, that is. *smile*
4.) "I'm afraid, Rhoden, that it is I (who) will be asking your forgiveness."
5.) purposefully maneuvering her breasts to (do) most of the 'brushing'.
Great work, as always. I can easily 'fall in' to this story - and though I don't follow much fantasy, I am enjoying this a lot!
Thanks!
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Yvette,
So -- is my tutorial ready to share , yet? I mean, I've given you all of seven minutes, at least - that's assuming you have even read it. Hmmm... my stars. It takes you a long time to do things. he
Moving on to this chapter -- nice! Though I must tell you I didn't like it one bit. This is a big wrench in the romance of our main characters -- which will provide a lot of drama and problems . Nice work!
Notes:
1.) as she spoke, all teasing gone from her voice. (")You know he has to do this after we
2.) "It's better to share the glory than to have none at all(,)" (s)he sing-songed,
3.) What was the Goddess thinking with that one?
--> I wondered about this one. It's a little late but I had noticed in one of the chapters I just read that you didn't capitalize 'Goddess' in one place. If you have this in a word doc, you can do a search to find it. Otherwise, I can help, if need be - if you care, that is. *smile*
4.) "I'm afraid, Rhoden, that it is I (who) will be asking your forgiveness."
5.) purposefully maneuvering her breasts to (do) most of the 'brushing'.
Great work, as always. I can easily 'fall in' to this story - and though I don't follow much fantasy, I am enjoying this a lot!
Thanks!
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Great!! Fixed everything and I guess I'll have to go back and catch the number 3 cap because, yeah, it should be capitalized (heathen or not, it's supposed to be - lol!). ;) :) Thanx so much for everything, my friend!! ;) Yvette
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Welcome!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Super:) thanks for bringing this back on the map, I really missed this novel. Forced aka marriage is not a pleasant treat in any country or culture in the world. Luckily your wolfie found away around this stupid custom:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Super:) thanks for bringing this back on the map, I really missed this novel. Forced aka marriage is not a pleasant treat in any country or culture in the world. Luckily your wolfie found away around this stupid custom:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Wow - oh you really know how to make a girl feel good, Iza!! ;) Thanx so much for stopping by for the read on this one and for those lovely stars! :) Hope to keep this on track and my good mood along with it - forgot how fun it is to 'get lost' in my characters!! ;) Thanx again, my lady, for the comments and the starshine and enjoy the upcoming weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Bride's Perspective
by Y. M. Roger
Hello, Yvette,
Excellent story about gregor and the hot-blooded Talietha"s wedding. Even though Gregor is a hunk wolf, Talietha is not too happy to get married. The friendship with Shalindra is obvious. Good story development and engaging...easy to follow. It was fun to imagine Shalindra flirting with Rhoden the house manager. Well done!
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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A Bride's Perspective
by Y. M. Roger
Hello, Yvette,
Excellent story about gregor and the hot-blooded Talietha"s wedding. Even though Gregor is a hunk wolf, Talietha is not too happy to get married. The friendship with Shalindra is obvious. Good story development and engaging...easy to follow. It was fun to imagine Shalindra flirting with Rhoden the house manager. Well done!
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping by for the read on this one, Gypsy - know it's longer than most and I do so appreciate your time and your support! :) Hope to keep this on track and my good mood along with it - forgot how fun it is to 'get lost' in my characters!! ;) Thanx again, my lady, and enjoy the upcoming weekend! ;) Yvette
