Summer Rain
A Rondeau for Potlatch41 total reviews
Comment from The Cowboy Poet
The form seems to be right on target. I think you have some excellent imagery woven throughout the poem. Good alliteration makes it musical and a smooth movement. The last line in the first stanza is a very nice simile. Well done. Cowboy
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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The form seems to be right on target. I think you have some excellent imagery woven throughout the poem. Good alliteration makes it musical and a smooth movement. The last line in the first stanza is a very nice simile. Well done. Cowboy
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Thank you so much for this lovely review. I truly appreciate your comments.
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You are most welcome. Cowboy
Comment from Gloria ....
A perfectly formed and well presented rondeau. It truly is a beautiful form and especially when two musical end rhymes have been selected to deliver the image in its entirely.
Superb poem, Yvonne and excellent addition to the Potlatch club.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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A perfectly formed and well presented rondeau. It truly is a beautiful form and especially when two musical end rhymes have been selected to deliver the image in its entirely.
Superb poem, Yvonne and excellent addition to the Potlatch club.
Gloria
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Thank you, Gloria. That means a lot.
Comment from lyenochka
Super rondeau, Yvonne! I like how you were able to use the two repeated rhymes and came up with some unique ones like thieves-reprieves-heaves-cleaves-sheaves. And the repeated line gives that feeling of the rain's repeated sounds. Great use of alliteration and onomatopoeia while telling us the story of the storm's journey.
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Super rondeau, Yvonne! I like how you were able to use the two repeated rhymes and came up with some unique ones like thieves-reprieves-heaves-cleaves-sheaves. And the repeated line gives that feeling of the rain's repeated sounds. Great use of alliteration and onomatopoeia while telling us the story of the storm's journey.
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Oh, you make me feel so good with your lovely review. Thank you for these wonderful comments.
Comment from June Sargent
This is a beautiful example of a rondeau - inspires me to give it a try. The words paint a clear and beautiful scene of a wet but still lovely day. Those silvery sleeves do mesmerize. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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This is a beautiful example of a rondeau - inspires me to give it a try. The words paint a clear and beautiful scene of a wet but still lovely day. Those silvery sleeves do mesmerize. Well done.
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Thank you so much. You should try one. It's fun to do.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written enjoyable Rondeau poem about the summer rain and how it affects everything surrounding is. Water dripping the dust becomes mud and.puddles of water everywhere.
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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A very well-written enjoyable Rondeau poem about the summer rain and how it affects everything surrounding is. Water dripping the dust becomes mud and.puddles of water everywhere.
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Don't you just love rain? I do. We've had a good bit lately. Thank you, Sandra, for this great review.
Comment from Air Spirit
This is an exceptional poem... I would give you six stars if I have any left to give... it is so descriptive, the tone is lovely, and makes you feel relaxed and comfortable.. the same feeling that one has sitting by a fireplace, watching and listening to the rain fall again the panes.. and tapping gently thin barrier as if asking to be a part of the inside romantic ambience, which is peaceful, relaxed and warm... I also love the rain.. it refreshes, cleanses, restores, and gives the earth a refreshing drink... your poem is fluid, lyrical, it has good rhythm and descriptive and vivid imagery... I love this poem, thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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This is an exceptional poem... I would give you six stars if I have any left to give... it is so descriptive, the tone is lovely, and makes you feel relaxed and comfortable.. the same feeling that one has sitting by a fireplace, watching and listening to the rain fall again the panes.. and tapping gently thin barrier as if asking to be a part of the inside romantic ambience, which is peaceful, relaxed and warm... I also love the rain.. it refreshes, cleanses, restores, and gives the earth a refreshing drink... your poem is fluid, lyrical, it has good rhythm and descriptive and vivid imagery... I love this poem, thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Oh, my goodness. What lovely comments. Thank you so much.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Yvonne, so good to see you sweet girl...the best way to read your poem...is lying in bed with the window open...falling in silent dreams...sigh...as the clean air fills the room...very well written you...I love your poem...and love your picture...and so love when it rains...love you girl...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Hi Yvonne, so good to see you sweet girl...the best way to read your poem...is lying in bed with the window open...falling in silent dreams...sigh...as the clean air fills the room...very well written you...I love your poem...and love your picture...and so love when it rains...love you girl...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Awww, you're gonna give me the big head. lol. Thank you so much, Linda. You always say the nicest things.
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your always soooo welcome sweet girl...smiling big...xxoo love you
Comment from sandy montgomery
A beautiful rondeau. Skillfully wrought. Good easy flowing verse. I like also the presentation. Excellent submission for the challenge. I think you met it. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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A beautiful rondeau. Skillfully wrought. Good easy flowing verse. I like also the presentation. Excellent submission for the challenge. I think you met it. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Thank you. I'm happy you like it.
Comment from meeshu
this is a wonderful piece, DaMom. I can picture myself on a covered back porch, safe and dry and just watching it rain. nothing else to do...........meeshu
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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this is a wonderful piece, DaMom. I can picture myself on a covered back porch, safe and dry and just watching it rain. nothing else to do...........meeshu
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Isn't that a wonderful way to spend the day? I'm so glad you could 'see' it. Thank you.
Comment from ameen786
Please accept a virtual six for this awesome write; superb phrases in outstanding rhymes and great flow and enjambment; a delightful read, thank you.
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Please accept a virtual six for this awesome write; superb phrases in outstanding rhymes and great flow and enjambment; a delightful read, thank you.
Comment Written 26-May-2018
reply by the author on 26-May-2018
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Your kind words are worth more than a six to me. Thank you so much.
