I Should Have Believed
A Triquint for Potlatch Poetry38 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is such a lovely, bittersweet piece--written in a form I've NEVER heard of!
The speaker seems to be someone who never allowed herself to be a child--at
least never let herself embrace some fantasies! Great piece.
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This is such a lovely, bittersweet piece--written in a form I've NEVER heard of!
The speaker seems to be someone who never allowed herself to be a child--at
least never let herself embrace some fantasies! Great piece.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
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What a sad way to live, not believing in fairies. I think my inner child isn't so inner. lol. Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Pantygynt
I think this is a great interpretation of the rules for this strange poetic form. I looked at it just now and decided it was not for me but you have done so well with this maintaining a double rhyme on the 'a' rhyme throughout the poem. I think this is clever enough to merit a six.
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I think this is a great interpretation of the rules for this strange poetic form. I looked at it just now and decided it was not for me but you have done so well with this maintaining a double rhyme on the 'a' rhyme throughout the poem. I think this is clever enough to merit a six.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
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Wow! Thank you, Jim. To get a six from you is extraordinarily special!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not read this form of poetry before and I enjoyed it, you blacklisted the fairies to your great regret! Now all the magic has died. I loved the sentiments here, love Dolly x
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Not read this form of poetry before and I enjoyed it, you blacklisted the fairies to your great regret! Now all the magic has died. I loved the sentiments here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
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That wasn't me speaking in the poem. I believe in fairies, Santa Claus, and all the rest. lol. Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Trinquint poem about believing in the existence of fairies in our lives. There are many things we should believe in and one of them is the little fairies and elves do exist.
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A very well-written Trinquint poem about believing in the existence of fairies in our lives. There are many things we should believe in and one of them is the little fairies and elves do exist.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
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I'm glad you agree. I believe in them, too. Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What a lovely form this is. Congratulations to Sylvia and to you, for doing such a terrific job with it. Simple format, but no doubt hard to do. You nailed it! :)
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What a lovely form this is. Congratulations to Sylvia and to you, for doing such a terrific job with it. Simple format, but no doubt hard to do. You nailed it! :)
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
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Thank you, Phyllis. I do believe in fairies. Don't you? 8-)
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I believe in mosquitoes. :)
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LOL
Comment from JanPerry
A triquint sounds really tricky. The constant rhyme is repetitive. It's very unusual.Blacklisted rhymes but seems an overstated word in a fairytale. Blacklisted is for someone banned for life.
I like the fairies. The colours are enchanting.
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A triquint sounds really tricky. The constant rhyme is repetitive. It's very unusual.Blacklisted rhymes but seems an overstated word in a fairytale. Blacklisted is for someone banned for life.
I like the fairies. The colours are enchanting.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I love that picture. It would make such a cute card. I'm make and sell cards so always notice things like cute card material. =} Really well done. I don't know too much about this type of poetry but think this is very well done. Rox
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I love that picture. It would make such a cute card. I'm make and sell cards so always notice things like cute card material. =} Really well done. I don't know too much about this type of poetry but think this is very well done. Rox
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
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Thank you. Yes, I thought the picture was darling. I felt the fairies were sad that someone didn't believe in them. (I'll grow up some day . . . maybe.)
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Damommy;
> Sylvia Feeley's poetic format is not only interesting but I found that it has a number of meter where most meter is evenly counted.
> I do indeed enjoy reading new formats and this one is definitely exciting and opens up to avenues of interesting input such as yours.
> Just questioning the fact that if berries existed with they did not is really up to the child and has nothing to do with adult intervention.
> A child's world is a child's world is just good that we as adults understand it and that's what's fun about being an adult and having a childhood experience.
> This is the kind of poem that puts me in that existence.
> Thank you for sharing, Damommy, and take care and have a good one especially with your family and friends during these blessed holiday times.
Alx
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Cheers, Damommy;
> Sylvia Feeley's poetic format is not only interesting but I found that it has a number of meter where most meter is evenly counted.
> I do indeed enjoy reading new formats and this one is definitely exciting and opens up to avenues of interesting input such as yours.
> Just questioning the fact that if berries existed with they did not is really up to the child and has nothing to do with adult intervention.
> A child's world is a child's world is just good that we as adults understand it and that's what's fun about being an adult and having a childhood experience.
> This is the kind of poem that puts me in that existence.
> Thank you for sharing, Damommy, and take care and have a good one especially with your family and friends during these blessed holiday times.
Alx
Comment Written 07-Dec-2018
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I think my inner child isn't so inner. lol. Thank you for a delightful review.
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Take care you're very welcome, Damommy.
Alx
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"I Should Have Believed", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"I Should Have Believed", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much!
damonny, as always, you're very welcome.
Have a happy, holy and safe Christmas,
the Duchess :))))))
Comment from judiverse
I really like this form. You did an excellent job with it, too. Your rhyme works out delightfully. We may miss out on a lot if we don't believe in just a little bit of fairy dust. I like the lines you chose to repeat. You emphasize the narrator's refusal to change her way of thinking. Charming artwork. judi
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I really like this form. You did an excellent job with it, too. Your rhyme works out delightfully. We may miss out on a lot if we don't believe in just a little bit of fairy dust. I like the lines you chose to repeat. You emphasize the narrator's refusal to change her way of thinking. Charming artwork. judi
Comment Written 07-Dec-2018
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I think it must be sad to not believe in fairies. Thank you for a great review.
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You're very welcome. Lovely poem. judi
