Echoes of Emptiness
Old, well worn, empty grand estate31 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written Jim, it's a marvellous piece of artwork for this picture this post. The thought that immediately comes to mind is, "if these walls could speak, what stories would they tell." But alas we can but speculate, beautifully written in stylish verse and appropriate thinking, pretty close to hexametric stanzas and abba rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
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Beautifully written Jim, it's a marvellous piece of artwork for this picture this post. The thought that immediately comes to mind is, "if these walls could speak, what stories would they tell." But alas we can but speculate, beautifully written in stylish verse and appropriate thinking, pretty close to hexametric stanzas and abba rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
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Roy, thank you so much.
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Bless you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Echoes of Emptiness
by JLR
Hello, my friend,
I love this poem. There is something very poetic about 'echoes of emptiness'.... well done. It's a fabulous entry for the Pix this poetry club challenge.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Echoes of Emptiness
by JLR
Hello, my friend,
I love this poem. There is something very poetic about 'echoes of emptiness'.... well done. It's a fabulous entry for the Pix this poetry club challenge.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Smiling back dear friend, I am going to enjoy reading each of these entries!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh I like it and the form really fits the wording. Great rhyme and flow using the descriptions that made us feel the effects of time. Excellent take on the challenge
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Oh I like it and the form really fits the wording. Great rhyme and flow using the descriptions that made us feel the effects of time. Excellent take on the challenge
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Barbara, we must gone to a place where these things are true, I try hard to believe we are a better society than I have seen if late.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Those old walls contain so many memories and your imagination ran riot here in your richly worded write about this scene and how empty buildings can echo ghosts of the past, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Those old walls contain so many memories and your imagination ran riot here in your richly worded write about this scene and how empty buildings can echo ghosts of the past, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much, may your week be filled with may joys.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, I love reading the poems that I get to review because of a challenge from a writers club, because I get to savor contributions like this one.
Are there really old Manor Houses standing empty like the one pictured in the illustration you attached to your intriguing poem?
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Dear JLR, I love reading the poems that I get to review because of a challenge from a writers club, because I get to savor contributions like this one.
Are there really old Manor Houses standing empty like the one pictured in the illustration you attached to your intriguing poem?
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Suzanna, I would hope if there are..not for long periods.
Comment from June Sargent
I always wonder when I see empty houses about the loves and lives that flourished within those old walls. The secrets that are now sealed in the past. You did a great job with this challenge. I haven't tried it yet.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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I always wonder when I see empty houses about the loves and lives that flourished within those old walls. The secrets that are now sealed in the past. You did a great job with this challenge. I haven't tried it yet.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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I look forward to reading what you come up with, which I am certain will tickle my mind.
Comment from lyenochka
Love all the onomatopoeia that you put into this poem! I especially liked the sound of the assonance in "water blot drop" which not only repeats the 'o' sound but it sounds like the drip of a faucet. You take us beyond the current house to the past lives lived in it and show us a glimmer of hope of restoration for the house. Great entry for the challenge!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Love all the onomatopoeia that you put into this poem! I especially liked the sound of the assonance in "water blot drop" which not only repeats the 'o' sound but it sounds like the drip of a faucet. You take us beyond the current house to the past lives lived in it and show us a glimmer of hope of restoration for the house. Great entry for the challenge!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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lyenochka, your words are very appreciated in every way, it was quite fun to let this unfold into a poem of hopeful restoration.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
A long-uninhabited, once-stately house that once nutured a family, with all its closeness, all its disagreements and struggles--a sad sight indeed.
Your poem is vividly descriptive and moving. I especially like the glimmer of hope at the end.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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A long-uninhabited, once-stately house that once nutured a family, with all its closeness, all its disagreements and struggles--a sad sight indeed.
Your poem is vividly descriptive and moving. I especially like the glimmer of hope at the end.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Janice, thank you so much for your review and validation of the possible conquest over wear and tear.
Comment from humpwhistle
Yes, old homes whisper of past lives, lost glories. We can romance them, and we can move on. You poem suggests both are possible. I suspect that most relics have histories as mundane as our own--to the people who lived in them.
Interesting use of onomatopoeia in the opening.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Yes, old homes whisper of past lives, lost glories. We can romance them, and we can move on. You poem suggests both are possible. I suspect that most relics have histories as mundane as our own--to the people who lived in them.
Interesting use of onomatopoeia in the opening.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Lee, thank you, that first step into something that has long been shutter must sound quite similar. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Barbaraj1
I love your poem. An empty mansion brings with it many challenges.
Your rhyming is great. Four quatrains are not easy. You did a good job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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I love your poem. An empty mansion brings with it many challenges.
Your rhyming is great. Four quatrains are not easy. You did a good job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Barbara, I thank you very much, this photo is I am certain going to evoke sone very interesting poetry, I can?t wait to read them all.
