Hide and Seek
Playing hide and seek41 total reviews
Comment from ronnie k
Wonderful, the poem has its defining voice, too me, if the beautiful photo is giving center stage, I had a smile that dared too turn into a laugh., Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Wonderful, the poem has its defining voice, too me, if the beautiful photo is giving center stage, I had a smile that dared too turn into a laugh., Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Me too, Ronnie. I can?t help but laugh at that photo. I was so happy to find it. Thank you for your lovely review and five star rating
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Pamusart;
-Boy, you have rurally accentuated and embellished the fact that when one plays hide and seek the parents are definitely hiding their minds. But they hide their minds away from, can be a large amount of things.
-The picture so supportive and relative to the conceptual theme and topic of your poem.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one and good luck in the contest.
Alex
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Cheers, Pamusart;
-Boy, you have rurally accentuated and embellished the fact that when one plays hide and seek the parents are definitely hiding their minds. But they hide their minds away from, can be a large amount of things.
-The picture so supportive and relative to the conceptual theme and topic of your poem.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one and good luck in the contest.
Alex
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Thank you, krys123 for your thoughtful review and excellent rating
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You're very welcome, Pamusart.
Alex
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the clever picture to help establish the mood for your 5-7-5. I admired your punctuating your poem with the serious observation in the final line. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Thank you for sharing the clever picture to help establish the mood for your 5-7-5. I admired your punctuating your poem with the serious observation in the final line. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Joan for your lovely review and excellent rating
Comment from Katya
Oh, really nice five-seven-five poem! It's complete, astute, clear, and makes a significant point. The repetition and parallel construction make it feel firmly-structured. I like it a lot!
The picture you've used with it is really a hoot!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Oh, really nice five-seven-five poem! It's complete, astute, clear, and makes a significant point. The repetition and parallel construction make it feel firmly-structured. I like it a lot!
The picture you've used with it is really a hoot!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Katya for your lovely review and five star rating
Comment from Lulube
Yes a very cute picture. and hiding pets that peek around a corner thinking you don't know where they are, is too funny. This poem is so exactly worded to form the picture that you wanted to portray, that there is no room for any other way to say.
good luck in the contest
lulube
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Yes a very cute picture. and hiding pets that peek around a corner thinking you don't know where they are, is too funny. This poem is so exactly worded to form the picture that you wanted to portray, that there is no room for any other way to say.
good luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Lulube for your lovely review and five star rating
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Pantygynt
Yes indeed. The awareness eventually dawns sometime during the primary school years. Does it ever dawn on the adults? I am sure we all know of adults who hid their minds years ago and have forgotten now where they put them.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Yes indeed. The awareness eventually dawns sometime during the primary school years. Does it ever dawn on the adults? I am sure we all know of adults who hid their minds years ago and have forgotten now where they put them.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Lol. Maybe we?re better off if those minds are never found. Thank you for your lovely review and five star rating
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Pamusart, a clever 5/7/5, well written and a great picture. I wonder which came first the poem or the picture? Written true to form and I wish you luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Hi Pamusart, a clever 5/7/5, well written and a great picture. I wonder which came first the poem or the picture? Written true to form and I wish you luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Dorothy for your lovely review and excellent rating
Lol. The poem came first. But I was pleased to find that photo
Comment from Dawn Munro
I am laughing at the artwork you chose - it's perfect for this small poem. Just enough humor to lighten the deep psychology of your 5-7-5. Adults do hide their minds, even the most 'open' of us, or think we do. Some of us are trained to read body language though, and that's hard to fake, and very revealing. There's also the Freudian slip. It never ceases to amaze me how much people give out without realizing it, especially over time...
Well done. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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I am laughing at the artwork you chose - it's perfect for this small poem. Just enough humor to lighten the deep psychology of your 5-7-5. Adults do hide their minds, even the most 'open' of us, or think we do. Some of us are trained to read body language though, and that's hard to fake, and very revealing. There's also the Freudian slip. It never ceases to amaze me how much people give out without realizing it, especially over time...
Well done. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Thank you. Yes, that photo makes me laugh out just thinking of the little face with the eyes who can?t see and assume they can?t be seen. Thank you for your lovely review and five star rating
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5, my first reaction to the photo was exactly what you said in your notes. If I can't see you, the changes is good you cannot see me either. Lol.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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A very well-written 5-7-5, my first reaction to the photo was exactly what you said in your notes. If I can't see you, the changes is good you cannot see me either. Lol.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Sandra for your lovely review and excellent rating
Comment from N. Rabwar
This poem says a lot in very few words. Unfortunately, the world is very, very deceptive as I am just starting to learn. You can't be too literal. It is a good 5-7-5 contest entry. I wish you luck.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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This poem says a lot in very few words. Unfortunately, the world is very, very deceptive as I am just starting to learn. You can't be too literal. It is a good 5-7-5 contest entry. I wish you luck.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2018
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Hi, N. Rabwar. Do you mind my asking your age. As we get older, we hide more and more of our true thoughts. Maybe they would be mean. But, then you get old enough. You know who your friends. You accept them and they you imperfections and all. Thank you for your lovely review and excellent rating
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Asking soneone?s age is not really appropriate, and I stand by what I said
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