The Edge of Convenience
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Comment from IndefinitelySmallx
Very nice take on a universal pledge of allegiance. Very creative and thank you for sharing. I really like the fact that you have referred to possible other worlds by writing "world(s)." Very clever!
Very nice take on a universal pledge of allegiance. Very creative and thank you for sharing. I really like the fact that you have referred to possible other worlds by writing "world(s)." Very clever!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Dear gracious author and fellow Fanstoryian,
Remarkable job!! Thanks for sharing this with Fanstory!!!
I vow fealty to the galaxy
and world(s) in which I inhabit
and to the Consolidated Governance
as it presently stands, one multiverse
under God, infinitely congenial,
with freedom and neutralism for all...
A real great read!!!
Dear gracious author and fellow Fanstoryian,
Remarkable job!! Thanks for sharing this with Fanstory!!!
I vow fealty to the galaxy
and world(s) in which I inhabit
and to the Consolidated Governance
as it presently stands, one multiverse
under God, infinitely congenial,
with freedom and neutralism for all...
A real great read!!!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
Comment from Carlos' girl
very interesting read. im especially into the author's notes pertaining to the use of the word "neutral". i wonder if given your explanation, you might use the original word " justice" in your poem.
all in all a fine effort.
very interesting read. im especially into the author's notes pertaining to the use of the word "neutral". i wonder if given your explanation, you might use the original word " justice" in your poem.
all in all a fine effort.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
Comment from equestrik
This write is imaginative and interesting for sure. I like questioning that makes people think. Wouldn't it be a wonderful world if all of humankind would come together for the good of all.
This write is imaginative and interesting for sure. I like questioning that makes people think. Wouldn't it be a wonderful world if all of humankind would come together for the good of all.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
Comment from A. Fortier
Dear Opal Rose,
Great poem, much like a pledge of allegience to the universe. My only critique is the formatting should include more breaks. Otherwise very lovely, cheers.
-A.
Dear Opal Rose,
Great poem, much like a pledge of allegience to the universe. My only critique is the formatting should include more breaks. Otherwise very lovely, cheers.
-A.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from Ignatius Albright
A lovely piece, nicely done. It is concise and compelling to read.
I very much like the ending
"one multiverse
under God, infinitely congenial,
with freedom and neutralism for all." A nice play on words and allusion to the U.S. pledge of allegiance.
There is a slight grammatical error near beginning,
"and world(s) in which I inhabit"
Believe it should read:
and world(s) which I inhabit
A lovely piece, nicely done. It is concise and compelling to read.
I very much like the ending
"one multiverse
under God, infinitely congenial,
with freedom and neutralism for all." A nice play on words and allusion to the U.S. pledge of allegiance.
There is a slight grammatical error near beginning,
"and world(s) in which I inhabit"
Believe it should read:
and world(s) which I inhabit
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
Comment from karenina
Thank you for your author's notes. I've never wanted your vision more than I do in today's divisive, troubled world. Out of the box thinking to develop your own "Pledge" to be all inclusive and aimed at achieving universal peace. I was touched by the hope (and determination) woven within your poem.--Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
Thank you for your author's notes. I've never wanted your vision more than I do in today's divisive, troubled world. Out of the box thinking to develop your own "Pledge" to be all inclusive and aimed at achieving universal peace. I was touched by the hope (and determination) woven within your poem.--Karenina
Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review Karenina. I am truly happy my hopeful vision of universal harmony resonated with you. Thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy ?The Edge of Convenience?. Best wishes in all of your writing endeavors.
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
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You have a beautiful name! Your poem was like a ray of light. As long as there are souls like you, this wild world has hope!--Karenina
Comment from padumachitta
hello
A wonderful poem that is postive and full of feeling, empathy and compassion. Ah, if we could all take this to heart, and really reach out...
Good luck in the free verse poetry contest
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
hello
A wonderful poem that is postive and full of feeling, empathy and compassion. Ah, if we could all take this to heart, and really reach out...
Good luck in the free verse poetry contest
Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review. Yes. If only we could all grasp and cling to this notion. How blissful it would be to live in such a harmonious existence. Best of luck to you and all of your writing endeavors.
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
Comment from SixFtLion (Suzanna)
Wow, just wow. This was an amazing poem. I read it several times and each time I felt another level of your message. In this current, divided world, your poem should be read by everybody to gain some perspective on what is important. Awesome work, good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
Wow, just wow. This was an amazing poem. I read it several times and each time I felt another level of your message. In this current, divided world, your poem should be read by everybody to gain some perspective on what is important. Awesome work, good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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Thank you kindly for your raving review fellow writer. I am grateful this notion of universal peace spoke to you on various levels. I truly wish the world could be positively swayed as such. Best of luck to you with all of your writing endeavors.
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
Comment from Wabigoon
Opal--
No matter how big you go, no matter the Titan of human government buried beneath Mt. Ida, on Crete, in tears you still go with that bit added to the pledge of allegiance, "under God." That was, if I am not mistaken, added, to suit folks like you. Not me. What if I am a member of the Freedom from Religion Foundation? Well, then, your pledge does not work, at all. I see utterly no understanding of that, or that the "galactic" elements of your pledge might simply be about us accepting our larger inheritance?
Sorry, I cannot subscribe to your pledge.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Opal--
No matter how big you go, no matter the Titan of human government buried beneath Mt. Ida, on Crete, in tears you still go with that bit added to the pledge of allegiance, "under God." That was, if I am not mistaken, added, to suit folks like you. Not me. What if I am a member of the Freedom from Religion Foundation? Well, then, your pledge does not work, at all. I see utterly no understanding of that, or that the "galactic" elements of your pledge might simply be about us accepting our larger inheritance?
Sorry, I cannot subscribe to your pledge.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020