Comment from papa55mike

Excellent

I love this wonderful poem. The basic cycle of life, I guess what we leave behind really matters. Especially if it's love we shared with our children and friends. The picture fits perfectly.

Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike

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 Comment Written 05-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

Hi Mike Thanls so much for reading and reviewing my poem and for your encouraging words and good luck message. I also like this image it seemed to fit my concept of life and death Cheers Christine

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Chrissy,

I will be honest with you (sorry, but you know how I am with this...)

I adore, love, love(!) the message in your first two lines. It is smart, unique, highly creative and soooo powerful. BUT, then I felt like your third line fell a bit short. (sorry!)

Of course, that's merely one person's opinion, and only you know what your purpose for this poem was - so forgive me if I overstep (which I so often do...)

--sigh--

Thanks for sharing and much good luck!

(still worthy of five stars easy!)

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 Comment Written 05-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

Hi Robyn Thanks for your review and yes I struggled with the third line so thanks for letting me know Not sure if how to finish it I like the back and forth but not sure what to put in front Any suggestions or would times hands back and forth be better any suggestions welcomed Cheers Christine and Thanks so much for your review it was quick LOL x

reply by robyn corum on 05-Nov-2017

I'm getting a 'give and take' kind of relationship. I don't know if that helps?

reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

Thanks Robyn I will work on that also Cheers Christine

reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

seasons give and take ? or tick tock back and forth? Help C

reply by robyn corum on 05-Nov-2017

nature nurtures (life/globe)
buries the dead then gives birth

push and pull of Earth/time

cycles/circles of this life/earth

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I don't know. I'm so sorry if I've messed you up.