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Comment from RodG
I truly enjoyed this memoir of your Chinese experience. You give the reader a clear--and vivid--sense of the ATMOSPHERE in the Forbidden City, especially that FEAR you felt prior to the tour and the overwhelming size of Tienanmen Square and the shame you all felt when surrounded by armed soldiers. Before the voting starts, please proofread as there are several spelling errors in this essay.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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I truly enjoyed this memoir of your Chinese experience. You give the reader a clear--and vivid--sense of the ATMOSPHERE in the Forbidden City, especially that FEAR you felt prior to the tour and the overwhelming size of Tienanmen Square and the shame you all felt when surrounded by armed soldiers. Before the voting starts, please proofread as there are several spelling errors in this essay.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much. I'm glad that I could convey that special feeling of fear. It was poignant. I have made the edits, and I believe I've corrected all the mistakes. Thanks for pointing it out. All best. Ulla:))
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Joann Alexander
Great beginning to a story, The characters are believable and the dialogue well done. You talked about the feelings of fear and shame and made the story come to life.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Great beginning to a story, The characters are believable and the dialogue well done. You talked about the feelings of fear and shame and made the story come to life.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Thanks a lot, Joann. It is biographical. It's my own story I wrote. I was there as a crew member, on the bus and on the square. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry and I do understand how it effected you. I have been to places that had a similar effect, especially while living in Germany and the horrors that happened during the war. You did a great job describing the emotion. Good luck with the contest.
After our few important passengers were lead off the plain, we, the crew, (plane???)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2020
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry and I do understand how it effected you. I have been to places that had a similar effect, especially while living in Germany and the horrors that happened during the war. You did a great job describing the emotion. Good luck with the contest.
After our few important passengers were lead off the plain, we, the crew, (plane???)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2020
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Thanks a lot, Barbara. Yes, I know what you're saying. I'm sorry for my late answer. Thanks also for pointing out my mistake. I've made several more edits. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Mistydawn
That would be a horrible sight to see. Knowing what'd happened and that more devastation is probably just around the corner. I imagine you had nightmares over what you saw. Not sure how anyone could enjoy the scenery when death lays so heavily in the air. The story is well-written, very interesting. Your great word choice paints a horrific picture in the reader's mind. It made us feel your heartache, your devistation. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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That would be a horrible sight to see. Knowing what'd happened and that more devastation is probably just around the corner. I imagine you had nightmares over what you saw. Not sure how anyone could enjoy the scenery when death lays so heavily in the air. The story is well-written, very interesting. Your great word choice paints a horrific picture in the reader's mind. It made us feel your heartache, your devistation. Nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Wow, Misty, this is a wonderful review, and thanks for the lovely extra star. That means a lot to me. You've literally made my day. Ulla:)))
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Ulla. I enjoyed reading it. I could see and feel everything you mentioned. The eeriness of it all came through as I read it. This was a great memory to share although tragic at the same time. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
After our few important passengers were lead [ led ] off the plain [ plane ], we, the crew, were quickly taken though [ through ]
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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You did a good job with your contest entry, Ulla. I enjoyed reading it. I could see and feel everything you mentioned. The eeriness of it all came through as I read it. This was a great memory to share although tragic at the same time. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
After our few important passengers were lead [ led ] off the plain [ plane ], we, the crew, were quickly taken though [ through ]
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Thanks a lot foor a wonderful review. I've made the corrections. Such embarrrasing mistakes to make and I nevernoticed!!! Thanks again. Ulla:)))
Comment from Earl Corp
That must have neen an adventure! Going there only three weeks after the event. I'm surprised they didn't have a party official along to put a good spin on that event. This was a great entry. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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That must have neen an adventure! Going there only three weeks after the event. I'm surprised they didn't have a party official along to put a good spin on that event. This was a great entry. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Hi Earl, that puuzzled us, as well. I have a feeling our 'guide' was a party official whose sympathy was with the students. Hence he only said anything of relevance outside the wee bus. He wanted us to tell the story outside China. Yes, it was poignant and an adventure. A sad one, I have to say. All best. Ulla:))
Comment from estory
I think you put us right in that square with that personal account. Nice attention to detail in relating the empty square, the sense of forboding on the bus, the allusion to the hidden message of the guide. I liked how you even talked about the everyday things we all have to do everyday like brush your teeth and take a shower; it seems so eerie when you place it in Peking at that time. estory
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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I think you put us right in that square with that personal account. Nice attention to detail in relating the empty square, the sense of forboding on the bus, the allusion to the hidden message of the guide. I liked how you even talked about the everyday things we all have to do everyday like brush your teeth and take a shower; it seems so eerie when you place it in Peking at that time. estory
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Wow, thank you so much. This is a wonderful review, estory. When I wrote it I have to admit I had tears in my eyes. It's a visit I will never forget. I flew into China many times after this, but this is the one trip that stands out. Kind regards. Ulla:))
