Circles
chasing the circles27 total reviews
Comment from royowen
A very interesting and wonderfully written loop poetry, I wrote something about circles some years. Unfortunately I think you have to maintain the loop connection between the verses, otherwise really well done Iza, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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A very interesting and wonderfully written loop poetry, I wrote something about circles some years. Unfortunately I think you have to maintain the loop connection between the verses, otherwise really well done Iza, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review
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Well done
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a respectable entry for the Loop poetry contest since it meets the requirements. It is well written, and although you describe it as silly, it could also be taken seriously describing someone who can't think straight. Good luck.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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This is a respectable entry for the Loop poetry contest since it meets the requirements. It is well written, and although you describe it as silly, it could also be taken seriously describing someone who can't think straight. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review
Comment from Patty Palmer
Being such a newbie and learning so much from others helping me out I don't always how to go about duplicating how the scheme or rhyme manner is required. I've recently become more acquainted with the Loop form of poetry and liking it more all the time. I enjoyed the poem that you have written here. Have a great day! God bless!
Patty
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Being such a newbie and learning so much from others helping me out I don't always how to go about duplicating how the scheme or rhyme manner is required. I've recently become more acquainted with the Loop form of poetry and liking it more all the time. I enjoyed the poem that you have written here. Have a great day! God bless!
Patty
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Patty, thank you so much for your kind review.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Susan Larson
I commend you for attempting to write a loop poem. While I am new at this, it is my understanding that the last word of one stanza is to be the first word of the next stanza. In two places this does not follow the form as I understand it. But I do appreciate the essence of your poem.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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I commend you for attempting to write a loop poem. While I am new at this, it is my understanding that the last word of one stanza is to be the first word of the next stanza. In two places this does not follow the form as I understand it. But I do appreciate the essence of your poem.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Susan, thank you so much for your kind review, and if that is your car, she is so beautiful:)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very 'round' poem, my friend with all of the circles. I often feel like I'm going in circles and never getting anywhere. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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A very 'round' poem, my friend with all of the circles. I often feel like I'm going in circles and never getting anywhere. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much, Debbie
Comment from Sallyo
This is an odd one... sounds as if the person is on the continuous cycle of getting nowhere. Since this is a contest entry, I suggest you fix the first ch doesn't conform...
Around I look for my spirit
My spirit is scattered not bound.
That line has to begin with SPIRIT.
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This is an odd one... sounds as if the person is on the continuous cycle of getting nowhere. Since this is a contest entry, I suggest you fix the first ch doesn't conform...
Around I look for my spirit
My spirit is scattered not bound.
That line has to begin with SPIRIT.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your suggestion.
Comment from JanPerry
Ok u are running in circles going round and round. I got dizzy reading this one."my spirit is scattered not bound" sounds unconvincing. The spirit comes from yourself. A ghost moves around going thru things. If u expanded on the rippling effect of circles, like in your photo, it would work better.
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Ok u are running in circles going round and round. I got dizzy reading this one."my spirit is scattered not bound" sounds unconvincing. The spirit comes from yourself. A ghost moves around going thru things. If u expanded on the rippling effect of circles, like in your photo, it would work better.
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your suggestions.
