Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Victor, I love the movie Mary Poppins...and you did a great job holding the rhythm with your poem...and yes a man well do it the hard way...if he can...but gets where he's going...and she will be there...very well written my friend...and I love this picture...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018

Smile. Thanks, Doug.

reply by l.raven on 06-Jun-2018

you are so welcome Doug...always...God Bless...love xxoo

Comment from estory

Excellent

Its a whimsical little piece with a twist on the musical number from Mary Poppins; you fit it in there nicely, and it has a nice little different take, talking about romance, Putting adversity behind you, in that mountain, and letting the rains wash away the past and giving you a new start, in that hand offered. Nice original images within the classic lyrics rhythm. estory

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018

Ur all right, my man.

Comment from Sophie Shumaker

Excellent

The feeling of this poem is special. I like it! Good luck in the contest, and have a nice day!


Sophie S

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018

Thank you.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Mileau....did you mean Milieu?
I can see Julie Andrews and Dick Van Dyke with a smudge of soot on his nose as I read this.
Well penned ..I like the imagery of infirmity being a mountain
God bless

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018

YES, and I've had French,
embarrassingly enough. Thank you. Spell check did not show an error-it always does in foreign languages

Comment from Swampfox1

Excellent

It is a wonderful poem, one that needs three or four readings to see a direction. I like, "Fields yield incense
and incepts
and that begat you ," It's like looking into a movie scene, in a way, and getting to see a moment in time of some strange creature. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018

Smile. Nice review. Thank you.

reply by Swampfox1 on 04-Jun-2018

you're welcome

reply by Swampfox1 on 04-Jun-2018

you're welcome

reply by Swampfox1 on 04-Jun-2018

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

Well done.
This brings back old memories of the Marry Poppins movie.
I wonder if kids now would be interested enough to sit through it.
I like your version of the verse.
Well done.
Sharon

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018

Thank you.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

I love the movie 'Mary Poppins', so I immediately recognized the picture from the song "Step in Time". This poem seems to celebrate the variety of life and the ability to live it with joy and courage.

Keep writing

Joan

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018

Smile. Thank you.

reply by dragonpoet on 06-Jun-2018

Yo're welcome. Have a great week.

Joan

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello, Victortouche, :)

I thought it was 'Chiminy' let me look:
Chim chiminey
Chim chiminey
Chim chim cher-ee!
A sweep is as lucky
As lucky can be (http://www.fpx.de/fp/Disney/Lyrics/MaryPoppins.html It has the full song. I love that song, so your poem will be great.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018

Thank you, and, of course, you are right.

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

A very clever interpretation of chim chimeny. I very much enjoyed reading it, well I should say singing it. I loved Mary Poppins although Dick Van Dykes English accent was terrible.
Great illustration. Nice one. Jen.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018

Ha. Thank you.

Comment from misscookie

Exceptional

I must say, reading this write was very enjoyable
You captured my attention from the first line to the last and the r hymn remain in my head as I read
thank you for sharing
Cookie

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018

Awe, thank you.

reply by misscookie on 06-Jun-2018

my pleasure.
Cookie