A Love That Wasn't
when love jumps out of the window...50 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I like how you ended this unhappy love story with "two dreams lay unborn." They never loved each other enough to form "one" dream to work on together. Good picture to illustrate the poem, too.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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I like how you ended this unhappy love story with "two dreams lay unborn." They never loved each other enough to form "one" dream to work on together. Good picture to illustrate the poem, too.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks for the five stars.
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Welcome Back!
Comment from Rickie1
NASSUS
Wow! Have we've all been there before? Your poem touches feeling, or the lack of them, that fades is a dwindling relationship. Fortunately most of us learn from our youthful hormonal overdrive and soul connect to our special some one. You've done this wit a few well chosen words we all can relate to.
Rickie
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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NASSUS
Wow! Have we've all been there before? Your poem touches feeling, or the lack of them, that fades is a dwindling relationship. Fortunately most of us learn from our youthful hormonal overdrive and soul connect to our special some one. You've done this wit a few well chosen words we all can relate to.
Rickie
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks for appreciating my work.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Susan;
> happy holidays and may you have a very Merry Christmas and a happy new your to you and your lovely blessed family.
> You nicked it in the bud, Susan when you wrote this writing in three lines.
> So many relationships are doomed right from the get-go. And you can't force a round peg in a square hole.
> Great picture that sums it up.
> Good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one, Susan
Alx
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Cheers, Susan;
> happy holidays and may you have a very Merry Christmas and a happy new your to you and your lovely blessed family.
> You nicked it in the bud, Susan when you wrote this writing in three lines.
> So many relationships are doomed right from the get-go. And you can't force a round peg in a square hole.
> Great picture that sums it up.
> Good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one, Susan
Alx
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks Alex for the five stars.
Comment from Katchoo Ledeux
This is pretty much how I felt about every guy I dated, except my husband. I always had a nagging in the back of my mind telling me they weren't the right one, but I didn't fully believe in soul mates, so I kind of figured that's just how it was... until my husband. I knew instantly with him and it was such a powerful and undeniable feeling.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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This is pretty much how I felt about every guy I dated, except my husband. I always had a nagging in the back of my mind telling me they weren't the right one, but I didn't fully believe in soul mates, so I kind of figured that's just how it was... until my husband. I knew instantly with him and it was such a powerful and undeniable feeling.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks for the five stars.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your short poem, nassus. The picture plus your well=chosen words make an overall sad statement. Good job on the syllable count. I believe the lovers broke up but there is a baby on the way. Thanks for sharing. Jan
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You did a good job with your short poem, nassus. The picture plus your well=chosen words make an overall sad statement. Good job on the syllable count. I believe the lovers broke up but there is a baby on the way. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks for the five stars.
Comment from kahpot
yes lovers should be able to tell if a relationship is on the horizon, "two dreams lay unborn" excellent as this says those dreams are yet to come, a wonderful 5-7-5 poem, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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yes lovers should be able to tell if a relationship is on the horizon, "two dreams lay unborn" excellent as this says those dreams are yet to come, a wonderful 5-7-5 poem, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks for the five stars.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Hi Nassus!
Sadly their love has apparently fallen by the wayside. The two people in the illustration clearly are not on the same playing field.
I especially like:
lukewarm .... love
goodbye kiss forgotten.
Thanks for this verse and image.
Mark
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Hi Nassus!
Sadly their love has apparently fallen by the wayside. The two people in the illustration clearly are not on the same playing field.
I especially like:
lukewarm .... love
goodbye kiss forgotten.
Thanks for this verse and image.
Mark
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks for the five stars.
Comment from Michele Harber
You could be describing my last break-up (prior to my current happy marriage). He couldn't say "I love you," but he always showed it in his actions - until he didn't. We'd discussed marriage yet, a week before our third anniversary as a couple, he told me he wasn't ready for a commitment, and didn't know if he ever would be. Since you described an actual incident (of which you weren't even aware!) so perfectly, I'd say your poem shows honesty and a genuine understanding of human behavior and emotion - a lot to get through in 17 syllables, but you did.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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You could be describing my last break-up (prior to my current happy marriage). He couldn't say "I love you," but he always showed it in his actions - until he didn't. We'd discussed marriage yet, a week before our third anniversary as a couple, he told me he wasn't ready for a commitment, and didn't know if he ever would be. Since you described an actual incident (of which you weren't even aware!) so perfectly, I'd say your poem shows honesty and a genuine understanding of human behavior and emotion - a lot to get through in 17 syllables, but you did.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks Michele for the five stars.
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You're very welcome - and welcome back.
Comment from dragonpoet
The words and artwork show a broken relationship. The man seems like he is ignoring her comments.
Good luck in the contest. Keep writing.
Happy Holidays
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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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The words and artwork show a broken relationship. The man seems like he is ignoring her comments.
Good luck in the contest. Keep writing.
Happy Holidays
dp
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks for the five stars.
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My pleasure.
Welcome back.
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Comment from Jaye Bennett
Didn't really every get started. One can only console oneself in believing it was not meant to be. The two dreams lying unborn may be born and have fantastic futures. If not, at least, in parting, they will not turn into nightmares. Nice 5-7-5 poem. Good job.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Didn't really every get started. One can only console oneself in believing it was not meant to be. The two dreams lying unborn may be born and have fantastic futures. If not, at least, in parting, they will not turn into nightmares. Nice 5-7-5 poem. Good job.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Been absent in this site for a year and a half hence my very delayed reply. Thanks for the five stars.
