The Nightmare
Putting a nightmare to bed23 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
This is an interesting hypothesis, that the power of thought prior to sleeping can bring a conclusion tro a dream. It would be great were it true. I am still bewildered rather than frightened by a recurring dream I had for many years after leaving the Royal Marines. Dressed in my best uniform as the Orderly officer of the Day I am inspecting the guard when I suddenly realise that instead of my highly polished dress boots I am wearing carpet slippers.
That situation never actually occurred and I never worked out why that dream should keep recurring for several years.
One typo I believe:
'and when I wake I start to scream. I' -- I think that 'I' on the end of the line is a typo as it destrows the rhyme scheme, and that isn't like you..
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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This is an interesting hypothesis, that the power of thought prior to sleeping can bring a conclusion tro a dream. It would be great were it true. I am still bewildered rather than frightened by a recurring dream I had for many years after leaving the Royal Marines. Dressed in my best uniform as the Orderly officer of the Day I am inspecting the guard when I suddenly realise that instead of my highly polished dress boots I am wearing carpet slippers.
That situation never actually occurred and I never worked out why that dream should keep recurring for several years.
One typo I believe:
'and when I wake I start to scream. I' -- I think that 'I' on the end of the line is a typo as it destrows the rhyme scheme, and that isn't like you..
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Someone else caught that extra eye. Tee hee. I had to put it there since the monster had three eyes. Just kidding. I have fixed it. Thank you for the great review. I wrote this at five am after being up all night. Sorry for the mistake
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
An interesting concept for a poem, and one I've never actually thought of before. I have recurring unpleasant dreams sometimes especially when I have things on my mind or worries. But I've never thought about them needing to be resolved within the dream so that's a good point! I liked your dream, a good mix of horror and fantasy. And a suitably terrifying picture too.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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An interesting concept for a poem, and one I've never actually thought of before. I have recurring unpleasant dreams sometimes especially when I have things on my mind or worries. But I've never thought about them needing to be resolved within the dream so that's a good point! I liked your dream, a good mix of horror and fantasy. And a suitably terrifying picture too.
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thank you Hayley for your lovely and detailed review. Take care
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a dream that make us fear and we know we have to fight until the end to get the monster that is after us out of our liivesw and out of our dreams so that we can have peaceful sleep.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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A very well-written poem about a dream that make us fear and we know we have to fight until the end to get the monster that is after us out of our liivesw and out of our dreams so that we can have peaceful sleep.
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thank you Sandra for your wonderful review
