Eric's Epic Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Eric And His Alien Drone"Another adventure for Eric
34 total reviews
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A fun fantasy story. Easy to read and follow. I stayed engaged beginning to end. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. No edits or adjustments necessary.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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A fun fantasy story. Easy to read and follow. I stayed engaged beginning to end. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. No edits or adjustments necessary.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Lance. This is going to be another fun adventure for Eric, I hope you enjoy it too. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Mistydawn
Oh good another story for your grandson. Your last one was very interesting, entertaining. This one promises to be as well. I look forward to finding out what Herbie found out. Your grandson is a cutie.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Oh good another story for your grandson. Your last one was very interesting, entertaining. This one promises to be as well. I look forward to finding out what Herbie found out. Your grandson is a cutie.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thank you, my friend. I hope you enjoy it as much as you did the first one. I'm so pleased to have you along for the ride. Big hugs! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from doggymad1
What a lovely mix of reality and fantasy. You have given Herbie a wonderful personality which compliments Eric to perfection.
I haven't seen these stories before but am looking forward to reading more of them
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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What a lovely mix of reality and fantasy. You have given Herbie a wonderful personality which compliments Eric to perfection.
I haven't seen these stories before but am looking forward to reading more of them
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much, Freda. This is the second story and I have to make it as much fun as I did the last one, or Eric will be on my tail! lol. I hope you enjoy it; thank you for your encouraging words, my friend. :) Sandra x
Comment from royowen
Well done on publishing your book, and more importantly that Eric is pleased with it. What an encredible gift for a child to encourage them. I'll bet the start of this story, is filled with time travel, the Arapaho Indian horse, is a blast from the past. Well done, Sandra, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Well done on publishing your book, and more importantly that Eric is pleased with it. What an encredible gift for a child to encourage them. I'll bet the start of this story, is filled with time travel, the Arapaho Indian horse, is a blast from the past. Well done, Sandra, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Yes, you have it in one, another time-travel story, I can't get away from them, lol. Thank you, Roy, for your kind words, I hope you enjoy this story now that you know an English lad is coming to America to a time before you, and your parents were born. Make sure you pick me up if I make some terrible gaffs! Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
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Well done,
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Sandra, this is so unfair. I don't have a six to give you. I'll have to start saving them. I'm so glad to read about Eric and Herbie commencing their new adventure. What a lovely boy Eric is. Big hugs. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Awe, Sandra, this is so unfair. I don't have a six to give you. I'll have to start saving them. I'm so glad to read about Eric and Herbie commencing their new adventure. What a lovely boy Eric is. Big hugs. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Ulla! No problem about the 6, I'm just happy that you will be coming along on this new adventure. Thank you, my dear friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from juliaSjames
The beginning of what will surely be an enthralling adventure. Such a modern story, a boy and his alien drone!
A few comments for your consideration, Sandra:
I think you meant to write "Oy" not "Oye"
Eric was barefoot at the beginning of the story. So either mention that he put his shoes back on or let Herbie land on the soles of his feet.
"Hello, boy" when Eric addresses the horse
Would Eric know the meaning of Arapaho when Herbie scanned the arrow? Should Herbie explain?
Suggest "The horse didn't even blink" instead of using "he" to avoid confusion
Both Eric and the horse had moved since Eric first approached. So, in the para beginning
"Standing beside him ..."
Suggest
"Eric waited impatiently, stroking the horse's neck."
Requesting a most benevolent outcome for your dear grandson's progress. My 10 year old grandson is making valiant efforts to cope with ADHD symptoms.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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The beginning of what will surely be an enthralling adventure. Such a modern story, a boy and his alien drone!
A few comments for your consideration, Sandra:
I think you meant to write "Oy" not "Oye"
Eric was barefoot at the beginning of the story. So either mention that he put his shoes back on or let Herbie land on the soles of his feet.
"Hello, boy" when Eric addresses the horse
Would Eric know the meaning of Arapaho when Herbie scanned the arrow? Should Herbie explain?
Suggest "The horse didn't even blink" instead of using "he" to avoid confusion
Both Eric and the horse had moved since Eric first approached. So, in the para beginning
"Standing beside him ..."
Suggest
"Eric waited impatiently, stroking the horse's neck."
Requesting a most benevolent outcome for your dear grandson's progress. My 10 year old grandson is making valiant efforts to cope with ADHD symptoms.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Hi Julia, thank you so much for your really helpful review. I've made some changes now, and the shoes are taken care of! LOL, thank you for that. I've also added a bit about the Arapaho Indians, but more will come out about them later in the story. Your review is just what I needed, thank you. :)) Sandra xxx
We both have amazing grandsons, Julia, they deserve all the help we can give them. I also hope your dear grandson progresses well. It sounds like he is much like mine, he has a strong desire to get through his little 'problem' (as Eric calls it) and come out a winner! And, of course, they will! Big hugs, my friend. xx
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Yes Sandra. Our grandsons are the best. I haven't written stories for my grandkids yet. So your work is a great inspiration.
Blessings Julia
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They will really love a book written by then Grandma. Do it! xx
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LOL
Will do
Julia
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh, it is great to see Eric and Herbie paired up for another mystery. You leave us with a good cliff-hanger. Surely anyone who has read this will be back for more. I certainly will anyway.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Oh, it is great to see Eric and Herbie paired up for another mystery. You leave us with a good cliff-hanger. Surely anyone who has read this will be back for more. I certainly will anyway.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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I was hoping you'd come along for this adventure, Jim, I loved your reviews on the first story. Thank you so much for the positive remarks, they are so encouraging. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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I am working on getting my novella into shape. I wonder if you have this problem, probably you are less likely to with children's books, but I think one needs to keep FS 'chapters' short as posts while the real chapters would be much longer in a printed novel or an ebook. What would be your opinion on that?
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My Trilogy had between 1200 and 1500 words in them. Some times it was hard to find the right place to stop and I would go on until I did. I never had a problem with that. Once you get your regular readers for the book, they will read whatever length you write, within reason, at least that's what I found. My chapters in my published books are two FS parts. I've kept the three books with the same chapter length and they worked well. It's different with Eric's books, they have short parts ending on a cliff-hanger. Good luck. xx
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Thank you. My posts vary between 900 to 1400 words and my chapters will involve several posts.
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That's perfect. I look forward to reading it. :)) xx
Comment from the13thpoet
Good morning Sandra. I enjoyed your story. It was engaging from beginning to end. I can' t wait to read more and find out what this adventure is going to be. Good job, keep it coming!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Good morning Sandra. I enjoyed your story. It was engaging from beginning to end. I can' t wait to read more and find out what this adventure is going to be. Good job, keep it coming!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Good morning, my friend, (it's early evening here) thank you so much for your kind words on this part, more will be coming soon. I hope you come along for the journey. Big hugs! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I like this Sandra. It is very unique. What a wonderful thing to do for Eric. How wonderful to have a grandmother who can do such a thing. You are multi-talented, Sandra. What an imagination. Hugs Nancy:)
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I like this Sandra. It is very unique. What a wonderful thing to do for Eric. How wonderful to have a grandmother who can do such a thing. You are multi-talented, Sandra. What an imagination. Hugs Nancy:)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for the lovely stars, Nancy. I might need a little bit of help from you regarding dialogue from cowboys. If you seen any really awful bits, please let me know. Eric really wants to go to the Cowboy and India days. Soooo Off we go, Thank you for those lovely comments, my friend. Biggest hugs. Sandra. xxx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait for this adventure to begin. I know it will a fun one and very enjoyable to read. You do a great job writing and I know children will enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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I can't wait for this adventure to begin. I know it will a fun one and very enjoyable to read. You do a great job writing and I know children will enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much, Barbara. Yes, Eric wants his next book already!! Lol. I've popped your sticker in the post today. I don't know how long it takes to get to you, will you let me know when you get it? Thanks again my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Yes, I will. Thank you. I'm on vacation, but according to my Amazon app, the book was delivered yesterday.
